Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 06/07/08 7:43
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow. great job on this sonnet. I was tapping along the whole way. You've got talent!

Author's Response: Thanks! My beta helped me a bit, but I thought this was a fun poem for a nice change! I appreciate the review!

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 05/30/08 20:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

LOL!! I love the last two lines. I think the entire thing is perfect! hehe Cyns

Author's Response: Thanks! :) I had fun with this poem!

Reviewer: Nevilles Girl
Date: 05/29/08 15:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love how it's an advertisement. It's really a fun sonnet. I could really see all the products. Sometimes the rhythm seemed a bit off (only if it's supposed to in iambic pentameter) and the punctuation was off in the third quatrain.

Done with the mechanical side, I loved how it painted a picture. Or, as my English teacher says, "Such rich imagery, you can just see the [insert whatever is being described]."

My favourite part was:
"And Skiving Snack Boxes assist smart schemes."

This has alliteration (undoubtably my favourite literary device). So this is the second poem I read from you and loved so I'm off to check out your other stories!


Author's Response: Thanks for another great review. I love to write poetry, so as you see I have a bit of it here. Hope you enjoy some of my other poems/stories!

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