Reviews For Written with Tears
Reviewer: Lunicle
Date: 09/20/08 20:20
Chapter: Words Hurt

This is a really nice story. But I do have a question- why does it have an AU warning? Just curious. :D


The CC Section:

#1: "As he swooped down, he suck his leg out..."

Typo- should read: As he swooped down, he stuck his leg out...

#2: "To her he would just be that guy I once knew, No-one important, just a part of her past. "

Now, I'm not British, so I can hardly be called an expert at Brit-picking, but I think it would sound better this way...

"To her he would just be that bloke she once knew, no one important, just a part of her past."


I think this is a really emotional fic, and I absolutely loved it! I'm so glad you reviewed mine, or I wouldn't have found this. (I always read the author pages of anyone who leaves me a review.)

The note at the end was just... heartbreaking, but at the same time very sweet and wonderful.

Good luck with your next fic!


Author's Response:

oops! I accidently replied to your review with a review. :P

It has an AU warning because this scene doesn't actually happen in the books. (See The Princes Tale) Also I needed to get this story past the lovely modlies. :)

I submitted by newest story a few daays ago but it wasn't approved due to a few grammatical and capitalisation errors but hopefully they are sorted out now! It's a bit of a weird one though.

I think I will make those changes you suggested when I get a chance.

Thanks for the feedback. :D


 ps. I've just read your profile and it is so funny! :D Its good to know someone else is as mad as me and likes Evanescence! hehe

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 05/21/08 6:51
Chapter: Words Hurt

The breaking of the friendship must have been as hard for Lily as it was for Severus, and I like how you show that here. He was the person who had introduced her to the wizarding world and they had been best friends through all their time at Hogwarts. This is very well written. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review, it is much appreciated. *i award you one big chocloate cookie* :P

Reviewer: dani123
Date: 05/17/08 17:39
Chapter: Words Hurt

Aww..... That was so sad! *sobs loudly* But it was good at the same time. This has been the first time I've ever read fan fiction about that night when..... *sob* Enough of my sentimental-ness. You did an excellent job. :D

Author's Response: Awww don't cry. You'll set me off!rnrnThanks for the feedback. In addition to your choc chip cookie you also get a tissue. :)rnrn~Anna

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 05/16/08 14:32
Chapter: Words Hurt

Ooooooooo. That was pretty. It's really weird, because I'm listening to a song from iTunes called 'I Dont Want To Miss A Thing' by Aerosmith (yea i'm young, but I love songs that my dad listens to) and this seems like it could have been based on that song! It's really ironic! It's really cool that I found this story while listening to a song like it! Anywayz, 10000000000/10 and perfect job! I liked it, but how is it dark/angsty? Not that it matters. Great job! {Becca}

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. *gives choc cookie*rnrnIts a dark/angsty fic on recommendation from one of my betas and because its a bit sad.rnrnby the way, you have great music taste! I'm 16 and I like Aerosmith too. :)rnrn~Anna

Reviewer: rhiannon113
Date: 05/16/08 14:13
Chapter: Words Hurt

Lovely. Really, I cried.

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback!!rnrnI almost cried writing it though that might have been because it was my last day ever at school aswell. :(rnrn*gives white choc chip cookie*

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback!!rnrnI almost cried writing it though that might have been because it was my last day ever at school aswell. :(rnrn*gives white choc chip cookie*

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