Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 08/03/08 18:58
Chapter: Impressions

Well Katie, I must say that you have a way with Tom Riddle at eleven years old that I find totally and completely believable.

“You’re going to regret insulting me,” Tom said so softly only he and the sixth year heard it. Tom’s voice was silky smooth, and he could sense the sixth year’s discomfort as he visibly drew back from Tom.

“We’ll see,” the older boy said quietly, trying to sound braver than he felt.

“Yes,” Tom replied unflinchingly, looking him in the eye. “We certainly will.”


I mean, how much more Riddle-like could this dialogue get? Truly, I think that you have him in very good with his characterization. I’ve not read many fics about him at his school age, but I think that this was a great interpretation of a very young and well, he isn’t naive, but not as evilly corrupt yet, so his intrigue of Hogwarts is just beginning and I think you showed that beautifully.

I also think that you have the Sorting Hat perfectly in character. It’s song was very well written and had a great flow, but then again your poetry is beyond words, so it is no wonder why.

Great work. I can’t wait to read what comes next!

-Haylee

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/21/08 3:54
Chapter: Impressions

I liked this. I think that you have done a brilliant job characterizing Tom, and the others reaction to him being an orphan, not knowing his blood.

Author's Response:

Thank you! I really tried to keep him in-character, and I'm glad that it paid off. =] Thanks for the review! =]

Reviewer: washedmemories
Date: 07/19/08 10:42
Chapter: Impressions

Not bad at all. A few passive voice usages, but other than that, I liked it. Can't wait for more

Author's Response: Thank you. =] Chapter Two is going to my betas sometime tonight, so you won't have to wait long! Thanks for the review! =]

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