I think that perhaps I am sobbing. This was extremely angsty and perfect. I loved the flashbacks. The conversations were remarkably in character and wonderful. Thanks for this.
Far and away the best characterization of Remus I have read in a fanfiction -- so very touching and sad and really brings home an issue I have always struggled with: why did Remus and Sirius suspect each other of being the traitor? Obviously, the Marauder's weren't as tight as they all wanted to imagine they were, or if they were, then that was torn away by the war. I liked the imagine of "Sirius couldnt be torn away from James and Remus couldn't be torn away from Lily." I think that also shows how Peter could have ended feeling the outsider and fallen to old Voldy.
This is one of the most moving, believable Marauder fics I have read on MNFF. The concept is amazing in itself. Your characterisation of Remus was perfect in all times of his life. The journey you take him through is credible but unique at the same time and incredibly moving. I admit, I cried at the end, so touching. I love the idea of Remus toasting his lost friends. The story of the Marauders' is certainly a tragic one and you have caught the bittersweet tragedy with a refined style which I love. I absolutely abhor melodrama and you avoided that so I applaud you. I always think it is so sad that none of the Marauders, in fact most of that generation including Snape died well before their time. Those boys at Hogwarts who had gallavanted around, playing pranks and enjoying everything life has to offer never would have thought that none of them would survive to see fifty. Whenever I read the books I always think about that, it's just so tragic. But anyway, well done. This is definitely going into my favourites and good luck for your QSQ nomination. This fic is truly deserving.
Author's Response: As I've gotten older, I've found myself thinking, "Lupin would be teaching at Hogwarts at my age" or "Sirius would be dead at the age I am now." It bothers me to no end that not even one of them lived 'til the end of their natural lives. If there was one thing I'd take JKRowling to task for, it would be that. Anyhow... I fought the idea of Remus toasting Peter more than what he did. I thought people might come after me with pitchforks and torches. But knowing he'd forgiven Sirius for The Prank with Snape and knowing the weariness that comes from too much war and not enough peace, I thought Remus might very well be likely to make that distinction between what Peter was once and what Wormtail had turned out to be. But, gosh, I'm so glad you thought it wasn't melodramatic and that I wrote Remus' character well. Sometimes, good characterisations can carry a story even if there are plot holes a mile wide, so I try to 'nail' those characters as well as I can. Thanks for the wonderful review--and thanks for letting me know my story had been nominated! I didn't know!
Great story! I actually got a little bit teary at the end : )
Author's Response: Er, sorry? : ) Thanks so much for reading this one--and letting me know you liked it. It was my first 'baby' and it's rather near and dear to me!
Loved it :). Simply loved it :)
Author's Response: Good! I'm really glad that you did!
OMG! i LOVED this! this is going on my favorites list! the Marauders are awesome!
Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked it. I love the Marauders too. Their stories are just so tragic, and make for some great angst. Thanks for putting it on your list of favorites! I really appreciate it!
OMG! i LOVED this! this is going on my favorites list! the Marauders are awesome!
This was beautiful and sad. I was close to crying during the flashback of their last night before the charm, Sirius was so cruel and yet i can understand his motives. If only Remus realised then that Peter was the spy, because Sirius would never act like that if he'd betrayed them all. There are those two words again, if only. Anyway, I really liked Remus drinking to them all, even Peter, I despise him as a character, but like Remus said he was once a marauder and as Sirius said Moony is the conscience, he knows right from wrong, so maybe i'll trust his judgement. I think my favourite part was the marauders words on the breeze at the end, it left me feeling warm and slightly less sad. Excellent fic and a definite gap filler.
Author's Response: "If only..." are the two saddest words in the English language. I'm really glad you liked it, and that last part is one of my favorites too. I was really bummed that we never saw Remus' reaction to Peter's death. But I was also disappointed we didn't see Remus' death scene... JKRowling didn't see fit to ask me my opinion beforehand, unfortunately... Anyhow, as I said, I'm glad you liked the story! Thank you so much for such a great review!
You have me teary eyed.
very well done.
Author's Response: Ah, I consider it a badge of honor if someone admits they were teary eyed! (Just as long as that someone wasn't teary eyed thinking, "Well, that was fifteen minutes of my life I'll never get back again...") Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
That was a beautiful story... I love the Marauderes and I usually read lots of stories about their early days, when they were young and happy... is sad, but nice also, to read something that reminds us of how sad the tale of the Marauders ends...
Author's Response: I feel the same way: I love stories about the Marauders in their earlier, happy days. Because of that, I was a little surprised to find myself writing something like this. But, once the idea took root, I just had to write the thing and hope that it would turn out well. I'm glad you liked it!
That was so touching and sweet and completely believable. It felt like a moment that probably happened and J.K. Rowling just didn't include it. I absolutely loved this. You included little details that aren't exactly necessary to the story but made it so much more intimate and beautiful. And the ending was so perfect-made me tear up and everything. You're very talented and I can't wait to read more of your writing. Great job!
Author's Response: I hardly know what to say! I'm really glad you found it believable. J.K. Rowling has done an amazing job of giving us wonderful characters, and I hoped my interpretation of them (especially Remus and Sirius) might be faithful to her vision. So, thank you very, very much for the great review!
Wow. This was incredable. Thank you for writing this. It's the most realistic look at the betrayal that I've read. Simply beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. It made me feel all warm and fuzzy, because I did really want to portray Sirius and Remus as realistically as possible. I'm glad you think I succeeded! Thanks again!
very well written dis one has to be one of ma fav very sad n at da same time amazing marauders r ma fav gud job
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love the Marauders too, and really hoped I could do them justice in this. I'm glad you liked it!
WOW. your story blew my mind! such an explorarion on the impact of Wormtails death on Lupin JKR would be hard pressed to improve upon.
Author's Response: You've completely blown me away with your review! Thank you so very, very much for the compliment! (And I'd LOVE to know how JKR would have Lupin react... 'Course, we'll never know since she KILLED him... Sigh.) Thanks again!
Amazing, funny, sad and just brilliant!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was glad you found it funny and sad--and grateful that you found it "amazing...and brilliant." It made my day (I was having a lousy one until then)!
I enjoyed this. Even after what Peter did he had been Remus's friend, and Remus would acknowledge that.
I also like Sirus and Remus discussing the events. They would want to make sense of what Peter had done, and while Remus forgave Sirus in the shrieking shack it was only natural that he would get defensive whenever his loyalty was called into question after that.
Now the nitpicks:
I don't see James calling Dumbledore "the Old Man". I think that this would be better as Albus or Dumbledore.
Also from the conversation in the shrieking shack I don't think that Sirus would be that obvious in front of Remus, or directly accusing him as you have written. Maybe have something more subtle like instead of grabbing Harry of Remus have him ask to hold his godson a few minutes after Remus picks him up. Also have him ask Remus what he is up to in a less confrontational manner.
Since you mention alchol a lot you might consider adding a substance abuse warning or something similar to what you did about the swearing.
Despite the nitpicks I did enjoy the story so don't take them personally.
Author's Response: Well, not too personally... Thanks for taking the time to leave such a detailed review. It's interesting to see exactly what people like/dislike about a story you've written. I'm glad you liked it overall!
I didn't expect this story to be so good. It's fascinating, really. A wonderful story with wonderful characters.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad it turned out to be better than you thought it would be, and that you liked it!
That was incredibly well written... I enjoyed the differences between it and the standard marauder ear stories. You are a very talented writer.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm speechless--and that's a very rare thing! rnI love the Marauders years--and the Marauders(!)--so I always strive to do the best I can to make them 'live.' I'm glad you liked it!
What a beautiful story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Among all the sad, heart ripping things you wrote this: "The hand moved, the glass tipped, and more wine splashed on the floor. And, against his better judgment, after several minutes of arguing, Remus proved that, yes, he could clean a spot out of carpet without a wand, thank you very much." And that's the brilliant, amazing, genius (I could go on and on..) in this fic... I had to fight the urge to cry..and then I stumbled across lines with Moony searing and then I laughed.. You have your ways with words!
And : "Peter—Peter was a Marauder." So good, so good!
Enough said, this goes definitly to my favs!
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the amazing review! I'm the kind of person that has to find humor in the darkest moments, so I find myself saying horribly inappropriate things at funerals and such. So every time I found myself getting sucked into the angst of this, I HAD to throw in something light-hearted. Finding the balance was tricky! Glad you enjoyed it!