Hmm, good story, though not a lot of action in this chapter.
Author's Response: thanks...yeah, this chapter was kind of transitional. The next one's better (I hope =P ). Thanks for your review!
Spoilers: Good chapter. You're balancing Persephone's joy and troubles well.
Garnet. It's good that Pers feels slightly uneasy about Rickert having another student. That keeps it realistic. Maybe we'll even find out more about Rickert and her? Umm...
The story is mainly about Persephone's relationship now. I think there would probably be more going on in her life than just that. Other than that ...
Looking forward to the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, I realize the past few chapters have largely focused on Persephone and Rickert together, but there's more going on in the next couple chapters. Thanks for reviewing! =]
Good chapter. You're keeping the situation very realistic with suspicion and awkwardness running. Jana's worry is well written. I really like this story - it's a scenario you don't see a lot of, but is interesting to read. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm having so much fun writing this; I'm glad you like it =]
I love this story. Why hasn't it got more reviews? You're doing a really good job; the story goes at a perfect pace with some nice sub-plots (like Claude and Lorelei) which makes it more believable.
I'm not sure what to think of Rickert - he's so mysterious, you don't know what he's actually like. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! =]
This has to be one of the best student/teacher type fics I have read yet!
It's being such a long length is excellent; showing their relationship gradually evolving makes the whole thing believable and, more importantly, understandable --- a lot of people are automatically repelled by the very IDEA of student/teacher things, but I think the way you've told the story helps to disestablish such prejudices!
Great admiration for your commitment to keeping writing for so long!
I also think the realism of their interaction, their dialog, is brilliant - you avoided a lot of melodramatic clichés. I loved the bit where they're both so awkward after deciding to date - so true to life :)
Congrats, and keep up the good work!!
P.S: Probably just because of the song 'Don't Stand So Close to Me' (a teacher/student type song) by The Police, but I imagine Rickert looking just like a young Sting!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, this fic is definitely going to be really long...I've written about 18 chapters (though not all of them are consecutive), and I'm not close to being done. Hmmm...Rickert as Sting...there's something I never considered =P Thanks for your review!
Wow, what a chapter. Firstly I'd just like to say how much i admire Lorelei, she seems to have grown up alot and I'm sure Claud appreciates her efforts. And secondly, Rickert gives me the creeps and i don't know why, I think it's just the thought of this student teacher thing. But this was very well written and i can't wait to see where you're going with it. Will someone catch them out? Will they end up married? And for that matter will Claud end up married to Gracie?
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
goodness, i nearly fell out of my seat when i read this. student/teacher fics get me edgy. and--did you base rickert on a certain handsome (admittedly evil) somebody ( *cough riddle cough*)???
nudge nudge
absolutely delicious
Author's Response: Hmm...no, I didn't base him on Riddle, but I guess they do share certain similarities. I see Rickert more as a cross-breed between Snape, Rhett Butler from Gone with the Wind, and Mr. Big from Sex and the City, all trapped inside the body of Jim Sturgess (Jude from Across the Universe). =] Thanks for your review!
A beautifully written chapter, i need a tissue. I'm so proud of Lorelei now, before when she acused Persephone of kissing Claud I thought she was a little rash, but now it seems ll she needed was time to gain perspective. And i'm not sure Persephone understands Lorelei's decision, but it's very clear really, she loved him enough to see him happy even if it weren't with her, enough to let him go, otherwise it wouldn't be love. On a slightly less serious note, I thought it was so funny when Persephone started flirting with Rickert in the great hall, I mean in front of everyone, what if someone other than Jana was watching, a teacher perhaps? And Persephone's comment that her looking at Rickert meant they were having an affair was quite amusing, but i can't help wondering if things will end up that way soon. Anyway, great job and hope to read more soon.
Author's Response: Thanks! I really loved writing this chapter, especially Lorelei's decision to accept Claude and Gracie's relationship. The next chapter will be along shortly! =]
What a chapter. How does Lorelei go from seeing a hug to seeing a pationate kiss? She really needs her eyes testing. And this situation with Persephone and Rickert is getting much more intense, can't wait to see what happens next so please update again soon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! The next chapter is written and on its way =]
Well written story. Although the ending seems predictable the path there is interesting.
Author's Response: Thanks. And there are a few twists ahead; don't be so quick to judge =P haha thanks so much for reviewing.
I'm sad there are so few reviews for this story! You're doing a wonderful job! Keep up the great work!
~*BOO*~
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! =]
Has someone cast an Inappropriate charm on Hogwarts or something? I mean that extra potions lesson,... what was that? If my teacher started talking to me like that i think i'd die of embarrassment. I also think Claude is a complete idiot, I mean what if when they leave school they choose carreers that take them in completely different directions, or if the real world puts a realistic strain on their relationship. Environments like schools are relatively closed and controlled, what if their marriage doesn't survive real life? And I feel so sorry for Lorelei, silly silly girl, she doesn't seem to have a clue how to handle the situation. You say you're really getting into writing this fic, well i'm really getting into reading it so more updates please, pretty please.
Author's Response: Heh, I think Persephone was pretty horrified by the situation, too. And, yes, Claude is being a bit of an idealist =P I'm submitting the next chapter right now, and I really have to stop working on this fic for a few hours because my chemistry final is tomorrow and I'm going to fail if I don't study =O Thanks for reviewing!
Ohhh juicy!!! I like how he knows the family-very nice twist
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ohhh juicy!!! I like how he knows the family-very nice twist
Hmm, the plot thickens. Wonder if the girls will try to get Claud and Lorelei together? And I no it'd be none of my business, but if I saw one of my teachers kissing in the street it'd be so weird, of course being 27 means all my teachers would be ancient now anyway so that would definately be weird. Anyway, brilliant chapter, and I didn't notice it was short, quality not quantity I guess. Hope you update again soon.
Author's Response: Haha thanks for reviewing!
Uh Oh. Rickert gives me the creeps, especially that look. I'm intrigued as to where this is going, could Persephone end up marrying him (she asks in disbelief) or could he possibley force her into choosing a career and making something of herself other than a wife? Please update again soon, this is excellent reading.
Author's Response: Thanks =]
I'm really enjoying this fic. I love how you named Persephone's owl Peridot, beautiful stones aren't they? And I thought Persephone thinking that at least pink was closer to purple than green in potions was hilarious. I'm still quite warey of Rickert, why is he focussing more attention on Persephone than the rest of the students? Im's letter just highlighted even more that Persephone's family just expect her to mrry well and reproduce, I mean what if she decides otherwise, is her life wasted if she doesn't become a wife and mother? She could be a famous healer and cure terrible diseases, she could be an Auror who succeeds in developing a counter spell to the killing curse in her spare time. I know what it's like to try living up to others expectations and all it does is make you miserable. Sorry, anyway, looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: thanks so much! the next few chapters are written, but I'm having issues with the computer I have the story saved on, so I'm hoping nothing happens to it *crosses fingers*. In any case, I don't know how long it'll be until I'm able to update again, but hopefully soon =] Thanks for reviewing!
omgggg!! i really like this story
please update soon!! you are a very good writer explaining things so well, i got a very good picture in my miind
PLEASEE UPDATE!! cant wait for next chapter
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Hmm, Rickert sounds alot like Snape, is he using a fake name for some reason? I loved Persephone's description of her home life, she seems a little like Ron Weasley in some ways. You would think her sisters might object to her wearing the same dress for all of their weddings, particularaly Juliet who seems quite above herself. And it's nice to see Persephone is individual in her not liking school, many OC's love school and can't wait to get away from home. It seems Persephone doesn't feel she fits in anywhere and hasn't a life plan of her own, unless you count that of marrying a rich man and having many children. I can't wait to see where she goes in this fic, the road is wide open. Another to add to my favourites.
Author's Response: Rickert is a bit like Snape, but as Snape wasn't born at the time this story was taking place, I think you can rule out that suspicion =P Thanks for your review!
YESS This is going to be an amazing series. You better crank these out before CITing or tell me how it ends there or...well you don't want to know.
Author's Response: JULIA! Thanks so much darling =]
