Reviews For In the Light
Reviewer: helz_belz
Date: 07/19/08 0:51
Chapter: Remember when the light comes

Wow that was really well done. I love the rythem you achieved, drawing the reader in. "When all along, I was Jealous. Jealous- But not anymore" that was a very powerful line. Petunia's remorse for the way she treated Lily was displayed perfectly. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad to hear you feel I portrayed her remorse well, and that the poem had a good rhythm! Thanks again :)

Reviewer: fawkeshermione221
Date: 04/23/08 17:47
Chapter: Remember when the light comes

*wipes away tears*
*whips out review-writing pen*

I'm back! And I'm delighted to see that you've written another *amazing* poem!
I really liked this. I think you did a wonderful job of describing how Petunia must have felt when she heard the news. I loved the repetition of 'remember', and the bit about how Lily died with the neon green and Harry lives with crystal green light. The ending was superb too, I really loved it.

The weird thing about this poem is that it sounds eerily similar to a poem I wrote about a friend who died. 0_0

Wonderful poem! Keep them coming!

~fawkeshermione221

Author's Response: First, I'm very sorry about your friend. :(rnSecond, thank you so much; your comments mean a lot to me! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. rnThe neon vs. crystal was my favorite part to write, so I'm glad you liked that as-well!rnrnThank you again!rnrnrnOnce again, thank you!

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 04/18/08 22:55
Chapter: Remember when the light comes

Awww...

I liked this. Poems like these are very easy to read and understand and I think that the structure this is in gave you a lot of room to express Pertunia's thoughts. Great poem. =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comments! I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 04/13/08 17:32
Chapter: Remember when the light comes

*sniff* good poem!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: James_Lily101
Date: 04/13/08 12:05
Chapter: Remember when the light comes

i almost criend it's really sweet! good job:D

Author's Response: *hands out tissue* Thanks so much!

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