Reviews For Enchanted Slumber
Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 08/06/08 17:28
Chapter: Chapter 1- Ben and Vampires

This is a brilliant story, I'm hooked already. I'm going to pretend the next chapter is already up and that Evie saved Ben from the remaining vampire, escorted the girl home and went back to her hotel for a restful nights sleep. I do this because cliffhangers kill me. Please update soon.

Author's Response: Aw, this review made me laugh! OK, I will bear that in mind. The next chapter is in the queue as we speak!

Reviewer: Hufflepuff at heart
Date: 08/04/08 12:09
Chapter: Chapter 1- Ben and Vampires

Aw, yay, I'm glad to see my suggestions came in useful in this chapter! :)

I agree with life_lemons; the teaming up with Ben did happen a little too soon, but don't worry, it's still going well!

Great stuff, Lyra, keep it coming!

~Sarah

Author's Response: Thanks, Sarah!

Reviewer: Lola-Louisa
Date: 07/16/08 3:01
Chapter: Chapter 1- Ben and Vampires

Woah! Very action-filled!

I liked this.

More please!

Lola x

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: life_lemons
Date: 07/15/08 20:07
Chapter: Chapter 1- Ben and Vampires

My one problem is that Ben's entrance is too sudden. Ther isn't enough time to get to know him or to care for him. Therefore, at least for me, this cliffie isn't as effectif=ve as it could have been.

Author's Response: Oh dear... Well, I kind of wanted to get to the action quickly... I'm an action junkie, you see! No, I get your point... I just kind of hoped that anyone dying might make the reader care lol. Well, we'll get to know him better in the next chapter, and I'm sure you'll care about him then. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: life_lemons
Date: 07/09/08 22:18
Chapter: Prologue- The Potion

VERY good! I was completely surprised when I found out she was Bella's daughter. Lavender for Bella... hm..interesting.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Hufflepuff at heart
Date: 07/09/08 16:20
Chapter: Prologue- The Potion

....Wow! I'm completely gobsmacked!!! I'd expected something surprising...but nothing as amazing as this! EVIE'S PARENTS ARE THE LESTRANGES?!?!?!

(ok, I'll calm down now!) That was a fantastic prologue, and knowing what's next to come, I know it's going to continue being fantastic. Really well done!
~Sarah

Author's Response: Thanks!

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