Reviewer: MissHufflepuff
Date: 06/20/08 13:26
Chapter: Chapter 2 Boats, Brothers and other Decisions

oh, I can't wait to see what happens at the sorting...I hope you update soon.

Author's Response:

Working on it now! I think there will be some cool suprises.

SLy

Reviewer: Ren Shire
Date: 06/20/08 8:57
Chapter: Chapter 2 Boats, Brothers and other Decisions

omg. if i didnt kno better, i would have thought u copied my story. its better written, cuz i wrote that story in like 4th grade, but. jeez. only thing is that i didnt have scorpius as a friend. interesting twist....

Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm glad you are enjoying this! Keep reading.

SLy

Reviewer: Ren Shire
Date: 06/20/08 8:51
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

wow i wrote a story just like this. rewriting it...it also has a chapter in the beginning about albus on the train. wow really scary!!!!

Author's Response:

Getting cold chills! Glad you're reading!

SLy 

Reviewer: The Patornus
Date: 06/18/08 10:26
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

I liked the story! Keep up the good work! When is the next chapter going to be up?

Author's Response:

Well, I have had five different people go over Chapter 2 with a fine toothed comb. I have read it, re-read it and then read it some more looking for any and all errors. But I just can't get it out of the queue. So to answer the question...I don't know what is wrong with it, so I can not answer the question.

Hang in there, I hope it will be out soon!

SLy 

 

Reviewer: SnowyHedwig112
Date: 06/16/08 13:53
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Oh, I'd really like to see how this turns out! Your start is a really good one, and feel that this first chapter has a lot of potential!

By the way, the "snack lady," I believe, is actually referred to as the "trolley witch,"

Keep up the good work, and do update soon!

Author's Response:

I actually have eight Chapters written so far, and quite a few fans of it on another site. Chapter two is on its third rejection on Mugglenet however, so I am doing my best to get it to you. I hope all the fans of this story can hang on. Thanks for reading! 

SLy 

Reviewer: seeker15
Date: 05/31/08 15:39
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

HAHA!!! great story so far!!! so funny!!! can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!

Author's Response:

Hopefully that will be soon if the great and mighty gods of the Pit of Black Fire (the queu) see fit! Glad you are enjoying it! Please stay tuned!

SLy 

Reviewer: snpdrgn
Date: 05/28/08 11:46
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Hmm ... I wonder why their bags are being checked?  Great beginning!  Can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

<see below for response>

SLy 

Reviewer: snpdrgn
Date: 05/28/08 11:43
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Hmm ... I wonder why their bags are being checked?  Great beginning!  Can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

Liability issues LOL! It has been nineteen years since Harry, things happen. I often wonder when I read Post-Hogwarts chapters where everything goes down exactly how it happened in the books, "Nineteen years and nothing has changed? Holy timewarp Batman!" I've even seen criticism from cannon nuts over changes to the HP world in Post-Hogwart stories. Think of your hometown nineteen years ago, now consider it today? Has nothing changed? Most likely there's now a Walmart at the very least! Eeeeek!  Nuff said. Keep reading and reviewing! I lurves me some reviews!

 

SLy 

Reviewer: red haired mom
Date: 05/28/08 11:41
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

I really enjoyed this chapter. It had quite a few of the things needed for a great chapter; humour, angst, overprotective relatives, and mentions of people we all love.

I was surprised you gave the snack lady a voice in this. I loved that she was confused about the grouping and thinking they were living in strange times because of it.

As for your trio, the byplay between them was brilliantly done. I like that they ran the gamut of insults and then started to find them funny. The conversations, whether they resulted in laughter or sadness, were well done. You did have a repeated sentence though; “That’s okay, "she stammered, “I’m Rose and he’s Albus.”. I’m not sure if it was repeated on purpose because she was stammering or if it was a typo, but I just thought I’d point it out.

I was rather surprised that Scorpius has a cat. Most authors tend to leave cats to females and owls or something else to boys. Cats are normally haughty and as you put it King to the serfs so a Malfoy with one just kind of fits. Not that I think your Scorpius is like that, but his father was. Great job!

You’ve done really well on the Next Gen kids, and I’m looking forward to seeing where you take them. I’ll be adding it to my favorites so I’ll get the e-mails when you validate. Congratulations on this one! See you at the next one. ~Wendy

Author's Response:

I was a little suprised myself. But I wanted something external that would show how isolated and different this boy is compared to his father at that age. It least the kitten has a butch name! LOL! Thanks for pointing out the error, it has been corrected. It's funny. When you  consider how many times this Chapter has been beta'd and combed over how one glaring error like that can slip through! Grrrrr! Keep reading!

 

SLy 

Reviewer: Kerichi
Date: 05/28/08 9:14
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

It's nice to see the story here, and it's still an endearing image, Albus with a cowlick. :)

Now that the queue is back to normal, I hope your second chapter is approved soon!



Author's Response: Me two! Keep reading!!

Reviewer: KittyCatLover
Date: 05/27/08 21:32
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

I like the chapter title. Yay! There's a kitty in the story! I love kitties (obviously)!

Author's Response:

Yes Kublai is one cool kitten!  Stay tuned because if you like Kublai...you're gonna  flip over the Transfiguration proffessor!

 

SLy 

Reviewer: Specialis Revelio
Date: 05/27/08 13:46
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Wow, that's awesome! Can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Me neither! LOL! It's in the queue and outta my hands hoss. Glad you're reading!

 SLy 

Reviewer: b_c
Date: 05/27/08 11:10
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

I think this story has some potential, and I hope you update soon. This is a different take on the epilogue and so far I've enjoyed it.

Author's Response:

Ah yes, sweet validation, how I have missed thee! I am so happy you are enjoying my version of Post/Epilogue. If you think it has been different so far...please stay tuned. Remember that little moment in the Pirate ride at DisneyWorld when after just cruising along things go hairy? Well things will be cruising but hairyness is just a few chapters away. so keep all limbs in the boat! Thanks for reading!

SLy 

 

Reviewer: ada22
Date: 05/27/08 7:42
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Nice chapter. Hope you'll find some suitable rivals for the trio. XD

Author's Response:

Oh thats a big story twist! (naahhhhh naahhhh) You'll just have to keep reading! I know...I know...I'm being stingy. Well authors perogative...still giddy about the whole author thing, I may be insufferable for a bit longer.  Hang in there, you'll see some next chapter. I promise.

SLy 

Reviewer: OliveOil_Med
Date: 05/26/08 16:31
Chapter: Chapter 1 Compartmentalized

Oh, Sly! You finally got approved!!! And I got the first review, even! I'm so, so happy for you!

Author's Response:

Finally! <little white man dance> Thanks for sticking by me Mollywabbles!

SLy 

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