Great story, just a little coding prolem in this cahpter:
about your [i]condition[/i]?
I believe you should have used the less than and greater than symbols to bracket the italics code.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I fixed the coding error. I don't know how it got by me. Thank you for pointing it out. Terri
Not a bad story. Wasn't the best I've read, for it was lacking action, or something, I'm not quite sure yet. But for a story where a person doesn't move from his spot the entire time, it is pretty good, and you definitely picked a perfect character to write about.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. It was my first attempt at first person pov and took a long time and many revisions to get it to this. I understand what you are saying about the action, but as you also said, Bill didn't really move at all from the beginning to the end. Just a stroll through his memories. Thanks again. Terri
V. good, i enjoyed it a lot. But one thing could you clear up for me, is when Fred says "One of the best Quidditch players I have seen in a long time and Ron was trying to teach her chess."
Who do u mean, Ginny or Ron? Which is the best Quidditich player?
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I meant Ginny. Thank you for pointing out it is unclear. I will go in and edit it so it is clearer. I sometimes forget the reader isn't in my head. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Thanks again. Terri
Okay, I'm off to add this story to my favorite 'cause it is brilliant! Anyways, just wanted to tell you how good it is, and that I hope you update as soon as you can. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you. The epilogue is written and back from my beta, so it will be posted soon. I hope you enjoy the ending. Terri
I liked this. I loved hearing about Weasley life from Bill's point of view. I was getting so carried away that I'd forgotten until right at the end that he'd been savaged by Greyback. Made me shiver.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I am glad you got so caught up in the story the reality of what happened 'made you shiver'. I enjoyed writing Bill's story. I thought it needed to be told. I am going to be submitting the next chapter soon.
Lovely starting, Terri!
I like how you bring in all the Weasley kids one by one, and even Harry in the end.
You've kept the fact that Bill was a Head Boy in your mind, and made studies go easy on him. Very good!
Over all, it was nice! =)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well. I will be resubmitting chapter 1 soon. Terri