Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 04/17/09 5:28
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Hmm, before I start on the review, let me echo your sentiments regarding Bellatrix and Dolohov. Quite frankly, though, if JK was serious about the choice between the Lupins and Arthur, I wish she'd left Molly a widow (OOH, that's harsh!)- much as I love the Muggle lover. However, I'm not here to discuss DH, but to review your story. Grrr! someone didn't like that bit and deleted the rest of the review so start again...

Great story. I loved the flow of the game. It seemed effortless (I aways find Quidditch hard to write so kudos to that). You small details about the Hawaiians (brightly coloured, ukeleleys, the Samoan Beater and the fact that they just seemed so much more laid back than England (who just seem to be a bunch of sore losers like their footballing counterparts) made me root for the Islanders. The fact that their Seeker was so rubbish just made it funnier.

Enjoyable story and a pleasure to review. Happy Easter! Carole xxx

PS Sympathy for your mate. I got a fly in my eye and that was pain beyond all imagining. The little git didn't survive though.

Author's Response:

Greetings, Carole! Thanks for reading, enjoying, and reviewing this story! Also, thanks for commenting on my profile – I haven’t updated it in about half a year, and I think I need to do something about that…

Also, I’m glad you liked the flow of the story – the present tense is tricky to write with sometimes, so I like knowing that I’ve succeeded. As for Hawaii, I can’t remember why I picked them as the opposing team – I think it was just the first place that popped into my head! And really, what’s the rush to get the Snitch anyway…?

“Howzit, brah? Howz da eye? Dat baddahfly look hurt! I wen tink you maki die dead!”

“Was that English?”

Anyway, thanks again for reviewing. As for the actual butterfly incident, it happened several years ago, and we consider it a joke and a very good conversation starter now – it’s rather funny to see how people react when I say one of my friends was “attacked by a butterfly and broke both of his wrists.” Also, my sympathies for your own eye-and-insect accident. My Dad actually got a wasp in his eye when he was in Guatemala, and then he walked into a tree branch that poked his other eye…

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: The Lark Dord
Date: 04/17/09 5:12
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Hello Tim,
It's a lighthearted story. I never knew butterflies can cause so much damage.
I've found something:
No wands are allowed at Quidditch matches, this was said by J.K Rowling, I don't know where (Somewhere in the HP Lexicon I think). :P
Great story overall, you should write your THIS IS HOGWARTS! – A Stupid Crossover Parody, loved the absurd fanfic revolution :D

Author's Response:

NEVER UNDERESTIMATE BUTTERFLIES! At best, they get stuck in your eye and break your wrists. At worst, they cause hurricanes! BEWARE!

Concerning the wands, I only mention the mediwizards and the spectators in the stands using them…

Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing! I have actually already written THIS IS HOGWARTS! – A Stupid Crossover Parody, but it cannot be posted on MNFF because it is a crossover story. However, you can read it on fanfiction.net if you’re curious.

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: Vittoria
Date: 04/15/09 0:59
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Ah this was a really hilarious story! Despite the tense changes, I really enjoyed the content. I thought the butterfly would probably help England in winning their match, but this--OMR!
I think it's that absurd plot line which made me laugh the most.

Good Job.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, Vittoria. You’re right – the present tense is tricky to write in, and using the present progressive to talk about things in the past while writing in the present tense sounds sort of weird. But I do like the present tense, because it sounds much more immediate than the past tense, in my opinion. Anyway, thanks again for the review, and don’t let those killer butterflies get you!

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: Zoheb
Date: 12/27/08 11:01
Chapter: Lepidoptera

You portrayed the speed and tension of a Quidditch match quite well, and I most certainly wasn't expecting the butterfly to do what it did.

You have a bright future, filled with joy and success and other such nifty things.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your well wishes – I intend to fulfil them, but I must be wary of those vicious butterflies!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: armagod679
Date: 12/18/08 17:02
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Somehow, this is funny...

Author's Response:

I'm glad you think so, because I originally submitted this story in the Humour category, but a mod rejected it and told me to move it to General, so I did. But yes, this story is inspired by a true, horrific, but oddly hilarious event!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: beaternumber1
Date: 12/01/08 19:00
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Some people are just to cool for words.

Author's Response:

Thanks! But remember, I just pall in comparison to that vicious butterfly!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: IndigoPassion
Date: 10/28/08 17:26
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Aha, absurd misfortune....

You have a really good, sarcastic sense of humor!

Hehe
-Lexxyy

Author's Response:

Beware of the fearsome butterflies – they’re vicious little blighters!

I’m glad you liked the story and my peculiar sense of humour, and thanks for reviewing!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: the_weird_one
Date: 10/25/08 10:55
Chapter: Lepidoptera

So the whole Quiddich match was lost...because of a butterfly. Wow. You should've made the match the Quidditch World Cup, unless I am mistaken, and you did. (Well, I was taking Quizilla quizzes at the same time I was reading this story, but OH WELL) I admire your use of onamonapias, they are quite...weird, or 'nique' as my friend would say. It isn't worthy of an 'LOL' quality, but is still a good read.

Author's Response:

Indeed.

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: Nevilles Girl
Date: 07/04/08 7:20
Chapter: Lepidoptera

I love reading about Quidditch matches. I don't why, but I know I do. Something that bothers me about your story is a Hawaii national team. Hawaii is a state, so I'm confused.

One thing I like rather a lot is how everything happens right now. Ex: "He flies..." , "She falls..."

You reviewed Schmergo's and my story "Kill Bill (And Arthur)" and Schmergo has told me your a good writer, so I came to check out your stories. I'll try to read some more later.

I hope your friend gets/is better.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response:

Well, you’re not alone, because I also happen to like reading about Quidditch matches. I have no interest in sports, but for some reason this game on broomsticks captures my imagination nonetheless.

rnrn

Now to alleviate your confusion about the Hawaiian national team, allow me to explain. In Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, Tibet is described as having a ministry of magic that is frequently fined for Muggle sightings of Yetis. However, Tibet is not an independent country in the Muggle world (since it is part of China), but J.K. Rowling has indicated that it is in the Wizarding world. In short, there are differences in political boundaries between both worlds.

rnrn

With that in mind, Hawaii was annexed by American Muggles in 1898, but the magical population of the islands could have maintained their independence from the U.S. magical government. If that is the case, then they would have their own national Quidditch team.

rnrn

Another possible explanation is that the Hawaiian team directly parallels the English team. There is no such thing as a British national Quidditch team, but there are teams for England, Scotland, and Wales (Northern Ireland should have one too, but it isn’t mentioned in the books). This is mostly the same case in the Muggle world – in the FIFA World Cup, the U.K. has never fielded a team, but England has. In the case of magical Hawaii – even if it is part of the United States – it could feasibly have its own Quidditch team separate from the Americans.

rnrn

I’m glad you liked my use of the present tense! I like using it whenever I’m writing a scene with a lot of action, precisely because it is so immediate – it’s like actually seeing the action right in front of you instead of only hearing about it a few days later like in the past tense. I’ve actually tried writing in the future tense, but it didn’t turn out too well. I suppose I’ll just stick to the past tense for general narration and present for action sequences.

rnrn

I did indeed review your Schmergo-collaborative story; it was very good, but I won’t bore you by repeating all of the wonderful things I thought about it. Anyway, I hope you like my other stories!

rnrn

Tim the Enchanter

rnrn

P.S. The “Butterfly Incident” happened several years ago, and now we consider it something of a joke.

rn

Reviewer: shewolf2000
Date: 05/28/08 17:28
Chapter: Lepidoptera

"The butterfly, on the other hand, managed to find love despite its bent and tattered wings. It had four hundred babies and lived happily ever after." *Laughs her head off* Wow, this fic was good (you really have a talent for writing Quidditch scenes) but this last line really made it. I can't help but feel sorry for poor Monty and your friend though. What a ridiculous way to break your wrists... or lose a Quidditch match. Great story! Four hundred babies... *giggles*

Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to review this very short and ridiculous story of mine! Of course, I felt very sorry for my friend’s misfortune too, but that didn’t stop me from both laughing at the absurdity of the situation and eventually writing a story about it! Also, thank you for commending my Quidditch-match writing. This was the first time I’ve written one, so I’m glad it worked.

rnrn

Once again, thank you for reviewing. When you go forth in life, remember that the butterfly will always win and have more babies than you in the end. It’s sad and unfair, but that’s the truth.

rnrn

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 05/27/08 15:45
Chapter: Lepidoptera

Oh. Um. Wow. Poor guy! That story just made my day! I'm probably going to be laughing for hours... This was a great story.

Author's Response:

Why, thank you for reviewing – I’m glad you found this story funny! I wrote it as a Humour fic, but for some reason it was rejected because the mods wanted to put it in General instead. Strange…

rnrn

Anyway, thank you once again for taking the time to review my story. Watch out for killer butterflies!

rnrn

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 05/26/08 4:52
Chapter: Lepidoptera

It was a nice lighthearted story, and it shows that even the most carefully laid plans can go wrong.

One tiny nitpick. Unless Hawaii had a really bad selection a seeker that bad would not have been kept. A line such as luckily she was the best that Hawaii had to offer would explain this.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing this rather obscure story! I’m glad I finally have a review for it!

rnrn

A useless titbit: I submitted this story in Humour, but the mods decided to relocate it to General. In complete contrast, my other recent story Yelling Yourself Yellow With Yetis was originally submitted in General, but the mods rejected it and made me resubmit it in Humour. Strange…

rnrn

Well, there are several reasons why the Hawaiian Seeker is rather mediocre. The first is that she is actually a good enough player (like Cho Chang for instance), but compared to Monty and Seekers from other countries, she is not much. Secondly, because the story is narrated from Monty’s perspective, there is an English bias since he doesn’t exactly have a high opinion of his opposite, though he has tremendous respect for the Hawaiian Beaters. That leads to the third reason: I made Noelani a relatively poor Seeker to make up for the massive unbeatable Samoan Beaters on the Hawaiian team. Lastly, she was injured during the game, which probably explains why it took her so long to catch the Snitch.

rnrn

Once again, thank you for reviewing and letting me know your thoughts about the Hawaiian Seeker issue. I hadn’t really thought of it until you mentioned it, so thank you for bringing that to my attention.

rnrn

Tim the Enchanter

rnrn

P.S. I’m sorry about the “rn” tags, but I have no control over them.

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