It was kind of confusing, working out who said what.
For example, when Lily was trying to tell him she was in love with him too, she yelled, "I’M-IN-LOVE-WITH-YOU-TOO!", but then it said "He froze."
omg soo good great feel good story made me feel better!
Awwww that is sooooooooo sweet! i love it!
haha, here are a little more than 5 seconds. I loved it.
i was cute a fluffy i like fluffy one-shots, i like long stories too but when you just got a minuit or are angry or something and need to be cheered up fluffy little one-shots do the trick
that was soo cute it reminds me of when my friend fell in love
I didn't catch the publication date on this fic before I started reading, but you're one of my fav authors for your H/G work - and I was curious - so I thought I'd give a James/Lily fic a shot. So 1) you should be happy that you're one of my fav authors of all time, and 2) your's is the first James/Lilly fic I ever thought to read. Having said those nice things, I think I can ease into the crap review I have to leave for this story. There were a lot of grammatical errors. And the way the point of view changed around and stuff - sometimes I had a hard time understanding who was doing what. The dialogue was good but poorly written with lots of errors. C'mon now... you're a really good writer with fantastic ideas. Don't let simple writing errors bog your story down. You're too good for that.
This was beautiful! Why can't I have someone like James! :(xx weldone! c'est tres bien! xx (I have no idea where the French came frome :S)
i liked it. We all know James shy side and you portrayed it great. I really liked it! keep writing!
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am dying with the praise that is pouring out of me which i can t fit into a page coz this was so awesomely cool and realistic and...ahem. I think I'd better takke control of myself, think ya understand what I mean anyways. Keep it up man!!!
Oh, that was sweet! Good job, I loved how you showed Lily's thoughts. That was funny. Props!
Awww, short and sweet!!! I really liked it - Keep writting!!!
i loved it! pretty sure....i screamed at the end and now im giddy...good job!