Reviews For Crumbling
Reviewer: Palmer Smith
Date: 08/24/08 21:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this.  I'm a big sucker for anything Sirius Black.  I like the point of view and you used good, short sentences and intense verbs to make the action grow.  Well done!  What's next?  :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! The sequel is called "Memoirs of Azkaban", and it is almost done. It's on hold right now because I had surgery on my arm, but once that's healed I can get it up and running. Keep a lookout for it!

Reviewer: cjbaggins
Date: 07/26/08 8:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great first fic! I was a bit confused at first about Sirius saying he *would* be in hiding (I mean, how would he know?) but that made sense at the end, of course, cuz his imprisonment had already happened. Like another reviewer, I was not clear that he had visited Peter's house first, but as soon as he travelled to Godric's Hollow, I figured it out. I'm not sure if there is a way to clear that up ... I love the bit about Hagrid and Harry. Nice touch that. Well done! cj

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm sorry about the confusion. It made sense to me, but that's probably only because I wrote it and thus knew what was going to happen. :p But I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 07/21/08 16:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked this story, and I too loved that last couple paragraphs. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, and I'm glad you liked it! Hopefully the sequel will be just as good.

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 07/06/08 18:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

*tears* poor sirius! great story, very well--written!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! And the sequel to this should be done soon, so keep on the lookout!

Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 07/04/08 1:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

First of all, CONGRATULATIONS on getting this validated! =D

Because I’m Sirius Black, a rule breaker, defiant to the end, daring, reckless. You don’t think I can do it?

Watch me.

Oh, I LOVE this part, like I told you before. :p I loved the whole one shot, but this was the best. =)



Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing Afifa! And that's my favorite part too. It was so much fun to write. =D

Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 07/03/08 21:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

i liked it a lot gud job

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 07/03/08 3:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi. I think that this is well written but I think that Sirus trusted Peter. I don't think that he'd have suggested the switch if he thought that Peter would crack under pressure, even if he was acting as a decoy Secret Keeper. He also suspected Remus of being the spy, meaning that he had trust in Peter. I would also like to point out that Peter was sorted into Gryffindor, while I can't see his bravery, he must not have been a coward. The Sorting Hat knows things about you that you don't know yourself (think of Neville and Hermione). I don't think that Sirus would have thought of Peter as being a coward. Also at one point you have Sirus think of Peter as Pettigrew, I think that Peter or Wormtail would be more likely.

Canon Error: You have Sirus go directly to Godrics Hollow, when he states that he went to check on Peter first.

Sorry for the harshness. I do think that it's well written, but it disagrees with my views on canon too much for me to like it as much as I would have if it did.

Author's Response: Don't be sorry! I welcome the criticism! But I want to clarify. First, Sirius does go and check on Peter first in my fic. Second, as for Sirius refering to Peter as Pettigrew, I did that because Sirius was already in Azkaban and already betrayed when he's telling the story, so he's not too fond of him now. I'm sorry if that was unclear. And I also don't believe Peter was bad from the beginning, it's just that Sirius's viewpoint of him is now a bit biased. I hope that makes sense. And thank you for your views. I really appreciate it!

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