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Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/08/08 3:24
Chapter: Alone Together

I like this. I think that Pansy may have been OOC (JKR has said that she was based on girls who used to tease her), but it is feasible for some of the Slytherins to be like that, trying to put up a front and hating who they are, but not able to change.

Reviewer: Hermione_Rocks
Date: 07/07/08 12:47
Chapter: Alone Together

Aww. That was cute. I'm a total Draco/Pansy fan, and I really liked the dynamic you set up here . . . it wasn't exactly a romance, but it was companionship, and that was enough. Pansy's conflicting thoughts were very well-written, about not liking how she acted, yet unable to change who she was.

My only suggestion would be to add commas after the dialogue parts. Such as: '"No, I just want to be alone" I lied.' There should be a comma between alone and the quotation marks. The same goes for all the other dialogue bits. Otherwise, this was a very enjoyable story. It's nice to see a different side of Pansy than we normally see in the books. Great job!

Reviewer: prideisvanity
Date: 07/07/08 11:52
Chapter: Alone Together

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: feltonismine
Date: 07/07/08 11:37
Chapter: Alone Together

Although I don't usually read Draco/Pansy fics all that much, I've got to say that this fic absolutely grabbed my attention. Really well-written; great fic!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it!

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