Reviewer: Great Beirniny
Date: 05/18/08 15:07
Chapter: Our Lives

WOW!! That was wonderful. I loved the italicized parts they were beautiful. The way you told the stories of those three overlooked characters was fantastic. Great Job

Reviewer: Elf01
Date: 05/07/08 4:21
Chapter: Our Lives

Nice fic. I think that you captured Petunia perfectly, her jealousy of Lily being a witch, and (from her point of view) getting all the attention from their parents.

I think that Peter wanting to be more like James, Sirus and Remus is likely and very well written.

Here is where I start hoping that you like concrit. If you don't skip the next paragraph.

I don't think that Regulus would have wished that he was alive. When he decided to leave the death eaters he knew that he would be killed. Even if he was alive, his parents were dead, and his friends would kill him for betraying them. Even with Kreacher, who he was fond of it would not have been a good life, unless he went to the order, whom he probably didn't trust. I think that wishing he had succeded in what he set out to do, or had killed Voldemort would be more appropiate.

Overall I think that it was well written and enjoyable, and while I know that crit is the longest part I think that is because I was trying to explain my point of view.

Author's Response: Hey, and I love concrit. Reviews with constructive criticism are the best kind. Thanks! I understand completely what you mean, but I think you might be taking that line too literally. That's probably my fault. The thing is, I meant 'alive' more as a state of mind. The feeling of being truly alive, you know. Not the actual 'having a beating heart' nonsense. What good does that do any of us? But thank you, and I love concrit! :)

Reviewer: evester
Date: 05/06/08 21:58
Chapter: Our Lives

I really loved this story- it was so emotional and beautifully written. The line about Lily being the beginning and end and climax was really good and the whole part about Peter was absolutely perfect. I mean, it just seemed so much like Peter's point of view- watching his friends from the sidelines and leaving safely through the "exit doors"- *shiver*

congrats and good job!

Author's Response: The whole thing with Peter was my favorite. Thank you very much, eve!

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 05/06/08 19:15
Chapter: Our Lives

Aww, Mia, great job, love. It's a wonderfully written story, and you should write more with these characters-- you do them justice. (And I just LOVE what Nikki said. lol.)

Author's Response: Lol, good old Nikki. Thanks victoria!

Reviewer: Katie616
Date: 05/06/08 19:12
Chapter: Our Lives

*gasp* This story. . . *gasp* is the most. . . *gasp* amazing and completely. . . *gasp astonishingly good thing I have ever read in my life and I wish I could write half as good as you, because you are the most magnificent writer I have ever had the privilege of reading. *gasps just for good measure*

This story left me completely breathless. I especially liked this line about Lily: 'She is a beginning and an end and the stunning climax and she is unforgettable.' That is such a powerful line. . . *wipes eyes* And the things about Sirius. . . the whole 'ripping the paper that had been there for longer than anyone could remember' thing. . . that was just so perfect. . . that's always what I felt he did. Like, he saw the chains everyone was in, and he didn't like them, so he just ripped 'em off. . . I have always admired Sirius for being able to do that, and if I wasn't already completely different from everyone else, with barely any rules in my life at all, I would totally change something that needed to be changed. As it is, I am the Sirius in my small life, so I don't really need to worry about that. . . but. . . the whole story is just so POWERFUL. . . there really isn't a better word for it.

Thank you SO SO SO much for gracing my humble little life with this huge (figuratively) story.

Author's Response: Lol, Katie, I'm really flattered. But if I'm the most magnificent writer you've ever read, I'm pretty sure you should start reading some really good stuff. I'm not magnificent, but I'll go with at least 'good' for now. Thank you very much for this review and for telling me your favorite lines. I love knowing the favorite lines!

Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 05/06/08 12:31
Chapter: Our Lives

Oh My Gosh!

This was so... this was amazing.

It really was. I was just like.. OMG! Reading it.


Winny x

Author's Response: *smile* Thanks!

Reviewer: Laurelyn
Date: 05/06/08 11:24
Chapter: Our Lives

This is just fantastic. I love it! It's very artsy and poetic, and you can tell the style suits you. Did you write all the things in italics, or did you get them from somewhere? Because I especially liked that part.

Great job; please write more!

Author's Response: I wrote it all. i dont know if I'll keep writing for MNFF, but I will most certainly never stop writing. Thanks!

Reviewer: FullofLife
Date: 05/06/08 6:04
Chapter: Our Lives

*sigh* How do you do it? Another spectacular piece. :) My heart ached for Petunia, Peter and Regulus! I've always felt for Peter and more recently for Regulus, but to make me feel that sorry for Petunia was amazing.

Author's Response: Yeah... I've always felt sorry for Reg and Peter too, and I'd never thought to feel sorry for Petunia, but she was just such a perfect character for this... thanks for the review!

Author's Response: Yeah... I've always felt sorry for Reg and Peter too, and I'd never thought to feel sorry for Petunia, but she was just such a perfect character for this... thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 05/06/08 3:47
Chapter: Our Lives

Oh my goodness, Mia! This is fantastic! So sweet, and real and emotional (a bit?). I loved it.

Author's Response: Lol, thanks Afifa! I'm really glad you liked it.

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 05/06/08 1:58
Chapter: Our Lives

Wow... I'm impressed. That's really profound and describes perfectly how these three must have felt. Behind all three stands a really sad story and when I read yours, I was reminded of them. Congrats. Fantastic work.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks! There's a story behind everyone's lives and I like listening and writing about the ones no one listens to.

Reviewer: fg_weasley
Date: 05/05/08 21:28
Chapter: Our Lives

Mama Mia! hahaha. I just had to love. It was like begging me. Okay, you know how much I love this one shot, because I told you when I beta-ed it. lol. But I truly do. I want to say its flawless, but of course, nothing is. Its close though, love. I'm favoriting it. :D

Author's Response: Nikki, you make me laugh. *hugs* Thanks! Your wonderful betain made it better. :)

Reviewer: mudbloodproud
Date: 05/05/08 20:39
Chapter: Our Lives

I am at a loss as to what to say. The way you perfectly proceeded each character with the perfect wording. I hope that makes sense, I know what I mean in my head.
It was a wonderful story. Great writing. Just the right pull on the heartstrings.

Author's Response: Thanks Terri! I'd like to think it was good.

Reviewer: lullaby BANG
Date: 05/05/08 19:21
Chapter: Our Lives

Aww, Mia, this was an amazing one-shot! (And now excuse my terrible review since it won't do any justice to your great story).

I honestly love the entire concept behind it, and the italicized parts separating between each character, and the last line! It pulled my heartstrings. The entire thing overall made you feel pity, but that last line was so perfectly constructed and such a finite finish! Great Job Mia!

Author's Response: Thanks Jess! I really do like this piece, and I'm glad you liked it too!

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