I think that you did a wonderful job with this poem, but then I'm one of your biggest fans. :) I followed that this was Bellatrix, and think you really caught her mind well. Cyns
Author's Response: Bellatrix is someone this could have been... :)
Another brilliant poem! Good job! :)
Author's Response: Another fun poem to write! I am working on trying to write about the dark side of things...as I admit I often times try to ignore that side of the world...to maintain the child within me...but it also can't be ignored and as a Pediatric Intensive Care nurse...I see it all the time. Thanks for the review! They are always appreciated!
I must admit, I've always had a spot of trouble with interpreting poetry. Am I right to assume it's from Voldemort's point of view?
First, my favourite part of reviewing: talking about words. Some words from your poem I thought really added something extra to it: "quell", "mistress." The thing you seem to have done with this poem is not reaching for exotic words, but taking everpresent words and shaping them to your will, which you have done quite nicely.
"A Dark Mark is enough to impel
Desperate cries to my decree."
These are my favourite lines because there's something very dark and powerful about them, to me at least.
Although that is my favourite part, the cleverest and most interesting part would have to be: "Voldemort has a mistress of death."
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! This poem is actually about Bellatrix...the "Mistress" of death. :) Glad you liked it.