Reviews For In Harmony
Reviewer: TheCursedQuill
Date: 06/02/09 9:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

This story was really well done and I enjoyed it very much!

I like how you said the Marauders as a whole were like a puzzle. This is eliminates the cliché that Peter was only just a tag-along; well done. Cliché’s are hard to overcome. I also enjoyed the cookies part; it adds personality and humour to the story.

Your characterisation was good; I loved the part where James asked Remus if he could play the instrument. Those six dialogue lines that follow are very real. I could perfectly imagine James pushing Remus into doing something that he’d rather not. However, some parts seem to stick out as OOC to me for Remus. He wishes he could have an intelligent conversation with them and he rolls his eyes and sort of mocks James when he asks if the piano was a piano. I think Remus would be nicer to his friend and instead of rolling his eyes, might just poke fun at him. This is only my opinion and it doesn’t harm the story at all as a whole.

I’ve never read a story where any of the marauders play an instrument, so to have Remus plays the piano was something new and interesting for me. It’s very plausible and I like how the song connects people to their true love. I absolutly love the last line Remus says about love being cliché, cheesy and embarrassing. It couldn’t be anymore truer and it fits into the story very nicely.

One last little comment, “how in Merlin’s name did you mange that?”, it should be Manage.
Overall, this story was very well-written and I really liked reading it. Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 06/22/08 15:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

This really is a beautiful piece of art. I like music and stories telling about it, and I liked it even more that Remus played the piano and composed his own love song. It must really have been a wonderful piece since all three (James, Lily and Remus) were reminded of the person they loved most.

The story has a sad overall tone, and I feel mesmerised by it. But the more humorous part, for example the one with the cookies jar and where it is hidden *giggles*, has a unique touch to your story. Well done.

I noticed some minor mistakes:
1) “So what do what to do?” he asked James. --> I presume you wanted to ask "So what do you want to do?" here.
2) When he closed, clouds of dust made him cough and sneeze. --> That was probably meant as "When he closed it, clouds of dust made him cough and sneeze."
3) Cheesy, clichéd and overall downright embarrassing; aren’t those all part of love? --> Isn't here a word missing: "...; aren't those all a part of love?"

Exceptional fic. Congratulations, my fellow Hufflepuff.

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 05/16/08 14:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ooooooooo. That was pretty. It's really weird, because I'm listening to a song from iTunes called 'I Dont Want To Miss A Thing' by Aerosmith (yea i'm young, but I love songs that my dad listens to) and this seems like it could have been based on that song! It's really ironic! It's really cool that I found this story while listening to a song like it! Anywayz, 10000000000/10 and perfect job! I liked it,

Author's Response: I know, it's amazing how many songs can remind of the Harry Potter world, isn't it?

Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 05/13/08 16:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was a really good story! You are not the first to suggest that Remus played the piano (unless it's in the books somewhere? ...), and I guess that he just seems like that sort of guy.

Author's Response: I've always imagined him to be that sort of guy too, and having read various fics with him being musical...it just fit.

Reviewer: Mary Emmee
Date: 05/13/08 13:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! I was enjoying this simply as a well written story. Then I got to the ending - "Nymphadora." Than one word defined the story and the man. Excellent, excellent work! Thank you for sharing! :)

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 05/13/08 8:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this fic. I liked the converstation between Remus and his mother, and everything reminding James of Lily.

Reviewer: padfootsluver500
Date: 05/13/08 5:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

awwww!!!!! this is such a sweet story. I love it!

Reviewer: HungarianWitch
Date: 05/13/08 1:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well this was nice, really nice! The title fits perfectly...

Author's Response: Thank you!

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