Reviews For Persephone
Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 12/21/08 19:53
Chapter: A Fresh Start

*shriek of delight* I LOVE THIS CHAPTER!! I'm sorry, I'll stop being a fangirl now, but the homeyness of this chapter just warms my heart. :D
Please let Persephone get a wizarding G.E.D and get a job so she doesn't completely throw away her life. She needs something to do to be completely happy, she's too dependent on Rickert.

Author's Response: hahaha thank you so much. I promise Persephone gets a bit more independent in future =]

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 12/18/08 20:19
Chapter: Breaking Point

:(. Poor Persephone. I feel bad for her, but I can't condone ditching school. Yeah, I'm sure she feels like crap, but what a pansy, honestly. She couldn't last a couple of more weeks? And what if she and Rickert don't last? What is she going to do? She won't have a family, a boyfriend, a house, or a job. I think Rickert should MAKE her go back to school. On a happier note, I really enjoy this story and I admire your writing style. Keep up the rapid updates!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah, persephone's being sort of a weakling at the moment. =P Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 12/14/08 14:06
Chapter: Problems

Wow... poor Persephone. I wish she'd try though-- she's made her life completely Rickert-centered and once Rickert was taken away, she doesn't know what to do with herself. She needs someone to talk to, I think. Can't wait until the next update!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, Persephone isn't thinking very clearly at the moment...the next chapter will b eon the way shortly =]

Reviewer: fightingokra4life
Date: 12/13/08 16:22
Chapter: Problems

i have just found and read your story all at once... it is very intriguing and i cant wait to read more

Author's Response: thanks so much! =]

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 12/08/08 17:14
Chapter: Hopeless

oh wow... great update. Poor Pers. Jana's such a b#$%^, right? lol. Can't wait until the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! =]

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 12/08/08 10:58
Chapter: Hopeless

Write me soon. - I would put ‘write to me soon’.

Poor Persephone. I can understand Jana’s reasoning, but if it were me, I think I would expect my friends to support me anyway. Because, you know, that’s what friends do. So she kept a secret, and Jana obviously cares for her - but letting go of that secret would’ve jeopardised Persephone even more.

It would be nice to see more of how Claude and Lorelei react to it all - I imagined Lorelei to be a bit stronger willed than she’s acting, especially after all the help Persephone gave her when she was in love with Claude (and probably still is).

I love this story - these last few chapters have brought out a streak of compassion in me, and I keep finishing the chapters wanting more. Great story - though I probably tell you that in every review. LOL.

Author's Response: haha thanks so much for reviewing! You'll see a bit more about Lorelei in the next chapter

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 12/03/08 18:54
Chapter: Secrets Revealed

Wow... the last two chapters were shocking, although I'm not really surprised that someone found out--- although those last two ideas were contradicting, it's true. I'm sorry that Rickert and Persephone were found out, and I wish they weren't, but I knew that it would have to happen sometime (especially with a nosy friend like Jana.) Speaking of Jana, what is her problem? She may care about Persephone but is acting all stick-up-the-arse the way to go about it? And Claude after all this Gracie/Lorelai business has the nerve to go around getting into other people's affairs after ignoring them? The cheek! lol. I have to say that the only characters that haven't annoyed me recently are Lorelai and Dumbledore. At least they were consistent! (Well, mostly consistent. :D). Can't wait for the next update! love this story!

Author's Response: haha thanks so much. the next chapter is in the queue =]

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 12/03/08 10:50
Chapter: Conflict and Consequences

They got off rather lightly, though you concreted out the reasons behind this. This chapter, well, the end, really showed us that Rickert cared, I think. It’ll be interesting to see what happens when he leaves the school, and what will happen to Persephone.

The speech Pers made to her mother was quite authentic, and very understandable after what she’s been through, so I felt very sorry for her the way everybody reacted.

Your characterisation of Dumbledore was believable, and I liked the sadness, and the coldness, he gave off. That’s probably exactly how he would act.

The ending was firm, and effective.

Good chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really liked writing this chapter =]

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 11/24/08 19:39
Chapter: Trapped

OMG! Oh no!!! What's going to happen to Persephone and Rickert? The interview with Dumbledore is going to be incredibly awkward, and with the whole school then knowing... I feel so bad for Persephone! It's not her fault, and if she and Rickert were in another situation where they WEREN'T teacher/student then everyone would be okay with it! Ugh. I'll be so mad if they break up after everything they went through. Please update soon, it just makes my day when I see that there's a new chapter for Persephone!!! I love love love love love this story if I haven't already made it clear!

Author's Response: hahah thanks so much! The next chapter is in the queue and should hopefully be accepted shortly. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Calico
Date: 11/23/08 19:25
Chapter: Trapped

I just started reading this fic, and I went through all 23 chapters in one sitting. It's addictive! And now you've left me with a terribly suspenseful cliffhanger! Argh! But seriously, this story is different than anything I've read here - bolder, somehow - and it's intriguing. Honestly I'm not a big fan of Rickert and I hope that Persephone comes out at the end without him, just a better understanding of herself. I'm glad she's broken away from her family's expectations, but I think she could do better than someone like Rickert. Anyway, this is your story and none of my opinions actually matter; my point, in conclusion, is that your story had really gotten to me and made me think, so thank you for that, and keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I know, I myself actually alternate between loving Rickert and hating him; it's kind of weird. Anyway, thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: phoenix_fille
Date: 11/23/08 17:19
Chapter: Trapped

I knew someone would find out. BUt she is of age, they can't really stop her, can they? Update soon, cliffhangers are so evil!

Author's Response: hehe thanks...on a random note, this went through the queue really fast (like in eight hours...). Anyway, the next chapter will be up soon =]

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 11/17/08 16:54
Chapter: News

Wow.... I'm really starting to get into this story and I can't wait until you update! Keep them coming! Will Claude and Gracie regret their decision? And what about Claude and Lorelai, is that over now?

Author's Response: Thanks so much! The next chapter should be in queue shortly. Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: HeRmiONe923
Date: 11/16/08 16:47
Chapter: Hurt and Comfort

OMG!!!!! Please update soon, I'm on tenterhooks to find out what happens! I hope that Persephone reconciles with her family, it would be so sad if they don't!

Author's Response: haha thanks...the next chapter is currently in queue and should be up shortly =]

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 11/15/08 14:11
Chapter: Hurt and Comfort

Great chapter! That was so unexpected. I really felt for Persephone, and it'll be interesting to see how it all turns out for her. Will it just be her mother, or will her sisters leave her too? I can't see it, but you never know...

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: MargretKelley
Date: 10/14/08 22:20
Chapter: Confrontation

TOLD. She's told him plenty of times, no, and he doesn't seem to be getting the hint. With their completely different mindsets on what they want to do with their lives, and his reputation, I'd say Persephone should dump him, but I don't think that'd help progress the story all that much. :P

Author's Response: Rickert is being rather stubborn, yes? Haha, thanks for reviewing =]

Reviewer: MargretKelley
Date: 10/06/08 23:43
Chapter: Explanations

Just out of curiosity, have you abandoned this story or have writers block? I miss your quick updates and it's a really interesting story so far.

Author's Response: no, definitely not! The queue has been closed for the past three weeks, so I couldn't submit anything. I have about twenty more chapters written and ready to go, so I'll be adding the next one as soon as the queue reopens (which, if I'm not mistaken, is tomorrow). Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 09/18/08 10:31
Chapter: Explanations

Last two chapters. I think Odessa is trustworthy - it's great that she found out. It'll put a lot more tension on Pers, and what will Rickert say? And poor, poor Claude. I'm so pleased to see a new twist in your story - the next few chapters should be interesting - and I have to wait 3 weeks! Nevermind though, I'm sure it'll go quick enough. :)

Author's Response: haha, thanks so much =]

Reviewer: phoenix_fille
Date: 09/17/08 15:19
Chapter: Explanations

Oh, poor CLaude. Thanks for the quick update, it made my day.

Author's Response: no problem! Thanks for reviewing =]

Reviewer: phoenix_fille
Date: 09/14/08 14:43
Chapter: Caught

Oh dear, someone found out. Update soon so I know what happens next!

Author's Response: I'm just revising the next should be posted shortly. Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 09/04/08 14:36
Chapter: The Gift

Lovely update! It was nice to see Persephone's irritation at having to share a room, and being in such a cramped house. Also a nice change from the last few chapters. Good work. :)

Author's Response: Thanks =]

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