Reviews For The Moon and Sun
Reviewer: solemnlyswear_x
Date: 12/22/08 19:16
Chapter: The Moon and Sun

I loved the day/night and sun/moon metaphors - I think it fits Lily and Sev really well (as the sun and moon, respectively, right?).

And even though this poem doesn't rhyme, I liked that there was still a rhythm to it. While reading, it seemed like every word was chosen carefully and for specific reason. One question - did you mean to end both the second and fourth stanza with the word 'apart'? Just something I was wondering. :)

- Melissa

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it! And no... I don't think I did! But I wrote it a really long time ago, so I'm not sure! ~margaret

Reviewer: dani123
Date: 07/07/08 11:58
Chapter: The Moon and Sun

Whoa... This was your first fic? Golly, you have some talent. "And yet exist to be apart" is an amazing line. Very good job on this poem! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's my favorite line of the poem, so I'm glad you found it powerful! :D

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 06/21/08 12:08
Chapter: The Moon and Sun

Oooh! Great poem! It was brilliantly written, and I saw the metaphor in it (we just did a poetry unit in Literature) and I can never find them!! I'm guessing Severus was the moon, and Lily was the sun??? Anyway, it was great! I hope you write more! {BeccA}

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm definitely planning on writing more!rnrnPS-You were right about Lily and Severus, good for you!

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