Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 06/25/08 10:42
Chapter: Still Going Through

I thought this was a great chapter!

Reviewer: bluemoon13
Date: 06/18/08 13:48
Chapter: Memories

I enjoyed this! I like how you protrayed the relationship between Sirius and his family- how Regulus and Sirius really act like brothers and how Sirius feels regret that his family turned out the way they did. I aslo thought you handled the flashbacks and memories well. I liked how you used photographs to explain the memory, and your transitions from memory to what is happening at the moment are fairly smooth.
Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: ginnygirl16
Date: 06/07/08 17:36
Chapter: Memories

ok, so what my question is, is- when is the next chapter going to be up cuase this stoary is FREAKIN AWESOME!

Reviewer: Sly One
Date: 06/07/08 9:02
Chapter: Memories

You are humble requested not to stop for the sake of all Potterkind.

SLy 

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 06/07/08 7:49
Chapter: Memories

I cannot stop reading this story. It's a great story, and I do hope you continue updating soon. :]

--V.

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 06/07/08 1:35
Chapter: Memories

Wonderful! Absolutely wonderful! I like the scenes where you show that Sirius in fact had a normal and loving family relationship in his childhood, and that both boys were really close.

If your other chapters are like the first two, then I'm already the biggest fan of your work. Bravo and congratulations!

Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 06/05/08 6:22
Chapter: Still Going Through

Wow, Tiff! That was amazing. Sirius-ly. It's no hidden fact that I love Sirius, so that added of course. But I really did liked this chapter. And, no, don't you dare abandon this fic. Continue it, yeah? Lovely job! =)

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 06/02/08 1:59
Chapter: Still Going Through

Wow, wow, wow. Fantastic beginning to what I imagine is going to be an even more fantastic story. I have always believed that Sirius loved his family, especially in his childhood, and that the change to what he eventually became started when he first met James, Remus and Peter. But no matter what happens to someone in the course of his/her life – you’ll always love your family, even if you say that you don’t.

Wonderful beginning. Can’t wait to read what you’re planning next.

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 05/25/08 13:34
Chapter: Still Going Through

Hey, TIff! I've worked my way throught that reading list! lol.

Even if he hadn't known his mother well enough to know that she would have done such an action, the fact that the door was locked when he first came back and that there were spider webs everywhere with enormous blankets of dust on everything would have told him such a fact.

This sentence is kind of confusing. What action did Sirius know his mother would do? What was the fact that the dust and locked door would have told him?

Even if he hadn't known his mother well enough to know that she would have done such an action, the fact that the door was locked when he first came back and that there were spider webs everywhere with enormous blankets of dust on everything would have told him such a fact.

He had left, the door had been locked, and the room hadn't been disturbed for nearly twenty years.

The room still made him smile, even now when he loathed this house of his fathers. It was exactly how he had left it so many years ago.


Okay, so you've just told us three times in three consectutive paragraphs that his door was locked and his room stayed the same. I think that you could work something out that tells us that only once but still says something about his mother locking the door and spells lasting longer than he thought (By the way, I really liked that line).

Those are my only nitpicks.

I really like the beginning with the rain and Sirius feeling cooped up. It seemed very IC and it was a good opening to your story.

I love how he has happy memories from his childhood and I love how Walburga loved him and he was her favorite. I've read a lot of stories where she abuses him, but I love the way you show it. It's very believable and I can't wait to see where you're going with it.

A rush of memories about the day that the photo was taken began to flood Sirius's mind, and he put his back to the wall and slid down to the floor as he allowed the thoughts to consume him.

I love the analogy of the memories to water and I like how you told us his actions.

Great job! I can't wait for chapter two!

-Mere

Reviewer: lullaby BANG
Date: 05/16/08 22:25
Chapter: Still Going Through

Aw Tiff! This was so good, and I can totally see why you're proud of it. Brilliant start!

Author's Response: Thanks, Jess! :) I'm really glad you liked it!

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 05/15/08 11:43
Chapter: Still Going Through

I have to admit that I'm not too fond of this category, but you, love, completely blew the house down. Keep updating, Tiff.

Author's Response: Yay! My first review for this story! Thank you so much, Vicki! You're too sweet. =) *Squish* And.. I will possibly be updating soon! Yay!

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