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Name: gerberb (Signed) · Date: 04/26/09 19:49 · For: Chapter 56 A Trail of Umbrage
Nice chapter. Glad you updated. I really enjoy your fic.

Author's Response: Thanks for the complement. The story is going to get a lot more exciting, with cliffhangers are the end of some of the upcoming chapters, unfortunately. Hope the waits in queue won't be too long.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 04/25/09 22:32 · For: Chapter 56 A Trail of Umbrage
Absolutely amazing. There was never any doubt Umbridge was a slimey evil toad. Have we gotten rid of her yet? I can't remember. I like the way the photo album was destroyed. That the chemical to destroy it practically said here I am, use me to burn that thing! Wish Harry hadn't had to lose the photos. That pretty much sucked.
Love the paper he did on Snape. Harry's convinced Snape will be vindicated. But will he be saved? Was there a hint in there who wife #2 is? I'm still leaning towards Trelawney. Are she and McGonagall friends? Can't remember that either.

Author's Response: Glad you liked Harryís take on Snapeís predicament. Losing the photos was difficult for him, but it will help him to emphasize the future over the past as Lily once advised Lupin. Umbridge is one of those career bureaucrats that always seems to hang on despite the change in administration, although she may get shuffled from one department to another. Makes you wonder whether she had the goods on those in power and they donít dare offend her, doesnít it? I promise Harry will work out the identity of Snapeís wife before itís all said and done; although, Iíve tried to pepper the tale with hints much as JKR would have done. You donít necessarily know who McGonagallís friends are and considering how long she has taught at Hogwarts, sheís had time to make plenty in the area. Thatís all that I can say for now.

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 04/14/09 20:15 · For: Chapter 55 Tonks' Tea Party
This chapter was great as always, but very entertaining as well - I want a wizard for my Scrabble game, lol! Man, love the romance. And Ginny is one of my favorite characters in general, I can't wait to see her pull off the variation on apparation. Glad that Harry got new pictures as well, but even if he didn't, I would be that it wouldn't stop him from doing what needed to be done.

Not sure if this story is Beta'd or not, but some sections has some....awkward phrases or grammatical errors. For example, when Harry is talking with McGonsgall concerning his letter to Gringott's:

“I’ve just seen to it that he inherits half of my parents’ estate, it shouldn’t surprise you that I’m familiar with how his mind works.”

These are two separate thoughts and should probably be separated into two sentences or by a semi-colon. There were a few other instances; thought you might be interested to know. I'm no writer or Beta by any means, so obviously you can respectfully disagree.

Author's Response: I want one of those Scrabble games myself. Thanks for catching the punctuaton error. It was one of the last minute changes that I made and I did orginally have it as too separate sentences, but that didn't seem right, either. I truly think the semi-colon was the best solution so I took your advise. Anything else you see (awkwardness in phrasing, whatever) please don't hesitate to comment on it. That's the only way I can improve. Antiquarian computer that doesn't allow for attachments on e-mails keeps me from using a beta, but I swear I got over everything a million times at least. I admit I'm still a little leery about using too many semi-colons after I read a story (that had been beta'd) that had them every five words -- I kid you not.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 04/14/09 14:05 · For: Chapter 55 Tonks' Tea Party
Harry is a very smart guy, and sneaky when it comes to making sure his friends get what he wants them to have.
Hopefully Remus will be able to take regular Wolfsbane next month. Or maybe Snape will come up with something better. Stranger things have happened.
Wonder where Hermione and Ron disappeared? Was it just to Hogsmeade to get the new game? Bet it was something more fun.
Harry is planning something for Ginny's 17th. This could be lots of fun.
I'm just not with it today. Can't concentrate on a good review.

Author's Response: You'll find out what Ron and Hermione have been up to in the next chapter. It's already in queue. Harry's not sure what he's planning yet -- he just wants to make every effort to get the girl of his dreams. Can't really comment on anything else, if you know what I mean...

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 03/28/09 10:56 · For: Chapter 1 The Secret Life of Hippogriffs
Wow...this chapter was great! When I saw your AN to my last review I knew I had to leave one on this chapter...I was really touched you answered my questions, thank you! I don't like Snape, particularly, but I really liked this chapter for several reasons.

I like the interactions between Harry, Ron, and Hermione, and I felt like there haven't been that many in this story...Harry has started seeking his guidance elsewhere. And I really liked that Ron made significant contributions! I hate stories that make Ron out to be a bumbling idiot.

Snape is quite the complex fellow, and I hope that's not the end of his story...but I have a feeling it's not. :) One more horcrux down! His next interaction with Harry via the mirrors should be interesting...

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: So good to hear from you again! I long ago decided that the relationship between Ron and Hermione would never work if Ron was a total buffoon. Sure, he canít help being a clown at times (the legacy of Fred and George) but he has something valuable to contribute besides just moral support. Youíll be pleased to see that Ron and Hermione will be right by Harryís side as they tackle the Horcruxes one by one -- and in detail. It is an inescapable fact of life that as we grow older, relationships change. In order for Ron and Hermione to realistically form a closer bond, Harry has to find himself as the odd man out at times. Negotiating these changes is so much a part of reaching adulthood that I knew I could not ignore them if I wanted my tale to ring true. Never fear, Snape will be back. His dialog is entirely too much fun to write! Next chapter is already in queue and I hope it wonít be as long a wait as last time.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 03/27/09 16:43 · For: Chapter 54 The Circus Maximus
Another Horcrux down. Snape is becoming more of an enigma surrounded by a mystery than usual.
At least Ron & Hermione are willing to look at him with an open mind.

Author's Response: That's Snape as his snarky best. Seemingly impossible constradictions somehow make sense as part of his character. Don't worry, we're not through with him yet -- not by a long shot.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 03/27/09 15:53 · For: Chapter 53 Poisons
There would certainly be more questions than Harry would have reasonable answers to. Hopefully no one will push the questions too far and just accept that Harry was concerned and wanted to help.

Author's Response: Tonks is pretty good about accepting things at face value. It's Lupin who's a virtual bloodhound in search of the truth -- which is why Harry wants to keep his name out of it. That and the fact that he would feel guilty taking credit that is not his, but truly belongs to Snape. Not that Lupin and Tonks would accept assistance from Snape if they knew...

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/11/09 23:08 · For: Chapter 6 Lupin's Career Advice
Well, this sounds intrigueing...Making money on the side while finishing their final year at Hogwarts.
I bet Fred and George will have them testing anything and everything!
Another great chapter!

Author's Response: I've been having a tremendous time coming up with the new WWW products. The sky's the limit with Fred and George... Am particularly proud of their version of Wizard's Scrabble although that doesn't come into the story until Chapter 55 or so. It's not posted yet, but I was reworking some of the funnier lines earlier this week so it's been on my mind.

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/11/09 22:53 · For: Chapter 5 Tonks Triumphant
Great chapter! Alot of fun and amusing moments. Sounds like Lupin and Tonks had a fun wedding ceromony.
Lupin probably did'nt want to show off his skinny arms! lol ;0)

Author's Response: Lupin may surprise you yet. As for the wedding ceremony, it will actually be told in detail in the last chapter of my prequel that I am uploading tomorrow.

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/10/09 22:18 · For: Chapter 4 - All Aboard, Again!
Another fascinating chapter! Seems like Tonks is abit cheerier than in the actual HP books, Hslf Blood Prince and DH.
Are she and Lupin married in this story?
Glad to see that Lupin is head of Gryffindor House. Apparently the stigma of his lyncanthropy does'nt bother folks any more.

Author's Response: Yes, Tonks and Lupin are married in this story, but Harry and company don't yet know about it. All will be explained in the next few chapters. There wasn't a lot of info on Tonks in canon so I have tried to flesh her out by incorporating what we do know but not letting that be the only aspects of her personality. After all, she has to have some depth or her relationship with Lupin won't work to my way of thinking. As far as Lupin is concerned, the world is still predisposed against werewolves, but as the new headmistress, McGonagall, doesn't buy into that type of prejudice and does not condone it in her school. As the story plays out, you will see that she has a very realistic view of Lupin's health issues but will not let them get in her way, if she can help it. There's a lot more to her relationship with Lupin and how it was established when he was a Prefect with her as his head of house. But I don't want to spoil it too much for you...

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/10/09 22:00 · For: Chapter 3 - The Endless Possibilities of Floo Powder
This will be interesting to see the trio attend Hogwarts in their seventh year. I'm quite interested in seeing how this story plays out.
I'm enjoying it immensly, and if you ask me, Dudley would be best served working at McDonald's! Or as a grocery clerk! He's not the brightest lightbulb in the chandelier! ;0)

Author's Response: Yes, we all see Dudley's short-comings. But to his parents, he's a god. Which I suspect is the crux of the problem right there...

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/07/09 22:43 · For: Chapter 2 - Findings
Hmm, seems like they found the Slytherin necklace, one of Voldemort's horcruxes.
I'm glad they got away safely, pretty close call I'd say.

Author's Response: Hopefully more chapters have been posted since you last gave this a read. Hope you continue to enjoy the complexities of the story lines.

Name: moonstargazer (Signed) · Date: 03/07/09 22:28 · For: Chapter 1 The Secret Life of Hippogriffs
I had started reading this story, awhile back, then I forgot about it.
Still a great read, amazing what a grieving hippogriff can to to a room. Seems like Kreacher has changed allegience.
Great story!

Author's Response: Glad you found the story again. As far as Kreacher is concerned, I see him as rather senile and reliving the glory days of his youth in his own mind.

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/09 19:43 · For: Chapter 53 Poisons
I have been meaning to leave you a review for chapters! I have been faithfully reading - mostly through my phone, as I've been working like a dog lately at a new job, and its really hard to leave a review through the Blackberry.

Keep up the great work! I really enjoyed the last chapter, and I was really looking forward to seeing the duel between Ginny and Luna! Understand why the story's progressing...Snape is a very complex fellow! I like his involvement in the story...wonder if the day will come where we'll see him face to face? I really like Tonks' and Remus' relationship in this story.

Just curious...this story is very complex and already at 53 chapters...how long did it take you to plan and write it? I admire your abilities, especially how you've interwoven so many little details from the world JK Rowling has created. It was incredible reading the excerpt from the Potions textbook - it was really technical for being about potions, lol!

Love the quick updates and the story, so I apologize now for probably not leaving a review on the next few chapters as I sneak quick reads in at work!

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review. Glad to know Iím helping you make it through the tough times. Nothing worse that slow moments at work, believe me. Nice to know that you liked the Potions book excerpt; I was worried that I had made it too dry to appeal to readers. But then textbooks are supposed to be dry, right? Thanks for the approval for my take on Remus and Tonks. I really struggled with how I was going to make her into something that would appeal to Remus, because I certainly didnít see any magnetism between them in canon. Granted thatís why JKR was able to spring it on us as such a big surpriseÖ I didnít want Tonksí young age to translate into immaturity as that would end up painting poor Remus as a bit of a pedophile, especially in light of how much he clearly enjoys working with children. I also didnít want her to be nothing more than comic relief with her clumsiness, either. Everyone already knows that Filch and Mrs. Norris are the true comic relief of the tale. Well, Snape, too, if you look at his black humor, but a lot of people really donít get that! The key to Tonks turned out to be that I have a long time friend from my days in middle school that is a klutz at times but also very graceful when she dances. I used that apparent contradiction for Tonks and then added more, such as the fact that she dresses down and appears more childlike as a cover for her true prowess as an Auror. Who would suspect the bird in torn jeans, a worn T-shirt and trainers? It was a very clever way for her to approach Stealth. As for meeting Snape face to face, you are about to get the opportunity in the chapter that is currently in queue. And he is in rare form, snarky to the bitter end. As far as the planning of the story, it really all started as an idea for a contest to write the opening chapter of the yet unpublished seventh book. So I didnít make the deadline; inspiration is a fickle thing. Not to mention that the word limit for the contest was so restrictive that I could not have included the entire tale of the trioís incursion into Grimmauld Place and I desperately needed that hook at the end where Harry shows the others that heís found the tarnished locket. Once I got that far, my mind was already working out where I would go from there. And by the time I wrote the chapter about how the Dursleys were desperately seeking a University slot for Dudley, I was hooked. Since then, it had taken me about nine months to plan and execute said tale. But I confess that Iíve been a bit obsessive and managed to write at least 3 or 4 pages every day. The outline kept getting adjusted on a daily basis to make sure that all the important (yet seemingly random) facts got incorporated in the right place and that no chapter failed to contribute to the end product. Needless to say, the revision is taking me much longer. I confess I have found a few continuity errors not unlike JKRís when she had Harryís parents materialize out of Voldemortís wand in reverse order. Luckily, they have been corrected before the chapters got posted to Mugglenet. Thanks for noticing all the little details. Many I have added on my own, but many were there in the original tapestry. Couldnít have done it without the Harry Potter Lexicon website which is a real godsend for fan fiction writers. Not that I donít have to refer to the original books, but the Lexicon helps me narrow my search so that I can maximize my time. Sorry if this seems way too long, but I really wanted to give you complete answers since you took the time to review. Donít be a stranger.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 03/01/09 23:04 · For: Chapter 52 The Contingency Plan
Definitely another great chapter. Will Remus go back to the regular Wolfsbane Potion? Will they be able to hide that from the Board of Governors'? I'm glad the antidote worked and McGonagall was able to be with him. I had no doubts the contingency plan would work, they are Gryffindor's after all, with a Ravenclaw thrown in for good measure. Tonks is a Hufflepuff, but married to a Gryffindor works out well. Can't wait to see the "Clash of the Champions". Should be a lot of fun.

Author's Response: More about the Wolfsbane Potion in the chapter that I am uploading today. Can't say much more than that, sorry. The "Clash of Champions" will have an unexpected wrinkle, but isn't that just like life... Nothing ever goes the way we plan. The teachers show that they can also get creative for that event.

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 02/21/09 23:10 · For: Chapter 51 Pandora's Box
Very good chapter. Very scary chapter. Snape is, mostly, his usual evasive self, but he does sound concerned that Lupin may be being poisoned and want to help. The meeting with him, Harry, Hermione and Ron should be interesting. I am most certainly praying for Remus full recovery.
And there seems to be concern that someone is more than actively after Harry, Remus and Tonks on this particular day?

Author's Response: Issues with Snape always seem to come down to the same thing: is he one of us or one of them? Or perhaps playing for his own little egotistical ends -- how very Slytherin of him! As for Remus, Tonks and Harry, I'm afraid things will get worse before they get better...

Name: gerberb (Signed) · Date: 02/21/09 17:11 · For: Chapter 51 Pandora's Box
Thanks, for the update. I really am enjoying your story. Nice cliff hanger.

I am just glad it is now instead of last episode. Maybe the wait will not be so long to know what is happening. I must admit I really want to read the next chapter.

This chapter was well written and interesting.


Author's Response: I uploaded the new chapter yesterday afternoon, so keep your fingers crossed. No cliffhanger this next time, promise.

Name: gerberb (Signed) · Date: 02/20/09 7:58 · For: Chapter 50 The Fires of Hades
I really enjoyed this chapter. I hope you update soon. I really want to read the next installment.
Thanks for a good story.

Author's Response: Next chapter has been in queue for over a week now, so I'm just as impatient as you. Thanks for the words of encouragement!

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 01/30/09 21:02 · For: Chapter 50 The Fires of Hades
Some very intense moments. Did Remus realize Dumbledore wanted Snape to "kill him" and that's what was so disturbing? And the hatred he saw on Snape's face when he looked at both Harry and Draco was maybe because in a roundabout way Snape was blaming both of them for making him kill Albus and Remus recognized it as such? I'm going to make a wild guess that part of Remus illness has to do with the time he spent in the werewolf compound?

Author's Response: All very good, intuitive questions -- and I can't answer a single one at this time. Suffice it to say that next chapter will go a long way towards laying things out as Lupin and Harry get a change to work their way through the labyrinth together. Will upload new chapter tomorrow, guaranteed!

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 01/24/09 18:24 · For: Chapter 1 The Secret Life of Hippogriffs
Thank God someone has limits, lol. I think Rita and Wormtail deserve each other. Luckily I just have to walk to the kitchen for the booze, no driving involved!

Author's Response: Can you imagine Rits interviewing Wormtail as part of a PR push by Voldemort who wants the public to know that he's just been misunderstood all these years? If I had any talent for a Monty Pythonesque send-up, it could be hilarious...

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