Poor girl... no one deserves to be treated like that... i thought he might have had a little bit more sympathy though.... cant wait for more!
Tchuh... once a Slytherin, always a Slytherin. Good choice of reaction - I was worried you'd make him unnaturally soppy. :) But far from! Tenterhooks...
Author's Response: Nope! No sappiness for Rickert =] Thanks for reviewing--the next chapter will be along shortly.
*cries* How sad. So dramatic.... Rickert's such a JERK! *continues to sob*
Author's Response: Yeah, Rickert is a jerk, isn't he? Sorry I made you cry =P Thanks for reviewing!
I hate this guy.
Excellently written, however. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I love writing this story, Rickert's character especially. Thanks for reviewing!
OMG!!! CALLED IT!!! lol. What a well-written chapter... poor Persephone... Rickert needs to PROPOSE.. or she'll leave him and live with her new baby... maybe it'll be a boy? She has too many women in her family, so I think it'll be a boy. I'm so excited! lol. You've been writing a lovely story, don't worry about its length.
Author's Response: haha thanks so much! =]
OMG, you really have me on tenterhooks for the next chapter, I keep coming back and checking for it about every hour or so. I was wondering right in the beginning of the chapter if she was pregnant and my suspicions were proved correct. :D I'm kinda curious as to what Rickert's reaction is going to be, I'm hoping a good one. I'm also curious as to how things would've gone if she had gone to the St. Mungo's when she got sick in the restaurant with him and he would've found out right away.
Author's Response: I just submitted the next chapter. It might be up like today, or in a week. Hopefully it'll be up soon =] Thanks for reviewing!
Ha ha, I knew it, I knew it! The pregnancy should force SOMETHING to happen; Persephone has been floundering about with her doubts for so long, now she really can't shy away for much longer! Rickert reminds me of my maths teacher. Rather oddly. Is he based on anyone at all? Do I detect a whiff of dear old Severus in his sneers?
Author's Response: I believe I may have mentioned this in another response to a review...anyway, I picture Rickert as a cross between Snape, Rhett Butler from Gone With the Wind, and Big from Sex and the City, all inside the body of Jim Sturgess. The next chapter is quite action-packed; it will be up shortly =] Thanks for reviewing!
yay! now i know for sure! i cant wait to read rickert's reaction.... i've also noticed that you've stopped calling him charles and are back to using rickert again...
Author's Response: i actually never called him charles in the narration, only in dialogue. It was just too awkward a switch to make so suddenly. thanks for reviewing!
Okay, so I sat down last night, looking for a distraction from my homework since I've given up Facebook for Lent. Anyway, I stumbled across your story and devoured all 40 chapters in one night. I have to say, this is AMAZING.
And I don't even LIKE OC stories, usually. But I'm a sucker for unrequited love, and I'm pretty sure this story is the number 1, most unrequited love story...ever. And it's well-written, which is rare.
Now, about the story:
1. I loved Rickert, until they moved in together. Now he's...meh. :) He's okay, but he's not my favorite guy out there.
2. LORELEI AND CLAUDE??? I liked Lorelei because, as I said, I'm a sucker for unrequited love. But she's being...erm, how shall i say this?...an idiot, and that's the abridged version. And so is Claude. Just because your marriage is doomed, Claude, doesn't mean you can just cheat on your wife! Although, CLEARLY, teenaged marriage was a mistake. (Sorry, I get a bit impassioned.)
2. I miss Jana. I also miss Persephone and Rickert's clandestine love affairs, and I'm guessing that Persephone is, too.
3. As much as I adoooore Dumbledore, you made him appropriately stern in this, which I like. I don't think even Dumbledore would let it slide, and that's realistic.
Well, there's much more besides that, but I have told my friends to read this...this is amazing!
Update soon so I don't have to do homework!
P.S., I mentioned this story in my bio.
Author's Response: wow, thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoy this story; I'm totally obsessed with writing it =D
wait, so i'm confused, is she for sure pregnant, cause it sounded like the healer still had test to run when Persephone left.... but great chapter though! we're finally getting somewhere!
Author's Response: yeah, she is pregnant--I should probably make that clearer, come to think of it. thanks for pointing out the confusion =]
I love this chapter... I just hope she is pregnant... I mean at least she would hav something to look forward to... Furthermore, i had been faithful to this story for long already... update soon ya... plz n thank you...
Author's Response: thanks so much!
Persephone's choices are well spelled out.
OMG..... I am just speechless. Like, I kind of called her leaving him, but if it happened, I would still be distraught, lol. He's being such a prick, why?!?
I like how her feelings towards Lorelai changed from pity to jealousy, hmm..
I knew she'd regret dropping out of school.
Author's Response: heh Rickert's annoying, but I love writing him. next chapter coming shortly! =]
from my observations in life the two year mark is typically the do or die decision time... and i'm excited about claude and lorelei!
Author's Response: thanks so much!
I think moving back to London will be good for them in the long run... You cant always hide from everything. Can't wait for more! Have a great day! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
*wipes a tear* How sad. :(
Beautiful chapter but it's so sad. But that's life isn't it? It's just a collection of meetings and goodbyes, hahaha. But Persephone needs a RING!!!
Author's Response: This chapter is a bit sad, but I quite liked writing it. Thanks for reviewing!
Also, do we get to meet the new improved Jana soon? I hope so!!
Author's Response: all in good time ;]
Everytime I log on to the computer I check to see whether you've updated :) It's such a compelling story! I love how you don't shy away from reality and end with them all gushing and sailing off into the sunset - your presentation of them all as adults, with as many flaws and failings as when they were younger always makes me smile :) I don't think I can guess at all how it's all going to end!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I absolutely love writing this, even if it is getting much longer than I originally intended =]
OMG!!! Scandalous!! I LOVE IT!! Okay, I'll stop yelling now. This is definitely my favorite chapter so far-- although I loved all of them. I knew Claude and Lorelai would make it together! And Jana seems to have effectively removed the stick from her... behind. lol. Did I mention that it makes my day when you update this wonderful story? I just got back from taking a four-hour ACT and I was feeling crappy but then I saw Persephone was updated and I was like, "Yes!". I just want to say thank you for writing a story that can bring a smile to my face even before I read the new chapter!
Author's Response: hahah thank you so much! This was one of my favorite chapters to write as well; I love writing Lorelei in general =] thanks for reviewing!
“What are you going to do if they split up?” Persephone asked. “First off, it’s not a question of if, it’s a question of when. Second…well, I don’t know what’ll happen when they break up.”
“Are you in love with him?” Persephone asked.
It looks as though Lorilei is answering Pers' question about what will happen if Gracie and Claude split up. If that is the case that quote should be separate because at first glance, it looks like Persephone is answering her own question.
Anyway interesting set of developments.
Author's Response: oh, thanks for pointing that out--my computer is doing this weird thing where it undoes all of my line breaks once I paste it into the website...I must have missed that one. I'll fix it now. Thanks for reviewing! =]