Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 08/25/09 18:17
Chapter: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories

ohkay, it was a good chappie overall. (:
i doubt making a pensive would be that easy, though. in the books it's a rare object, isn't it? if it were that easy wouldn't everyone have one?
and i also doubt andromeda would go to bellatrix about ted, as she's constently talking about purebloods and the like.
and if you say black mannor, you don't meen grimmould place, do you?
and the 'why do i need hogwarts, the dark lord won't care...' speech was almost the same as draco uses in the book.....
a good chappie, though. i hope i an finally find the tiome to catch up on them..... and i hope i only post this once.... don't know why it always does that.... and only on this story.......

Author's Response: I know the Pensieve thing is a little weird, but she had to get one somehow. Before I revised it, she received one from Moody, who just happened to have one on him. I didn't think that seemed very realistic, so I made it happen like this. I don't mean Grimmauld Place; that's where Sirius's family lived. This Black Manor is where the Black sisters and their parents live. Glad you had time to catch up. Finding time to submit...well, that will be difficult for me...

Reviewer: Hedwig_is_my_owl
Date: 08/25/09 11:50
Chapter: Chapter 31- Nott in the Plan

I have mixed emotions about this fic...It started slow for me, but I knew the reasons for the repeating of all the events...I liked her relationship with Dora...Since the meeting of her mother, Lyra's character is so confusing...which is understandable, considering her parentage. I don't like that she has "gotten away" with using the Unforgiveable so many times. The first time, when she used it on Dora when they were playing the prank, it made sense why she would have been frightened and want to use it. But it seems to be the curse she jumps to now (again, knowing her parentage, I can see where you are coming from with this being her curse of choice)...This last chapter was good. I do look forward to the update because I am curious, LOL...I don't want her to turn out to be "bad"...I guess that's what kept me reading...to find out if she overcomes the evil that is invading her life...

Author's Response: I think it starts slow for a lot of people. Writing it started slow for me. I know the curse is starting to get out of hand, but I don't think she uses it for a while now that I've posted the first several chapters of part three. I'm glad you plan on continuing to read.

Reviewer: darkchocolatemntn
Date: 08/19/09 15:56
Chapter: Prologue

congrats on being a featured story, thanks for the quick updates, cant wait for the next one :D

Author's Response: Thank you! I never really thought I would make the featured story. The next chapter should be soon, I'm guessing.

Reviewer: Hermiones_Therapist
Date: 08/19/09 9:15
Chapter: Chapter 1- The Campsite

Good Chapter.

All I knew was that Bellatrix screamed as they dragged her away, yelling, “No! I have a daughter who needs me! Lyra needs me! Don’t send me to Azkaban; I need to look after her!”

That sounds kinda unlikely to me. Wouldn't you think Bellatrix is the kind of person who doesn't really care about her daughter?

Otherwise, Great chapter.

Author's Response:

I get what you're saying, but Bellatrix is also trying to get out of going to Azkaban. She's panicking and doing whatever she can. She's a complicated character in this story and kind of difficult to write (in future chapters, I kind of feel my self contradicting her previous statements and such). It's kind of difficult to explain, but hopefully as the story goes on the relationship Bellatrix has with Lyra will make more sense. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Hermiones_Therapist
Date: 08/19/09 8:41
Chapter: Prologue

Interesting. I've seen this story all over the place, so i decided to read it. Pretty good so far.

Author's Response: Thanks! I didn't realize it was all over the place. I guess it's because of the quick updates.

Reviewer: emmeline6620
Date: 08/16/09 12:41
Chapter: Chapter 31- Nott in the Plan

I love this chapter! Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! I submitted the next chapter yesterday, so it shouldn't take too long :)

Reviewer: Zendora A Fairfield
Date: 08/15/09 14:10
Chapter: Prologue

I read this and was thinking about a similar thing I wrote but never sent in to be reviewed. I found it fascinating that I hadn't come across fics about children of Death Eaters. The character I had created was pretty similar though she lived with her immediate family. And was of no relation to Bellatrix Lestrange. Interesting... Amazing writing!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I kind of thought the same thing. I mean, it seems like Lucius Malfoy is the only Death Eater in with a family. I guess they're too busy being Death Eaters. Then again, I wondered why the Hogwarts teachers didn't seem to have spouses. If they do, they don't see them much. Maybe family isn't a huge deal in the Wizarding world. Anyway, I thought I'd experiment with the idea. I guess great minds think alike if we both have similar ideas :) Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Luna Penhallow
Date: 08/15/09 8:37
Chapter: Chapter 31- Nott in the Plan

This was a simply fabulous chapter. Lyra is definintly maturing and emerging more as Lyra, and not Lindsey. I loved this chapter because of the exchange between Lyra and the Slytherins. But, where was Blaise Zabini when all of this was happening? Other than that, this chapter flows very nicely. I love your writing style and just the way this entire story flows. I shall be waiting on bated breath till the next installment!!

Author's Response: Thank you! She is definitely breaking away from Lindsey. Regarding Blaise Zabini, I realized he wasn't really part of the conversation and thought about putting him in, but he really had nothing to do with it. So he was working hard on his potion :) Hopefully the wait for the next chapter won't be long, so stay tuned!

Reviewer: Marsha Johnsegn
Date: 08/14/09 12:57
Chapter: Chapter 31- Nott in the Plan

I love the chapter title! So, it's Nott then... A Slytherin, but not a completley brainless one. It's a nice change of pace.
I loved the chapter! I'm not sure why, but I really enjoyed Malfoy. Once again, your characters seem very in character.
Just wondering, is there a reason why Slughorn sent her to the Slytherins? Or is it just because you needed it to work out that way?
So, yeah... it was unexpected, but not un-likeable!
Submit the next chapter soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm actually relieved that you think Malfoy is in-character because I was kind of worried. I mean, I think it works for pre-book 6 Malfoy, but now he's all nervous and not really into bullying as much. Slughorn sent her to the Slytherins because...well, yes, it had to work out that way, but he also didn't want her to sit alone if she had to. Stay tuned; there's more to come!

Reviewer: bellatrix-black-lestrange
Date: 08/14/09 12:49
Chapter: Chapter 31- Nott in the Plan

arrr i like it contact with the Slytherin's the dark side is coming out :D
Nott and Lyra !!!!! i did not see that coming but a nice twist please update so that i can keep reading

Author's Response: I know it was surprising, but I'm happy you thought it was a good twist! I promise to update soon! Stay tuned to see what happens with this :)

Reviewer: Marauders_weasleygirl02
Date: 08/12/09 20:10
Chapter: Chapter 30- Identity Issues

Once again sorry I haven't reviewed in a long time. I've been busy with band camp and with school starting back up i again i haven't had much time to read the story. I really like the conversation between Neville and Lyra. It was sweet in ways of friendship. The confrontation between Lyra and Snape was the funniest thing ever! And please don't take that the wrong way I thought the confrontations between Snape and Harry were funny. Can't wait for the next update, hope you have good start of term for school.

Author's Response: Hey, I have band camp, too! I COMPLETELY understand how busy it gets, so don't worry about not reviewing sooner. I don't mind that you think the confrontation thing was funny. I know I would laugh if a student yelled at a teacher like that :P Well, unless it got me in trouble. I'll probably submit the next chapter tonight, so the wait shouldn't be long. Hope school starts well for you, too!

Reviewer: Marauders_weasleygirl02
Date: 08/12/09 19:48
Chapter: Chapter 29- Dora's Diary

OMG, i love this chapter. Its not one of my fav's but still. I love how you made Dora's and Lyra not get along because of each others depressed state. You are one of best writers i know about. Your even better than the ones who get published into books. I am very impressed by you. I truly I am. I wish i was good of a writer as you are. Please continue to write. And i don't know if your in college but you should major in journalism.

Author's Response: Wow, that is one of the biggest compliments I've ever received. I don't know if I deserve it :) I tend to be unhappy with some of my writing and I know that everyone gets like that but I know I have a lot to learn! I'm not in college yet; I'm just a junior in high school but interestingly enough I'm taking Journalism next year for school. I want to be a novelist but since I need another job, I'm thinking something in Journalism. But enough ranting :) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Marauders_weasleygirl02
Date: 08/12/09 19:29
Chapter: Chapter 28- Rage in the Robe Shop

Don't worry about the font i thing it was still great. Lyra is so much like Bellatirx its starting to get funny. Not funny in a bad way, but like in a ha-ha-she's-like-her-mom-even-though-she-doesn't-want-to-be way. I know i'm ridiculous. Great chapter...

Author's Response: I see what you mean. As the world around her gets darker, so does she! In the coming chapters you'll see her struggle more, though some things will come along that will...well, you'll see :)

Reviewer: Marauders_weasleygirl02
Date: 08/12/09 19:14
Chapter: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories

Sorry i haven't reviewed in a long time. I've been getting ready for the new school year. Anyway! I love this chapter. You obviously did your research and i appreciate that in a writer.

Author's Response: Don't worry, I haven't been submitting as fast as I normally do because I, too, am getting ready for school to start. Band camp has taken up almost all my time for the past two weeks that I barely have time to respond to reviews! I do like to research for writing, for instance I was writing a kind of sci-fi teen drama that required lots of science research. HP research is fun, though!

Reviewer: bellatrix-black-lestrange
Date: 08/11/09 11:24
Chapter: Chapter 30- Identity Issues

loved it especially the part with Snape you could tell that he was really trying to bring out the the Bellatrix in her.
I was wondering because Lyra keeps using the unforgivable curse will she have a change of heart and reunite with her parents ?

Author's Response: Thanks! I can't say much about your second comment other than you'll see her struggle with dark and light throughout the whole story! We definitely haven't seen the last of her parents, but what Lyra will do when she meets them again is...well, there's quite a twist involved...

Reviewer: darkchocolatemntn
Date: 08/11/09 7:43
Chapter: Prologue

I used to like how she always used Crucio, but I feel like she's beginning to use it to much. It used to be when she was really angry, or on the verge of a mental breakdown, you know really strong emotions, but now she using it whenever someone mildly irritates her.
Also, didn't moody explain this too her in 4th year how bad it was? I dont she has the concept, but she should at least have more of a concept of how horrible it is, even if she doesnt completeley understand.
Other than that, great story! keep it up :D
(I hope my reviews dont sound too critical or mean, I really do like this story a lot)

Author's Response: I understand what you mean, but she didn't actually Crucio Snape. She thought about it, but you're right, she wasn't in a huge emotional breakdown, which is why she didn't execute it. You're also right about her not getting how bad it is, even if it had been used on her. She doesn't really use her head when she's worked up in a situation. If I remember correctly, I don't think she uses the curse again for a while. Sorry if it seems out of hand, but her character is really changing! I'm glad you like my story and don't mind criticism.

Reviewer: Marsha Johnsegn
Date: 08/10/09 22:41
Chapter: Chapter 30- Identity Issues

I can't tell you how much I loved this chapter! Honestly, I thought it was wonderful! I love the messanger journals! And I thought the ineteraction with Snape was WONDERFUL! Really... He wanted a reaction and I thought it was wonderfully written.
Of course, Lavender and Parvati were just as annoying as I expected them to be, so they were wonderfully in character!
I'm glad we'll see Tonks soon, too!
Also, you don' want anyone to get the wrong impression about Lyra and Neville...? Aww... I SO had the wrong impression, lol. So that means that the guy is still a mystery.... Hmm...
So, that takes one person off of my theory list. I'm leaning towards a Slytherin, but of course, an OC is always an option...
In short, I loved the chapter and the dialogue! Submit the next chapter soon! Until next time; Cheers!

Author's Response: Thank you! I think you'll be surprised at who the mystery guy is, but hopefully it'll be a good thing. I know a lot of readers were hoping for Neville, and I know it makes sense, but...I guess I have to be like JK on this one (you know how she said Neville and Luna wouldn't end up together?). You may or may not have to wait until the next chapter to find out...we'll see :P

Reviewer: emmeline6620
Date: 08/10/09 21:36
Chapter: Chapter 30- Identity Issues

Loved this chapter and all the others! Keep up the good work. Can't wait for the next one.

Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter will be submitted soon :)

Reviewer: Aradion
Date: 08/08/09 5:19
Chapter: Chapter 29- Dora's Diary

So diaries play an important role in this fic! At least, Lyra found out about the root of Tonks's problem and I think it's so sweet that she is worried about Tonks's future with Lupin. It seems to me that Lyra is not so shocked about his age or his little hairy problem. It would be unfair to accuse her so plainly of being narrow- minded or what. She just wants to protect her from getting further hurt, doesn't she? And speaking of romance, I've been thinking a lot lately about Lyra's mysterious guy...I hope he won't be someone horrible or far-fetched because a few ideas popped in mind and even though they may be completely wrong they just stuck in there and can't seem to find a way out...Anyway, thanks for the chapter and update soon!

Author's Response: You're exactly right. Lyra, having grown up with Tonks, has seen her been hurt many times and definitely wants to prevent this (and in this case, it's not just heartbreak, it could be physical hurt, too, with Lupin being a werewolf). As far as Lyra's mystery guy...you should find out fairly soon! Thanks for continuing to read! The next chapter was submitted last night!

Reviewer: Aradion
Date: 08/08/09 4:49
Chapter: Chapter 28- Rage in the Robe Shop

Hi, I've just finished reading the chapter(well, I guess you can see that but anyway...) and I'm so glad Lyra finally got her OWL results. I've been waiting for this to happen for so long and now that I can see how well she did I'm quite relieved! However, what I'm really not glad about is Tonks...She's so depressed and blue and I hate it because normally she's funny and full of energy! But then again, love can be tough...But I'm still happy Lyra got to meet Narcissa even though she attempted to Crucio her( but eventually she will learn to control her rage and frustration, won't she?). Now, I'm looking forward to seeing what secrets Narcissa possibly has...Probably something no one else knows, I mean since Andromeda got blasted off the tree and I don't see Bella trusting anyone other than her younger sister...Anyway, if you feel up to give me a clue, I'd be thankful! Great chapter, once again!

Author's Response: Thanks! A lot of people are upset about Tonks...I mean, I hated to see her like that in HBP, too! Unfortunately I have to include it, even if the story is AU. Regarding the Crucios, yes, she will eventually find a way (or ways) to control it :) You've made a good observation about Narcissa! There's a future chapter centered around her and possibly some secrets she has up her sleeve...stay tuned! :)

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