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Reviews For Wake Up

Name: Calico (Signed) · Date: 06/19/08 10:04 · For: Epilogue
I think this fic was an accurate depiction of what the Weasley's would have gone through after Fred's death. It isn't nice, it isn't happy, but it makes sense. Your writing was excellent, too.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad that you can imagine the Weasley's reacting like this after the war and I'm especially pleased that you like my writing. rnThanks for the review.

Name: Ren Shire (Signed) · Date: 06/18/08 16:04 · For: George
wow. just wow.

Author's Response: thanks for the review - I hope that means you liked it!

Name: cjbaggins (Signed) · Date: 06/16/08 10:12 · For: George
I didn't think I'd enjoy this, but found myself, about three-quarters of the way through each chapter getting into the emotions. Two nit-picks: in the first chapter the emergency portkey glows red, in the second, it is the usual blue colour. Also, near the end of chapter two, Fred says, "Our family need you." If I remember my grammar correctly, family is a collective, singular noun and the word should therefore be needS with the 's'. Anyway, well done. Good fic. Didn't mind the angst and self-injury from George. Most people find it difficult to accept him feeling that way as it is such a departure from his usual self. However, I believe Fred's death would hit him very hard, and although he would recover with time, he would be in a dark place at first. Keep writing. cj

Author's Response: thanks so much for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it even though you thought you wouldn't. Thanks for pointing out those things - I had changed the portkey colour on one file but obviously it wasn't the one I uploaded - I'll go fix that as well as the needs thing.rnI thought this probably wouldn't get a great reaction because it portrays the twins' serious side and is quite intense but I couldn't stop the plot bunnies and I knew that the twins must have a serious side especially after everything that happened. rnanyway, thanks again for taking the time to review - it's very much appreciated.rn-Hannah

Name: ringobeatlesfan4 (Signed) · Date: 06/15/08 19:44 · For: George
Aww man George was emo... creepy. But I think he went back, and told everyone what happened, and that everything went back to how it was after the funeral without George being locked in his room. I'm rather happy, as today is my best friend's birthday. Hannah, this rocked. 100000/10 {BeccA}

Author's Response: I think that in time George would return to his former self, he would just need a bit of time to heal. I think having some closure with Fred will have helped as well. Thanks for the review and I hope you liked this.

Name: Lily_Luna_Potter (Signed) · Date: 06/14/08 19:57 · For: George
Fred is emo. That's quite...strange. I've never even tried to imagine him when he wasn't laughing like mad at Percy.

Author's Response: I don't think many people have tried to imagine either of the twins as anything but jokers but I think even they would have become serious after everything they went through. rnThanks for the review.

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 06/07/08 18:56 · For: Ron
Well, I loved it! It is a sad story of one person's depressed state while still grieving over his twin brother.
I, for one, would like to see George wake up and be surrounded by his family, who love him dearly.
Ron did his best to revive his brother, and he should'nt feel guilty about not doing more...And I'm sure Ron will be true to his word about helping out and being with his brother more.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked it. rnI think that if George does wake up, he will definitely need his family there and I, like many other authors, see Ron as important in his recovery - he's a character that I'm becoming very fond of.rnrn-Hannah

Name: Sly One (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 14:44 · For: Ron

Now that is mean.....you are on mugglenet with  hundreds of persons with stories about their grief over Fred do you honestly expect us to say "sure go ahead. Kill the last twin!" So if an answer is needed...don't you friggin dare!  LOL Thanks for the story.


Author's Response: hehe! Now you know why I left it open - I was afraid that if I finished him off them I might end up with a mob chasing me, but I don't like giving endings that are too happy! Thanks for the read and review and don't worry - if I continue this, I wouldn't dare kill him!rnrn-Hannah

Name: anath (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 11:54 · For: Ron
Amazing story, so sad and beautiful. I hope George will make a recovery.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked it!rnrn-Hannah

Name: dumbledorefluertwins (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 11:51 · For: Ron
This is really good, dear. :) I think you captured Ron's worry very well. I especially like how it started out as a normal day, as if nothing was wrong. The one thing I would crit you on, however, is at the start. You don't need to go through every single step of Ron making a cup of tea. ;) There is good detial and un-needed detail, and this wasn't especially needed. Other than that, really good, and I like how you left the reader hanging. :)

~Evie/apollo13 (Don't ask me why I have different names, it's a long and complicated story.)

Author's Response: I think you could be right about the tea-making - when it started off as a drabble I was heading for an `everything is completely normal` approach before ending with the discovery of George and I think I went a bit too far to emphasise the normality before getting into something a bit more dramatic.rnrnThanks for the read and review - glad you liked it!rnrn-Hannah

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 10:09 · For: Ron
I like it. I do have a technical quibble. I don't know that breathing into his mouth would restart the heart - for that you generally need chest compression, I believe. You might want to check on that.

Blowing into his mouth WOULD possibly clear the airway, and would get more oxygen into his lungs. You only have four mintues of no Oxygen before brain damage starts to set in, generally.

I likethe concept of the story in general. I like the combination of Muggle and Magical medicine. II think there is a lot of interesting stuff you can do here. Do we get to see into George's mind, for example?

Also a nice job on Ron, I think.


Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. You're probably right about the resuscitation - I should have fact checked that more thoroughly, I'll go in and edit it once I have a moment to redo that bit.rnrnI'm not sure whether I will go on to develop this but I can think of several different ways and POVs I could continue (have just had plot bunny as I write this!) I'm glad you thought Ron was well-done; I'm beginning to grow quite fond of him as a character. rnrn-Hannah

Name: harry_victoria (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 9:07 · For: Ron
Very nice story. Angsty, but very good. Kudos to you for a job well done. xx.

Author's Response: thanks for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it - I have great fun writing angst, especially in something like this when you can be quite angsty.

Name: Elf01 (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 7:46 · For: Ron
I love the story. George would naturally be depressed after Freds death and may try something like that.

I would have liked to see a definite end, but I understand why you left it open ended.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review - I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was tempted to give it a more definite ending but I knew there would be unhappy people either way and I may find myself wanting to expand on it later.

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