finaly Alex owned upped to her mischive. great chapter i wonder who is doing this stuff to her, i can't imagine it's the dean it has to be someone less obivous.
I am really enjoying this....so much so that I've put off studying for my midterm that is in a few hours!!! I'm totally going to finish reading the posted chapters as soon as I can. Great story!
Ms. Grimm is really mean.....hmmm she seems suspicious now
This started off good. The way you write reminds me of a book I've once read (I don't remember the title though). During the chapter I really had the feeling to sit with Alex, Brian and Bonnie at that pond and that it really was summer. And how you described the "attack" of the Redcaps - fabulous. For several seconds I really was afraid that she might not make it back home safely. I really liked the detailed description of the Redcaps.
All in all: Fantastic first chapter.
I'm with Alex in thinking there is something suspicious about the Dean. Just why was she the one to visit Alex at home, when she apparantly never does that? Maybe she has a personal connection to Alex. I also think it was very irresponsible of her to punish them with the whole transfigure into rats punishment. McGonagall would never have done it ( remember when she laid into Moody in GoF for turning Malfoy into a ferret). Lots of bad accidents could happen to them as rats, and almost did! Of course maybe that's what she hoped would happen.
Or this could all be a Snapesque red herring obscuring the identity of the real culprit. I don't think it's all just Alex's imagination, though, and I do think the Dean knows more than she's letting on. Anyway, thanks for another great chapter!
Hmm the dean? I don't know if Alex is right on that one...it does look fishy though. Love the line about the toliet! lol
Oooh, excellent ending! What a cliffie! This story reads really well and I'm horribly hooked! You have indeed done an excellent job so far of creating a new unique, but very deep world. I'd leave a longer review, but I'm hurrying to read what happens next!
amazing chapter, i love the fact the dean turned them into mice. quite different form hogwarts, i love the way you've made a completly new school in the US with a whole new back story i love can't wait for the next chapter hurry please
I've just discovered your story and read it all the way thru and I have to say that it is incredibly well written and captivating. I usually don't like the American based fiction since it usually copies the British wizarding world too closely, but I think that you have truly created a believable representation of what an American wizarding community would be like. The detail and imagination that you have given us is wonderful and your characters are so realistic. I can't wait to see what happens in Ms. Grimms office. It does seem like there's more to Alex's background than we know. Why did she get a personal invitation/scholarship from Ms. Grimm? Maybe she is related to Harry somehow?
great chapter, I will keep reading.
Oh this is GLORIOUS! Every once in a while, I decide it might be worth it to check out the "American Wizarding World" fics... yours is the first I've read that has been so completely visualized, beautifully written, and fully developed. You've created a world here, and all your hard work has definitely paid off. Your characters are delightful, interesting, and believable. I feel like every single one of them has a backstory that we've only seen the surface of. Miss Quick is a wonderful heroine, and I just can't wait to see more of her. I have a feeling her mysterious father is someone we know well... perhaps Harry Potter himself? I can certainly see the similarities, though I enjoy the differences.
Congratulations with this, I can't wait to read more of your masterpiece.
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. Harry as Alex's father? Well, he'd have to have been about sixteen. Hmm.... ;)
I just have to say that the details in this story continue to amaze me! I find myself getting more into your story the more I read. I can't wait to find out if someone is trying to kill Alex or not. I think the fact that there were dangerous magical creatures in the pond near her house seems pretty suspicious in retrospect, since we now know that they are rare in North America. Are we going to find out more about her father anytime soon? I can't wait to see what's coming next, although I'm a little concerned about the upcoming scene with Dean Grimm ( I still haven't made up my mind about her).
brillent flying scene best chapter yet
Wow you are posting really quickly. The last few chapters at school have been really entertaining with all the info on the American wizarding world. Oh Alex! When is she going to learn lol!
great start to the chapter then slowed down but still interesting.
I'm finally able to review!
Your story has me hooked, and I've really appreciated the frequent updates. I can't wait to find out more. Will Alex finally meet an elf? Did ASPEW start from Hermione's SPEW? Please update soon!
Hello, I'm halfway through this story, or halfway through the chapters it has so far. It's been very interesting reading about American wizarding culture, and I think the name of the school is very witty-- Charmbridge is a lot like Cambridge. Everything's all very creative, I think you've succeeded in creating a new world of magic loosely connected to the Wizarding world in Britain. Alexandra is a very likeable character, and you just want to keep on reading to find out what happens because it's a completely different world. This is one of the most creative stories I've read here, and I'll read the rest tomorrow.
Interesting how you portray the American Wizarding community to be a lot like the British wizarding community. In my interpretation, I have always thought that the American wizarding community would be somewhat more "integrated" into American society, mainly in terms of lifestyle (like adopting muggle technologies such as computers and televisions and dressing in muggle fashions). They would even have their own station, Wizarding News Network (WNN, get the pun?)
)My version of the American wizarding community would still have those laws regarding magic and muggles, but they wouldn't be quite as strigent because American wizards and witches (particularly those underage) would have something to channel their magic into (like music or sports). That way if they are in the presence of muggles, their magic wouldn't leak out, and American wizard children would be able to attend regular elementary schools until they were admitted to wizarding schools.
American wizards and witches would also be better informed with muggle news as well. I think that in the light of civil rights movement and all, American wizards would probably be more tolerant of muggles and muggleborns, although there will be the few bigots in the community (just like America, huh?)
In short, I always think that the American wizarding community would be somewhat more "modern" than other wizarding communities, like Britain's, no offense. What do you say to that?
The American wizarding community is similar to Britain's in some ways, and different in others. American wizards do tend to segregate themselves from Muggles, just as British wizards do. They have a lot more geographic territory to hide in, after all. They are also somewhat less modern than their Muggle counterparts. However, the American wizarding world is not as monocultural as the British wizarding world, as you may have noticed. Some American wizard cultures are extremely old-fashioned (e.g., the Ozarkers), while others are more modern. There is less prejudice against Muggles and Muggleborns in America, though that's not to say there isnt any. More differences, and some of the reasons for them, will become apparent in the future. Thanks for your comments!
I love the fact that there is the similarity to harry potter but at the same time a completely new story can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
I like the story first chapter was pretty long but the ending makes me want to keep reading