Reviewer: A H
Date: 09/13/08 4:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

I have never, in all my time reading (that'd be about my whole life) have I ever come across a style so magnificently original as yours. At first I was kind of daunted by the description that you use (it was almost overwhelming) but as I kept reading, it started to flow much better.

I guess I'm just not used to FANFREAKIGNTASTIC description.

Ahem.

What I loved most about this story was how you didn't use dialog or a lot of the character's thoughts to guide the reader. From description, scenery, and atmosphere alone, you created emotion and feeling. I didn't have to know Draco's immediate thoughts (i.e, what he thought was behind the curtain, why he was scared of the forest behind him, etc) to know his thoughts, if you get what I mean.

And another thing:

And yet he held back, for what was he but a fool in the dark?

This line was brilliant. You created the atmosphere for what lied behind - where he is trapped - and what he could not reach, and then made the meaning clear with this. It was clever and just... brilliant.

Personally I think this would've made an amazing one shot, but you've definitely got a hooked reader if it's going to be continued.

And you're amazing, if I didn't mention that.

Arianna

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 06/06/08 3:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

I like your description, and the premise of the fic. I'm not so keen on the poetry, but that is just me and nothing to do with your writing.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! The poetry just happened, and the poem that I wrote, as the song, I admit was simply awful, but I can't write songs to save my life! Originally I had the work of another author, but I thought it would be better being all my own work, even if the song isn't as good. Thanks for reviewing! xx Take care Chicky.

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