pretty intriguing; u could continue this one.
I like this. Narcissa's attitude to Bella in Half Blood Prince makes me think that the way she feels about Bella here is plausible, and the narration is very good.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it:)
This was fantastic! I was extremely impressed by the enitre thing,- the plot, narration, inflection. Ir was all really great. Just an idea, but would you be willing to do this sort of story again from her childhood. If you do, I would love to read it. Anyway great story!
Author's Response: Thank you so freaking much! Wow, I've never actually gotten a request before-excitementtt! I dn't know, I'm really bad at chapter stories, just because i never update. But I'll deffff think about it!:)