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Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 08/07/09 18:41 · For: Prologue
ha ha no it fits her character well

Author's Response: I think so, too. She's supposed to be a good split between dark and light at this point.

Name: Aradion (Signed) · Date: 08/07/09 6:04 · For: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories
Wow, AMAZING CHAPTER (hope the Caps Lock wasn't too much but still... the chapter was fascinating!) I can't believe you thought the Pensieve- creating theory was corny! You know what, ever since I read the summary of part three I kept thinking about how badly I wanted Lyra to use a Pensieve somewhere along her search and well... she did. And it came up at the beginning too, so I don't mind her using a potion or Mrs Weasley having an idea of creating one. Now, what else can I say? I loved that air of mystery about the memories and you were right about avoiding to put Lyra's thoughts in between. It would have probably ruined most of the outcome. By the way, I liked the way you portrayed the Black sisters as well...especially Bellatrix! I've read so many fics about her where she would either be OOC or the misunderstood, nice lady. But you did a great job with her, you showed her in a softer light but did not forget that she always had this penchant for the dark side. So well done and keep up the good work! Until, next time, cheers!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I don't mind the caps lock. I'm glad you like Bellatrix. I really like to believe that she wasn't always so bad and has some potential light in her, so I made her close to her sisters :) I'm also really happy that the Pensieve thing sounded all right. I wrote this chapter way in advance but added that in later (it used to be that Lyra went to the Order meeting and Mad-Eye Moody just happened to have a Pensieve with him, which seemed to coincidental to me, so I changed it). Thanks for a great review!

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 08/06/09 9:36 · For: Chapter 29- Dora's Diary
ahhhhh yes tonks and lupin love the chapter but i cant help but think that half of Lyra is ok with Remus yet the Lestrange in her says its wrong i dont maybe its just me.
Great story update soon i want to see what happens next

Author's Response:

Yes, the Remus and Tonks chapter :) You will find out what Lyra thinks of Remus (most of it will come later on) but for now I can say that she thinks he's a good man but absolutely wrong for her cousin because of his werewolf condition! I plan on updating soon!

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 08/06/09 9:25 · For: Chapter 28- Rage in the Robe Shop
yeaaaaa finally she has met narcissa good i have been waiting for this i like her constant use of using the unforgivable curse very good

Author's Response: Thanks! Many people don't like how she uses a lot of Crucios but I kind of like it because I think it rounds out the story well...I mean, she has to have some dark and some light in her. I don't feel so crazy now that I know I'm not the only one who likes this part of the story (I swear I'm not twisted!).

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 08/05/09 23:18 · For: Chapter 29- Dora's Diary
I've been looking forward to this chapter for a long time, and, I have to say, you didn't dissapoint!
Will Tonks and Lyra still be fighting when Lyra leaves for school? Or will they make up before hand? Or will they make up while they're at school since (this just occured to me) this is the book where Tonks is stationed at Hogwarts... (Even thought she wasn't in the movie =P)
I have to say, I loved the insight into both sides, and I'm totally with Tonks on this one!
I'm assuming (hoping, really) that Lyra's attitude will improve once she's at school. Though I don't see how that's at all possible since the people will all probably be horrible... (I'm not sure if it'll be worse from the Gryffindors or the Slytherins...)
Okay, this review has offically turned into a rant, so I'm going to finish now... I loved the chapter! Submit the next one soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Ps. Congrats on making featured!

Author's Response:

Lyra and Tonks won't be angry at each other when she returns (I didn't write a make-up scene, though) although they may have some bumpy spots while Lyra's away (remember the journals they use to talk to each other? Those return!). They'll get to see each other in person when Lyra goes to Hogsmeade (since Tonks is stationed there).

You will get to see how everyone reacts when Lyra's at school in the next chapter! And you're right, some will be horrible... :( It has to happen...

I think I'm ranting now, too. Thanks, as always! And I'm sorry it took longer than usual to respond to this.

Name: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer (Signed) · Date: 08/03/09 14:40 · For: Chapter 25- Going Back
WHOA!!! I like completly missed that therre were more chappies!!! well, now i have to catch up!!!!
it was a good chapter, but Lyra wondered if Askaban had changed bellatrix, which doesn't make any sense, as she was sent there BECAUSE she was evil-and changed, right?
well, i'mma go read the nexy chappie :P

Author's Response: Haha, yeah, I've been submitting a lot because I have the time and they have been getting validated quickly! You're right, Bellatrix was in Azkaban because she was evil, but it seems to me like she went more evil and definitely insane while she was there! I didn't really catch that, so thanks...maybe I'll change it if I feel up to it :P

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 08/03/09 11:38 · For: Chapter 28- Rage in the Robe Shop
Great chapter! Hmm... it does seem Lyra has abit of an issue with that temper... I thought Tonks was going to spill something about Lupin- I'm wishing she had, though I know you said you have a whole chpter for it... I don't like Tonks in this mood... Not because I don't like how your writing it, just that I like Tonks to be an over all happy person...
Anyway, I'm looking forward to everything coming up! Submit the next chapter soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response: I don't really like Tonks in this mood either because she's such a bubbly, fun character, but I have to stick with canon for this part :) I think you'll like the next chapter--it's short but it's the Tonks/Remus one. I'll submit it soon and thankfully updates have been quick (I'm taking advantage of that before I return to school!). Stay tuned!

Name: Marauders_weasleygirl02 (Signed) · Date: 08/02/09 21:25 · For: Chapter 26- Depression and Destruction
Hey! I like this chapter. I'm happy Andromeda is finally willing to let Lyra know about her memories.

Author's Response: Thanks! It's about time Andromeda tells her--she's been wondering for so long! Stay tuned to find out more about Bella's past :)

Name: Knitting-Chick (Signed) · Date: 07/30/09 21:14 · For: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories
I love this story and can't wait for the next chaper! Lyra's 6th year at Hogwarts should be interesting...

Author's Response: Thank you! Her sixth year will definitely be interesting!

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 23:56 · For: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories
Aww... poor Andy, I feel really bad for her!
I'm excited to see what Lyra's reaction to all of the memories will be!
I was absolutely shocked by how quickly this was updated! Of course, I'm not complaining, I'm just saying I was surprised.
I thought that the way she created the Pensieve was good. It worked.
Of course, after reading I had to google the Black family tree. And you know what I learned? I've googled it before. And do you know why? Because on chapter 17 I asked if Sirius's parents were really named Walburga and Orion and you told me yes and to search Balck family tree in a search engine to see the family tree. Now, about 10 chapters later, I've searched it again, lol.
Also, just wondering, what happened to chapters 27, 28, and 29? It goes from chapter 26 to chapter 30. I'm assuming it's just a typo...
One last thing before I finish, I loved the length of the chapter, it was nice and long!
Keep updating! Submit the next chapter soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response:

I was just as surprised to find it validated the day I submitted it! That doesn't happen much but it's always a good thing. I'm glad about the Pensieve thing--I kind of made that up on the spot yesterday.

Oh, does it say chapter 30? It's a mistake. I typed it as that but I really thought I went back and changed it. Oh well, maybe it didn't go through. It's supposed to be 27 or whatever...the reason that happened it because in the original draft there were more chapters, but they were short so I combined them, and in my Word copy the chapter number were only correct up through part 2. Hope that makes sense...

Thanks again, as always! I'll correct that error.

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 19:23 · For: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories
wow! you did update fast i mean i was just reviewing for the previous chapter like 5 minutes ago.
They definitely get better as they go along although i wish that Bella was closer to her sisters a little longer.

Author's Response: I was just as surprised! Usually it takes a week or two for a chapter to be validated but this one was approved after being in the queue for about two hours or so. I wish Bella could have been closer to them longer, too, but when Andromeda got with Ted it had to end between her and Bella. Although, as you know, she is still close to Narcissa. She drifted apart from them during the years she dated Rodolphus, but she stuck with Narcissa and would have stuck with Andromeda if it hadn't been for Ted.

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 19:05 · For: Chapter 26- Depression and Destruction
oh no major cliffhanger, quick! update i'm hanging on the edge here!
Love it and the way you have shown Bellatrix in a more softer light but not to much wouldn't want to ruin her born a death eater reputation!
(excuse my constant use of exclamation marks i've been doing it a lot lately force of habit)

Author's Response: Thanks! I really do believe Bella can have a soft side. This will be shown more, although she won't be too soft by any means, because I get what you're saying--she was born a Death Eater.

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 15:27 · For: Chapter 26- Depression and Destruction
And so it begins!
This is a great introduction piece, and I'm so excited for everything coming up!
I can't help but feel bad for Andy; I imagine this is hard on her.
And poor Dora! I'm excited to see what Lyra thinks when she finds out about Lupin being the cause of it!
Submit the next chapter soon! I love it, amazing as always! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you like it because I was afraid it was boring. I have a whole chapter devoted to Lyra finding out about Lupin...so stay tuned! Ironically I was working on fixing the next chapter just a while ago and then this was accepted, so I need to get back to that! I'll submit it today. Thanks for reviewing, especially so quickly, as always!

Name: Marauders_weasleygirl02 (Signed) · Date: 07/27/09 16:40 · For: Chapter 25- Going Back
Hey! I finally got on mugglenet after being punished. Anyway! I loved the chapter. But I do have some mixed feelings. Well no matter how mean Lyra was in this chapter, she was still awesome. She was like her mom. But she hurt Kreacher out of emotion. But she was kind of annoying. All the crying. But don't be offended. (please) I thought Harry was kind of annoying in Order Of the Phoenix. I know they had lost some one close to them but the whining! Ugh! Anyway. I really did like the chapter. Update when you can!
xoxo ~Marauders_weasleygirl02

Author's Response: Oops! Sorry about your punishment. I kind of get what you're saying with the whining but I had to give her a chapter to cry it out. Personally I thought Harry didn't grieve enough in HBP (Sirius wasn't mentioned much and I wondered why he had to be killed off) but maybe that's just because I tend to get really emotional when stuff happens. Not that this chapter was based off personal experience. I just know that when I lose a loved one/pet I don't get over it immediately. I'm not offended, though this won't be the last time Lyra grieves in the story. Hopefully it won't be as annoying because other stuff will be going on around her. You'll see in part three! Thanks for reviewing and continuing to read!

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/26/09 23:44 · For: Prologue
I don't mind spoiling, I swear! Spill all the secrets you want!

Author's Response: Haha, I get it, but I can't in case other readers read this and get something spoiled! Plus I love to be an evil writer ;)

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/26/09 19:41 · For: Prologue
Okay, I just read the part three synopsis (how long has that been there for?) And now I'm totally exicted for it! When I read 'Lyra experiences romance' I started smiling. Ah... the theories that jumped to my mind at that sentence... Neville? Somebody new? Somebody in another house? Personally, I hope it's Neville, but that's just me...
And she finds a way to control her violent tendencies... What will that be? I'm excited! I hope it's updated soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Ps. Sorry that I keep reviewing...

Author's Response:

It's only been there since I submitted the newest chapter, so a few days. I'm tempted to spill, of course, but I can't as that would be spoiling :) Um...what I can say is of the three possibilities you listed, one is right...but just in case I'm sending a wrong idea, I'll stop typing :P I have the next chapter in the queue, so it should be out soon, I hope. I say that a lot...

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/24/09 21:38 · For: Prologue
You do realize (I know we've discussed how to spell this word before, but again... I can't remember if it's an 's' or a 'z' and 'z' looks cooler, so... moving on...) that by telling me she's going to be 'too busy with... other things...' you're going to make me go insane! Especially since it's going to take forever for that part of the story to be posted... Though it gives me a long time to speculate... (which isn't always a good thing...)
Hmm... here's a few random speculations (the ones I can come up with off the top of my head)
1. She's looking for her parents?
2. She's with her parents?
3. She went on a mission of her own... Doing what you ask? I have NO idea... (though obviously you know)
4. Umm... umm... I'm trying to think of something, but I'm coming up blank... *sigh* I guess I'll have to wait and see...

On a different note, I can't wait for the next part! I love that you started to imply Lupin and Tonks in this chapter, so I'm hoping will see a fair deal of them while Lyra's home for the summer. I'm sure we'll be seeing some other characters there as well... Which, again, gets me started on speculation... I'm hoping to see Neville soon, so maybe he'll pop in for a visit. We'll probably see the Weasleys and Harry, if only a bit (or maybe quite a lot...) I'm going to stop now, but if you have any information you're willing to share I'd love to hear it! Until next time; Cheers!

Ps. Any thoughts on HBP after seeing it the second time around? PM me!

Author's Response:

Both are correct, but 's' is British English (I think...) and 'z' is American English. I know it's going to drive you insane! Authors love to be evil...when my best friend read this story she threatened to tie me up and make me watch horrible YouTube videos (can't say why, spoilers!) Believe me, I wish I could get this up faster too, but the submission process can take a while...I mean, I started this two summers ago, finished it the March after, started posting in May or so, and have spent the last year and two months doing just that only to get half the story up. Of course there were some long waits, lack of time, and chapter rejections along the way, but still...okay, I'm done ranting on that. Anyway, as far as your speculations, one of them is right but it's not the whole story. I know that will probably make you more crazy...

There will be some Lupin/Tonks stuff going on. I think the trio is in one scene (a scene from the book). Mostly you'll get a lot of the Tonks family. Everyone else will come back once she's in school. Hm...what information can I share that won't give too much away? Lyra will get her O.W.L. results. Not very important, but still...

As for HBP, I would say it wasn't quite as good the second time but I probably laughed more! Especially at the part where Harry did the Aragog pinchers. I loved the Felix Felicis scenes :D

Name: darkchocolatemntn (Signed) · Date: 07/24/09 20:15 · For: Prologue
but bellatrix wanted narcissa, lucius's wife to adopt the baby. im pretty sure lucius would have known about it

Author's Response:

Hm...that's a good point that I hadn't thought of. Since I can't change the story, maybe these things could make up for it:

1- Lucius hasn't necessarily seen Lyra, at least not since she was a baby, so he may not recognize her. However, her resemblance to her mother wouldn't fool him, so this isn't the best excuse

2- Lucius was very preoccupied that night at the Ministry and didn't necessarily notice Lyra was there, and didn't think to write to the Ministry when he was sent to Azkaban

Because of the way Bella asked Narcissa to adopt Lyra (I can't say how because it spoils something), Lucius didn't have to know Narcissa was asked to adopt her. However, I realized that since Lucius is in the family he would have known that Bella had a daughter. So...maybe it would have been better for Lucius to tell the Prophet but it's too late for me to change the story. Thanks for making me think, though!

Name: Marsha Johnsegn (Signed) · Date: 07/24/09 18:07 · For: Chapter 25- Going Back
I loved it! I feel bad for Kreacher, but I don't feel bad for Kreacher... Yeah, I know that made no sense.
I'm looking forward to part three! Will that be picking up with the start of a new school year? Or is it going to be summer and then school? Just wondering.
I'm hoping that we'll be seeing more of Bellatrix and Rodolphus during Lyra's search for answers. Something tells me that we will =]
Okay, I was thinking into the future (far into the future for this story) and I was wondering... Will Lyra be accompanying the Trio in Deathly Hallows? Or do you not know yet?
I'm looking forward to everything that's coming up! Submit the next chapter soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response:

I get what you're saying. You feel bad that he was tortured but don't feel bad because he kind of killed Sirius? I felt kinda bad having him Cruciated because he was a good guy in DH, but it had to happen...

The first few chapters of part three will be in the summer, but the rest will take place during Lyra's sixth year. You'll find out more about Bellatrix and Rodolphus in part three, definitely, but I don't think they make a real appearance until part four (they will be HUGE characters then!). It's like how Voldemort was mentioned plenty in PoA and HBP but never actually made an appearance in person.

I'll tell you now that Lyra won't accompany the trio because she will be too busy with...other things...*evil laugh*

Thanks for reviewing as usual!

Name: bellatrix-black-lestrange (Signed) · Date: 07/24/09 7:36 · For: Chapter 25- Going Back
i like the fact that she is so much like bellatrix and constantly uses bellatrix's signiture curse when she is angry. And i am sensing that she is going to try and find out as much about her mother as she can but i still can not figure out what may happen in the end i have been thinking about it but i am completely stuck! I guess that i will just have to wait for another update. Fantastic writing by the way you always amaze me with each update.

- lauren

Author's Response:

She is going to find out as much about her mother as she can--that's actually the main focus of part three :) When I started this story even I wasn't exactly sure where it would go and how the end would be, but it worked out--however, it's quite a long way off and a lot of things will unfold between now and then! Thanks for continuing to read this and thanks for the review!

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