I was excited to read this, because I’ve never read a fic of yours before, and you linked to this on LJ, and also I decided to start my SPEW reviews early this month. -wink-
First I have to mention The Beatles because I mean. The Beatles. I love that you give us the snippet of song at the beginning, just to start us off, and I love the tiny mention of them later. I’ve always sort of associated The Beatles with our beloved Marauders, so I was excited to see the connection here as well.
Take me, he murmurs to no one. I won’t be missed. That’s a fantastic line, even if it does make my heart break. But it is so very Remus, and it’s exactly, I think, how he would be feeling at this point. Also, I love the idea of Remus picking up a smoking habit. The references to Sirius and having to finish the cigarettes that Sirius couldn’t and all of that were again heartbreaking, but perfect.
I really like the way you set this fic up, with the nows and thens. It’s just a great way to put everything together without having a fic composed of random scenes all thrown together. You connected everything really well. Also, I liked the choice to use present tense for the now parts and past for the then bits. In the hands of a less-capable author that could have seriously backfired, but you handled it effortlessly and it contributes to the overall effectiveness of the fic.
I absolutely love Remus’s birthday. You write the Marauders just wonderfully, with sufficient cursing and love and awesomeness. I particularly loved how into it Sirius got with the chess, and how he was cursing all the time (reminded me of myself, I’m not gonna lie). That you have Sirius losing terribly to Peter is poignant as well. I’m glad, of course, that your Peter is actually a person and not a horribly written character that people include just because they have to.
Sirius had to remain there, locked from the world, the world locked from him. Another great line. I think that one is one of my favorites from this fic. I loved this as well: “Because you’re always the one who worries.” Oh, Remus. That’s perfect, once more. You rock.
The letters were another wonderful touch to this. I love them. James being allowed to call Remus an old chap because he has tea. Gold. (And incidentally, I happen to be drinking tea right now.) And Peter saying he’ll be up for Halloween, oh man. That’s…yes. More heartbreaking for me.
And finally: “You prick,” he mutters, glancing one last time at the star before turning towards the window through which he climbed earlier. I love that so much. The last line of this, too. A wonderful, sad, perfect way to end this. I’m so glad I decided to click this and read it, because it’s a lovely, lovely fic. You did an exceptional job. Write more Marauders, please?
Author's Response: Dude, thank you. Loads and loads. Thanks for all your lovely comments, and especially for taking the time out to review, too. I'll definitely have more Marauders up as the summer progresses. Maybe a Black fic? ;) *hugs*
Oh, I forgot to mention that I love that you have Peter beating Sirus at chess. I think that he is usually mentioned, or ignored in fanfics, and I'm glad that you didn't do it here.
Author's Response: Thanks! =D
Very well written, I love al the memories and the ending was quite funny in a way. You've perfectly described how people often feel when they lose somebody too. Another for my favourites.
Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you!
You made just the right mix of happy schooltimes and bitter memories. I could totally see Remus reacting the way he did to Sirius' death. I think my favorite part was Remus' memory of his birthday, or else the very last line about the star. This was a brilliant fic!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really enjoyed writing his birthday memory; the Marauders amuse me way too much, haha. I'm glad you liked it. =)
Wonderful! It's sad and poignant and incredibly touching. Very well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! =)
I liked this, although I think that it would have been more in character for Remus to throw himself into the war effort. If it was set after Lily and James' deaths then I think that it would be more realistic. However this seems to be what he decides to do at the end, and you can't distract yourself all the time, no matter how hard you try.
Author's Response: No, it's not set right after the Potters' death; it's right after Sirius falls into the veil - around the night of, or the night immediately after. I figured Remus would need some time to pull himself together after the death of his friend, hence the story. I'm glad you liked it, though. Thanks for the review! =)