Reviewer: TCole
Date: 05/18/08 0:07
Chapter: Can You Hear Me Now?

Rachel. Wow. I read this once before. No, actually, I skimmed through it. I don't know why I didn't take the time to read this when it was first posted up on the archives. It is absolutely amazing. By the time it was over, I had tears in my eyes.

I really like the way this was written. You showed how much Narcissa really cared for her son, and how much Draco regretted what he had done. You don't see too many stories where Draco is actually scared and is actually.. well.. nice.

It came as a shock to me when Narcissa thought that Draco deserved the punishment that he got. I love how you didnt' come right out and say what the punishment was, and we had to wait until the end of the story to actually find out what it was. It was a very good way to keep the readers reading it.

There was one thing that I noticed:

Draco needed her now more than ever

You forgot to add a period at the end of that sentence. Lol. That's really the only thing that I found wrong with it. The flow was excellent, and there weren't any spelling mistakes that I noticed. I didn't even see any typos! You are an excellent writer.

I love how you had Draco and Narcissa reminisce (sp?) about when Draco was a child. It was very touching to see how Narcissa felt when he took his first steps, and then you could feel her pain when she said that Lucius didn't care about it. You showed Lucius' character quite well in that part. The way he didn't care only because it showed that Draco was just normal. It shows you how he wanted his son to be .. what's the word.. I guess, special?

This story was very touching. I absolutely loved it. You are a very talented writer, and I really hope you write more stories to post on the archives. I know that I will definitely read them. :) You are brilliant, my dear. Keep up the wonderful work!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! When I first heard this song, this bunny fell into my head, and it just wouldn't leave... lol. This may sound weird, but I love making my readers cry, or have tears in their eyes. To me it feels like then I'm really getting to them. =D Thanks for the lovely review!

Reviewer: fg_weasley
Date: 05/04/08 19:50
Chapter: Can You Hear Me Now?

RACH! YAY! I'm so glad this is up. I'm proud of you, kid. I can't wait to see all your other ones. I must go put this link in my thread. :D

Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 05/03/08 3:25
Chapter: Can You Hear Me Now?

Omg....

I feel so bad for Narcissa!=[

This is all Lucius's fault. :@

From the moment I read the first word, I knew what was going to happen....But, It still chilled me.

Ohhh, Draco.

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