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Reviewer: missacharae
Date: 06/26/08 7:06
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

this is sooo sad!! :'C
well donee
i like your version of lupin's death, now that i think about it, it's very likely that's what happened

Author's Response: His death was the hardest, but at the same time the easiest since we don't know precisely how it happened. But thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 06/26/08 3:59
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

I enjoyed this. I agree with megan_lupin that you did a good job getting into each characters head, and I also like how you portrayed Peter.

You also did a good job with the other characters; James telling Lily and Harry to go; Sirus duelling Bellatrx; Remus' concern for Tonks and Harry, and him wondering what would become of Teddy if Tonks died. I like how you write Remus' death.

I'd like if you left a few more lines between each character. While it was obvious after the first time the transition from James to Sirus was difficult to grasp at first, and I think that this would have been easier with more lines or astericks.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'll look into what I could do to make it easier.

Reviewer: padfootsgirl1981
Date: 06/26/08 3:55
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

Wow! You very very nearly reduced me to tears there! I'm writing a Marauder Era fic myself and I'm so attached to the characters tnat I'm dreading writing the death scenes. So this was very poignant, it made me think of when I too as a fanfic writer am going to have to say goodbye to the characters.

This was wonderfully written, and a wonderful idea! Thank you so much for the read!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I came up with this idea like while I was at work and it just stuck until I finally typed it all out. I'm so glad that this fic had such an affect though, thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 06/25/08 23:12
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

OK, here's a bit that needs improving:

But none’s shock could match my own as I looked at the evil hand. I watched with pure fear as they began to make their way to my throat.

Make that "no one's shock" and "as the fingers began to make their way" and it will be easier to understand.

On the whole, I liked it. A lot!

Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I'll change that right away!

Reviewer: Malfoy_Star92
Date: 06/25/08 21:39
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

Oh My God, this story is amazing. I can hardly see the screen on my computer I'm crying so hard. I love it. This story touched me more than any other story on this site. I can't get over it, I LOVE this story. LOVE IT, LOVE IT, LOVE IT!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you loved it, I was very nervous about how it would turn out so a review like that really made my day. Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 06/25/08 21:06
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

Very nice tribute! I liked it!

Author's Response: Thanks, I was not sure what some might think and I was anxious to see what happened, so thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: Wicked_Quill
Date: 06/25/08 20:41
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

That was absolutely amazing. There really is nothing left to say but wow!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this fic!

Reviewer: megan_lupin
Date: 06/25/08 19:27
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

Oh, you did a very good job on that. I like that each scene isn't stretched out indefinitely. They're short and to the point, yet still powerful/meaningful.

The first-person point of view was also a good way to tell this little one-shot. Normally, I'm not a fan of stories written in that PoV, but like I said, it works here.

You also did a good job with getting inside each character's head, and I like your portrayal of Peter here, especially. So many fan fic writers portray him in a butchered manner, and while I'll admit that I hate him with utmost passion, one needs to be fair to the character. And you do that, here.

The quotes from the book were nice in here, as well, and I liked the fact that you had the Map's lines start the fic and end it. Nice touch, there, as was the last bit at the end, uniting them all.

My only quip would be what amounts to a typo, I'm sure:

I am Prongs. I am Sirius Black.

I'm sure you meant to type "Padfoot" there ;)

All in all, though, like I said before, you did a nice job with this.

~Megan

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! This was my first Marauder one-shot (I didn't realize I'd put Prongs instead of Padfoot, I'll fix it, thank you for telling me). I love that you liked how I did Peter's part, I didn't want to get too sappy or anything over the top so I'm glad you liked it!rn>Maxi

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 06/25/08 18:33
Chapter: We solemnly swear that we were up to no good...

*sniff* that's depressing.. in a good way though! :-D good story!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! This was my first Marauder one-shot and I'm glad it got a good review.rn>Maxi

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