Wow! I thought that was brilliant! Great job! I only have one nitpick and that is you spelled "daffodils" wrong once. Other than that, wonderful!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And thanks for pointing out the miss spelling I'll have to fix that!
Oh, it's so sweet! I absolutely adore the fact that love was a music that could be heard as well as felt. It really added something special.
Now for the words that popped out and added their own special something: "twilight," "creak," and "flutter."
My favourite part is the fourteenth stanza:
"She talked with him,
Laughed with him,
Like they used to.
And then he heard it."
This really is the 'feel-good' moment of the poem and a good one at that.
The poem is very lovely and captivating, and you managed to close it with a 'killer ending' that leaves the reader smiling.
Author's Response: Thankyou thankyou so much! So sorry I didn't respond earlier. I only just discovered I had reviews!
First Potter poem!?! Wow, I would have guessed that you'd have written a few, since this one is BRILLIANT! I love the rhythm that your poem has. The message is super sweet, too. You masterfully captured father-daughter love. --And I'm in love with your penname! It's so bright and cheerful!
Author's Response: Prize to the first reviewer! Thanks so much!