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Reviews For Of Life and Death

Name: Bardic Fire (Signed) · Date: 08/28/08 21:06 · For: Of Life and Death
WOW, This is Jared, from Renn Faire... That was great... you need to write more, look I mean I'm a writer (Of original stuff more than FanFiction actually) and I have a hard time writing with that level of detail or description... that was great... write more I wanna see a series of something, at least a multi chapter instead of One Shots.

Name: sam_1034_lily (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 18:54 · For: Of Life and Death
i luved the last line it was great

Name: Elf01 (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 11:52 · For: Of Life and Death
I was finally able to read this. I think that you have created a nice one shot here. I liked how you wrote this. Helena thinking herself too good for the Baron is IC from what we know, and you have created a beliveable reason for her choosing to become a ghost.

However I think that I would have liked to know the characters better. I didn't feel for them the way I should have. Perhaps this is intentional (and to an extent works): Helena is primarly concerned with aquiring knowledge, and a lack of emotion fits her. However you stated that she felt sorry that her mother was dying, and I would have liked to see that more.

Once again it was overall a nice fic.

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