Reviewer: liquid_silver
Date: 01/28/09 13:53
Chapter: One-shot

Very sweet. I would never have imagined Lavender and Pansy as friends, but you do a very good job of making it believable.

Reviewer: Adeyla
Date: 11/11/08 2:12
Chapter: One-shot

Wow, this is really cool, i like to see the soft side of Pansy

Reviewer: Gin_PotterGirl
Date: 05/17/08 16:13
Chapter: One-shot

Hello again! I'm just going to start out and say that I love your stories. I think that you can rock any point of view, and I love when you write in first point of view. I know I also said I love when you write in second point of view, but can't I like both? I would like to read third point of view, but when I'm done typing this, I'll see if you have any like that. ^.^

I thought the plot was well thought out. At first, I thought it would be a Alternate Universe story and it would be Lily and Petunia, when I only read the summary and nothing else. Then, when I started to read the story, I couldn't figure out who I thought were the two girls! I couldn't believe that they were Lavender and Pansy! When I found out, I thought that there should be a little Alternate Universe warning, because Lavender's best friend has always been Pavarti, and they are like, the gossip QUEENS. During the story, I think you mentioned Pavarti (about when Lavender brings her along on their adventures.) but I wanted to point that out.

I also liked how Pansy was so honest about everything, and how she didn't try to hide anything through-out the story. She's just like, "This is what happened...it's the truth...no joke..." and I like that. :) I found some grammar and spelling problems that I wanted to point out. Here's one:

Yesterday she asked me, what was my favorite flower.

I think this is just more of my opinion, but I think it would sound better if it was "Yesterday, she asked me what my favorite flower was." The way you wrote "What was my favorite flower" sounds like a question, like the other girl is asking it, instead of Pansy telling it to someone.

Also, here's another one:

My parents were not Death Eeaters, but most of the people I knew had parents or older siblings who were.

You spelled "Eaters" wrong, dear. =)

I can't believe there's only four reviews to this story, because I think it's great! I hope you post more stories soon. =)

~Michelle :)

Author's Response: =D Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the fic... and I'm glad you left such a nice review! ;) Also thanks for pointing out the grammar and spelling issues. I'll go fix those now... hehe.

Reviewer: Lucky_13_Girl
Date: 04/21/08 17:26
Chapter: One-shot

This is really sweet. I think it's really cool how tou did this.

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! *grins*

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 04/21/08 11:06
Chapter: One-shot

Nice fic. I like how you show the friendship.

I guessed both, but the Slytherin was easier to guess, it took me a while to guess who the Gryffindor girl was.

Minor Possible canon error I think that the Gryffindor dumped her boyfriend when she saw him coming out of the dorms (apparently alone) with another girl.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! Hmm... I think you're right about that canon error. I'll try my best to fix it! Yay for observant readers! :D

Reviewer: undesirable_number1
Date: 04/21/08 10:30
Chapter: One-shot

Wow, this is a beautiful story. I love the description of the flowers in Lavender's hair at the beginning of the story. I also really like how you brought Pansy's relationhip with Draco and Lavender's with Ron into the story. Your take on Pansy is interesting too; I never would have thought that she valued friendship so much. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! ;D I wasn't entirely sure if the way I wrote the girls would work out, so I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: potterfan48
Date: 04/21/08 6:48
Chapter: One-shot

I like how you wove the HP canon story into your narative. Very creative and it increased the quality of your story. Very Good.

Author's Response: Thanks! =}

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