Reviews For The Hero Complex
Reviewer: shewolf2000
Date: 05/29/08 21:57
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello amazing! I'm so glad that the rewrite is up! So far, it looks a lot like the first one, but I thought the first one was excellent, so it's all good. I'm excited to see where it's headed! Just for curiosity, how much did you change? I loved the beans part the first time around and I loved it the second time around just as much. I mean, who didn't enjoy eating grass as a kid? ;)

Just one thing I noticed - and don't ask me why I notice these things because I don't know - Belby would come before Black in alphabetical order. I may be the only one who notices something that trivial, but you might want to change Damocles's surname to something different.

Anyway, great job! I hope to see some more up soon! - Anna

Author's Response: Yeah, most of the changes were in the tense or POV, with a few subtle little things to make Remus seem shyer, and Sirius a little less friendly right off. And the sandwiches. Because I decided that sandwiches are the extent of James' cooking ability, so they will probably come up later.rnrnThank you for pointing out the alphabetical glitch. I changed it to Blenkinsop, Barnabus--some random bloke i found on the Lexicon. :) and thank you for the lovely review!

Reviewer: Phoenix13
Date: 05/26/08 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Yay! It's validated! This is great. Let's hope the next chappie gets up soon...I'll try and beta quickly :)

Author's Response: I'll try and write quickly as well...and see how it goes. You've been a fantastic beta so far--thank you for that!

Reviewer: Methionine
Date: 05/26/08 16:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

Peter was marvelous, all of the characters were, but I liked Peter the best. Nice Sorting Hat song.

Author's Response: Thanks, Melis! I didn't really think I did that great of a job on Peter...I'll have to play more with that character later, I guess. I know how much you like him. (??!?)

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