Reviews For Vision Quest
Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 04/09/09 18:05
Chapter: Vision Quest

Excellent story, but it has a lot typos and mistaken word choices:

"...Magical Arts will me invited to participate..."
should be "be invited"

"in harms way"
should be "in harm's way"

"Adam ran his wand hand threw the brittle plants..."
should be "through the brittle plants..."

"The chose to close in one at a time..."
should be "They chose..."

and so on. Please reread your story slowly, and I'm sure you'll find all of the errors. I find that reading a story out loud improves my self-editing.

Author's Response: Thank you. Typos have always been a weakness of mine, but hope I am getting better.

Reviewer: Athenas Quill
Date: 06/28/08 18:12
Chapter: Vision Quest

Wow. That was awesome.

Author's Response: ThanX a bunch!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 06/26/08 12:49
Chapter: Vision Quest

A story without a review? We musn't have that...

First off, I love the name of the school. It flows very nicely, and is rather original. The whole plot flows well; you're very descriptive and make Adam seem real.

"No, Adam. You don’t flip a coin!” was very funny. The professor is a cool character- he's trying to be all wise and stuff, but he gets frustrated.

You left a very good messgae at the end, and Adam realizes it nicely. Good job on the story- I can see why it won!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like it so much. I was very happy to win first place for this story, but I think Ravenclaw was even happier!

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