Reviewer: LupinsPrincess
Date: 11/02/08 12:57
Chapter: ....

I loved this :) I just did. I love this pairing, but I kind of hoped that they would actually have each other in the end and share a kiss or somethin' :) Though I can still imagine that they did :D

Reviewer: Viv
Date: 08/09/08 20:31
Chapter: ....

You answered the question I had since the beginning of the story only at the end! So he did recognize her when he saw her thirteen years later! So she returned in her past that night, in Come back to me, and forgot about their encouter, but he stayed in his present and remembered her all this time... This is a bit confusing, I have to admit... But Sirius must be much more confused that I am anyway! :P I feel sad for him; he waited for her to come back for so long, and she never did... The waiting must have been a torture to him, poor thing.

Your descriptions, again, are incredible. You put so much details into your writing, you find different ways to talk about simple things, such as the darkness of the sky at night or a storm that's raging outside. It makes the readers clinge to your every word, make them want to get more and more of your beautiful writing style. I know that's what it does to me. Again, very good story, even if I'm now the one with questions about Hermione's and Sirius' relationship!

Reviewer: Dory_the_Fishie
Date: 07/31/08 14:55
Chapter: ....

Hm, I can’t really decide if I like this one better or Come Back To Me. I think there are parts of each that I really like.

I have to start this review out with some constructive criticism; I’ve noticed that you tend to start your fics out in the same way, with a description of the setting. While this isn’t necessarily a bad thing, it does start to get a bit redundant after a while, and I haven’t even read all of your fics (but it does happen that all the ones I have read have started like this). Description can work really well as a beginning in some cases, but here I just don’t think it’s really necessary. You could have worked in a description of the setting throughout the piece rather than just sticking it in a couple paragraphs in the beginning.

Also, and I hope this doesn’t sound rude because I don’t mean it to be, this fic sort of feels like it’s basically Come Back To Me, just with some other stuff added. I know that Come Back To Me was more from Hermione’s point of view, and this one focuses more on Sirius, but the use of so many flashbacks becomes a tad tedious. I can see the purpose of the flashbacks, but I wish you might’ve found a more original and interesting way to use them and refer back to them, instead of just constantly switching back and forth. Additionally, it felt at times like you were saying the same thing over and over again, like some paragraphs were only there to serve as buffers between flashbacks rather than as important pieces of the fic as a whole.

On a more positive note, though, I do really like the end of this, with Sirius realizing who Hermione is, but Hermione not knowing who he is. It’s a really interesting dynamic between them, which is great. The whole storyline, the timeline being messed with a bit, works wonderfully for a Sirius/Hermione relationship, as I mentioned in my review for Come Back To Me. I look forward to reading your chaptered fic about these two and learning more about the background of everything.

So, overall, I did like this, but I thought it could have been executed a bit better. Oh, and congratulations on forty fics! That’s quite the accomplishment.

Reviewer: Lyratearsx
Date: 07/10/08 4:45
Chapter: ....

This was brilliant- sweet and you managed to stop it from being sleazy!

Sirius/ Hermione are so the best OTP!

~Lyra

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