It's really good, but its a little to much like the books. Its lyra's story, go crazy with it!
Some of the early chapters are a lot like the books, but eventually they break away from that. Since this is the first chapter, I'm trying to show how Lyra's life ties in with the canon characters.
I like it a lot! Keep it going, this is really good!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm going to update right away!
It was great to see the interaction between Tonks and Lindsey. I'm not surprised Lindsey looks more like Andromeda, it'll be all the pureblood inbreeding, marrying cousins for centuries and that sort of thing, there won't be many variation in genes. Poor Percy, it appears nobody is that fond of him. I hated him until he came back in DH to help in the battle, then i just disliked him. I can't wait for the next chapter, I wonder what Lindsey thinks of the marching death eaters and the dark mark. I was a little surprised to see Bellatrix showing motherly concern, but perhaps she was more worried about having her child brought up by anyone other than a death eter. You would think Narcissa would've taken Lindsey in though, perhaps she secretly hoped to save Lindsey from Lucius' death eater ideolog, something that for her own son was unavoidable. I'm sorry, I just love to analyse and completley confuse situations. Hope you update soon and thanks.
It was fun to write about Tonks/Lindsey because they act just like sisters. I agree with you about Percy because I hated him in OotP but wasn't surprised when he came back in DH. The reason Bellatrix was upset about Lyra being sent to the Tonks family is because she wants her raised on the Dark Side and especially not by her disowned sister. As far as the Dark Mark, this will be the next chapter and is basically the beginning of everything! Thanks for your nice review!
this sounds like it could be a really great story. I will keep reading. Well done...........waiting for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy future chapters.
You've really caught my attention with this prologue. I always wondered why Bellatrix never had children, I presumed she was just to fixated on being Voldemort's most loyal death eater, but this explanation is much more interesting. And it would make sense for the pureblood mad to reproduce to keep their family lines going. I wonder if Lindsey would've ended up in Slytherin if she'd gone to the Malfoy's or if she, like Sirius, was just made a Gryffindore. Can't wait for an update,
Wow, thank you! I'm a big Black fan, and I really wanted to experiment with a storyline where Bella had a daughter. My original idea was 'the Lestranges have a daughter who doesn't want to be on the Dark Side' which is why I put her in Gryffindor. Thanks again for your nice review!
PS: I think Lyra would have been a Slytherin if the Malfoys raised her because she would have been brought up differently. Thanks for mentioning that--it was something I hadn't thought about!
Nice prologue, it sets up the story's background nicely. Can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! There's a lot more to come!
Hmm...Lindsey/Lyra seems a little bit self-piteous. I would also have reccomended some kind of action or question at the end of the prolgue to inspire readers to care about what happens to Lindsey/Lyra. Other than that though, the story sounds good so far.
Author's Response: Well...she may seem that way. I know the prologue is fairly boring and slow-moving, but it's meant to give background information and not really have action. There will be action later in the story, I promise! Anyway, thanks for my first review!