Wow-the westing game is one of my favourite books! I'm so excited to see where this story goes-ud soon!
Thank you! I'll submit Chapter two when it comes back from the beta.rnrn
Love the username, by the way :)
clever story, but what is the westing game? And what is Baldric up to to?
Author's Response: The actual Westing Game inside the story is a game to solve who murdered Mr. Westing... my version shall come up in about a chapter or two. And I could tell you what Baldric was doing... but then I'd have to put you away where no one could find you ^_^
OMG! I love The Westing Game. I can't wait to see where you go with this!
Author's Response: I do too- it's one of my favorite stories ever. Thanks for reviewing!
Finally a Percy centric fiction! He's the true black sheep of the Weasley clan, and he gets so neglected, man does he have a lot of depth that could be tapped. But most of the stories that have him in them basically protray him as a pompous cardboard cut-out so I'll favorite this one and see how you handle it. So far so good!
Author's Response: Thank you! Percy's not the main character, but he certainly gets a good role, I think, seeing as I've found a new liking for dear Weatherby. I'm glad you like it- I hope I handle it well!rn
OH MY GOOOODDDDRICCC! "The Westing Game" was my favourite book all through childhood, from ages six to twelvish (not counting Harry Potter), and it's still one of my favourites. I think I'm hyperventilating!
I have to admit, I was none too pleased about Lucius dying, being quite the fangurrrl, but knowing what happens with old Sam/Julian/Barney/Sandy at the end of the book, I'm hoping someting similar will hapen to Luci.
I love the idea of making Percy a major character, and I adore Eloise and her outrageously long name. Your writing style is absolutely LOVELY, and it makes such a distinctive use of voice.
I liked Percy's loyalty to his dad, holding a bit of a grudge against the Malfoys because Lucius got into a fight with Arthur. It makes me glad that Percy's days of Weasley disloyalty are behind him!
I also loved Hary's line: “It’s more difficult than you imagine; trying to figure out what killed him, with a lot of hysterical Malfoys yelling insults as we investigate.” Not only is that funny and oh-so-true, it's also very in-character for Harrikins! I love it when fanfic authors give him a sense of humour... far too many don't at all, when JK Rowling blessed him with a lovely one.
I've never liked to read stories with the canon Teddy Lupin in them, just because I have an OC named Ted Lupin who almost certainly would never have blue hair and who I invented before DH, and reading about canon Teddy is confusing to me, but I think I'll like this one. I'm looking forward to see how you portray him.
I ABSOLUTELY LOVE your characterization of Narcissa. The way you can get into all of the characters' heads through this third-person perspective is admirable. Like the house elf's name, too-- I HATE making up house elf names. I also really like seeing how much Lucius' death affected Narcissa and Draco-- far too often, fanfic authors portray Lucius as a terrible dad, and I like to see him as a family man whose love of blood purity is caused by his immense pride and love for his family... but that's off topic.
I also like the bit with: MShe never added too much sweetness- right now, she wanted something bitter, because that was the way she felt. Bitter, as bitter as the aftertaste of dark chocolate, which, in her opinion, was disgusting and shouldn’t be eaten anyways. It's an emotional and deep statement, but followed up by a bit of humour, and I really like that in a story.
But my ABSOLUTE FAVOURITE part is Baldric, who made me laugh out loud. I can't even list my favourite quotes from this section, because that would be copy-pasting the whole thing, but I loved how incredibly snide you were toward Baldric in the narrative, like it being all right for him to slam crystal windows... I'm just grinning like mad reading this. And I love the word 'yellowy.'
The last sentence, too, is genius! Love the aliteration, and his name is brilliant! A very perfect Victorian villain name, and fits right into the Potterverse. The tone of this story reminds me of what I was HOPING to achieve with "Love A Duck!" but didn't come close to-- yours is infinitely better.
I hardly ever read any fanfiction anymore-- I mostly just write it. But this is a story I'll definitely be keeping up with, and I'm favouriting it. This is the best story I've read in a long, long time, and I see nothing to criticize.
Thanks for making my day!
Author's Response: Oh, wow, Schmergo! This comes as a huge compliment, seeing as I really admire your writing. I'm glad you like it so much- the Westing Game is a brilliant book, and I want to do it justice!rnrnAs for Lucius... you shall see ^_^rnrnBut no, thank you for making MY day! This is the best review I've ever gotten. I think I'm hyperventilating as well :)