Wow, the power of this story fills the reader...only because of the truths that are hidden within. Are there ever true heros? History if written by the winners...and the heros are always from the winners side. How would the story be written if the other side told the story? Mix those versions of the truth and maybe you'd be close to what really happened. This was an interesting read and an interesting point of view. :)
Oh. My. God.
First of all, let me just say that this is the best Regulus fic I have ever read. This is immensely powerful and I was literally shaking in my chair while reading it. You writing style i.e. the short bursts and flashes of scenes rather then a long winded description gave this story the perfect amount of bitterness and the emotional range that makes the reader cringe at poor Regulus and his life.
The sentences in brackets were an amazing touch and I could see the emotionally detached Regulus trying to think of his situation from outside himself as he experiences it. This is one of the most elegantly pulled of mental disorders I have read so for. As far his relationship with Sirius, I think you have done a fantastic job showing ther friction between both the characters.
In way of Briticism, I think you have done a well enough job with language and slang. The environment is very nicely done and the whole feel of the fic came across splendidly. Though I admit that your characterization is so strong band brilliant, a reader wouldn’t really care for Briticism so much as the raw emotion present.
I am absolutely captivated by Regulus and his realization as he grows up. May not have lived a long life but he certainly learned the biggest most important lesson of all. That there aren’t just heroes and villains bit lots of people in between. This is my personal view in life to and it was lovely to see it personified like you did.
I think I found a few mistakes but again, it could just be my ignorance so please don’t hate me.
"I don't need help." It comes out harsher than he intended, but Alice say anything.
desperation rank in his voice,
The Journey that Regulus goes through and the things he goes on to discover are very real. The nightmares he has, the fears, pity, revulsion and hatred that came across so vividly in your words and horrified the reader yet made them wasn’t to read on…. I just can’t describe it.
And towards the very end, when Regulus realizes that he is neither the hero nor the villain of the story but someone who is mainly remembered because he is so inconspicuous, someone who might be important, well that just breaks my heart.
A wonderfully wretched read. Thanks so very much for writing this fic.=Sammy
Well you captured my attention. I must confess that reading this story was an assignment for a class but I am glad she chose it. We have all wondered about the mysterious Regulus and what drove him to join the Dark Lord. Like so many others, I felt that there was a reason he was a bad seed and he was just another Dark Villain until JK showed us his true colors. Most of us view the hero of the story as the one we could all take home and “mother”, I’m not real sure I would want this bratty little boy in my house. You captured the personality of someone with second child syndrome very well; does this come from experience I wonder? Living in the shadow of the ‘perfect’ older brother does take its toll, no one is born a bad seed, circumstances and opportunity drive them to it. It was nice to see that he did have one redeeming quality even if it was meant to get back at Voldemort, the true villain of the story. Most people refuse to see Sirius or any of the Marauders as anything but perfect, because they were on the good side, but you were not afraid to show that in his own way he was a bully and not a playboy. I liked the way you slipped in the invitation from Lestrange after each failure and each pity party that he had for himself. I saw this as the opportunity that makes people go bad, he was pushed and pushed until he snapped and took a chance. You showed us that he wanted to rebel against his parents expectations, because after all he worshiped Sirius and wanted to be just like him, he just wasn’t sure how to do it.
I don't see Regulus liking a muggle girl, but other than that the fic was believable. It was well written and I enjoyed it.
One very small nitpick. I think that Voldemort asked for an elf and Regulus volounteered Kreacher, rather than being asked for him. Other than that the fic is canon complient.
Yet another marvellous fic from Wings of the Morning. I love your portrayal of Regulus, and also the intriguing themes woven through this fic.
This sketch of Regulus's life made me hate him and pity him at the same time. The way you showed his confusion about his identity was both subtle and stabbing, from his jealousy of his brother to his crush on Alice. And your style of writing, with all the italics and parenthases, added a lot to the mood. This made me see a new side of Regulus, as well as more major characters, and it was amazing.