love it, has a nice poetic feel
Very, very sad and sweet. I love the Marauders, and it always breaks my heart reading about their deaths and struggles. This is beautifully written and conveys the pain they all went through, especially Peter, whom, to me, would be the hardest to justify.
Wow. I love this story
You definitely got into to character's heads and portrayed them perfectly.
The way you described Remus's death made me cry.
The last line was the perfect ending and I now have a new appreciation of those words.
The only thing that I think would improve it was if you could expand on the Prongs section.
I felt it was too short compared to the other sections, not quite enough time to fully connect with his character.
But that could just be me ;)
Please write more, you are an amazing writer
I'm absolutely BAWLING as I write this review.
*sob sob**sniffle sniffle*
You did a great job (thus my crying)! I always say the mark of a truly great author is if they make you cry. You have succeeded!
Well first of all, well done at going for such a strong structure; few would've had the guts. However, there is reason why not - few can pull it off, and I'm sorry to say on this occasion you weren't quite one of them.
The sections of the piece were very clear and I understood your aim in the 'I was' and 'I am' dividers, but I felt that the boundaries you created didn't so much keep the piece clean cut, but rather castrated it.
That being said, I liked the individual stories, and your interpretation of Lupin's death was very interesting. The speed with which a live can end came across well.
I LOVE it especially how remus died!
fantastic i love it especially the remus bit!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
First of all, your summary was fantastic Some writers write terrific stories but don't provide an intriguing summary. Yours was great. Now on to the actual story:
Ahem, drumroll please,
Beautiful! Fantastic! Wonderful! Genius! Real! Wow, I sound like a bribed critic! (But I'm not) Each was described wonderfully and truthfully. I wish you could have found a little more good in wormtail but I believe each marauder got a wonderful tribute from you
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I actually thought I didn't do too well on the summary but I guess I did! I apologize for such a late response to your review but this is the first time I've been able to access this site in a long time. My laptop and computer say that it's a 400 database error and I've been trying to find a solution to it. Thanks again for your amazing review!
No Problem. :)
So simple, so powerfull, so structured, so wonderful.
I have never read a fic like this, though a one-shot and it MUST stay like this.
I love this.
Mischief managed, mate :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the wonderful compliment! I've been having trouble with my computer and can't get onto this site. I had to come to the library after my mom and I tried to figure out the solution. Thanks again, keep the magic alive!
I thought this was... wonderful. And amazing. And true. I love the whole layout of the story, especially the part at the very end. Thanks for a great story!
Author's Response: Thanks! I tried to make it as believable as I could, Lupin's was the hardest since we don't know what happened with him and Tonks. Thank you for the review!
I think you captured the four Mauraduers perfectly. It was with a tear in my eye and a lump in my throat when I read "Mischief Managed". Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that I had that affect on someone.
wow i luved it it was great and i luved how u described it all especially lupins and i luved the ending n the marauders r my fav but its really sad how all of them ended upm dead but it was a great tribute for all of them gud job
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Very moving story. Only change I would make is at the end where you said dead October 1981, etc I think you should have said died.
Otherwise it was wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you! And I'll look at what would sound better.
very nice writing style. good work! :]
Author's Response: Thank you!
I have added you to my favorite authors so I will know when you do update and I will make sure to check them out. I can't wait.
Author's Response: That's so sweet of you! Thanks for that!
wowowowow! i luv it luv it luv it! cool idea, and a great tribute to them!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! That was very nice of you to think so!
I'm glad that it made you happy. You deserve to feel great after a story like that. Write More!
Author's Response: I am working on two other stories, their not one-shots but I hope that you'll check in on those when they're up!
Simply amazing. I thought you did a great job by using the book quotes and then your on spin on what they may have been thinking. The part at the end where it shows how they went from 4 to 1 to 4 again was pretty sweet to. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you! I almost didn't put that part in there, but something just told me that it'd be perfect.
Wow, Max! This is a very well-written fic you've got here! My favorite part was Peter- though I do have some nitpicks.
I don't think he would call Hermione a Mudblood or Ron a blood traitor. After all, he called Hermione 'sweet girl' and 'clever girl, and he was Ron and Percy's pet for 12 years. Just a thought.
This was lovely! Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!