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Reviews For Witch Envy

Name: EnchantressOfTheNite (Signed) · Date: 07/19/08 3:49 · For: Sarah Kate
This story is so sad, and beautiful. Mai seems like one of my best friends. And I hope her mom turns out ok.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. :) Danielle is in one chapter so far of Mischief Never Managed, and I think I'll be bringing her back later too.

Name: Elf01 (Signed) · Date: 07/01/08 3:59 · For: Sarah Kate
I enjoyed this story. I didn't think that the changes were sudden. After all the news that Mai was a witch was sudden, and her father clearly didn't approve, even though it seems at first that he did make an effort to accept it. When it turned out that Sarah wasn't a witch she became jealous. Also a lot of time has passed between each summer, and we don't know what has been happening then.

A minor canon error in chapter one. Someone should have called to the house to explain about magic, rather than just sending a letter. (Severus tells Lily in Deathly Hallows that someone will have to call to her house to explain to her parents). I don't know if you wrote chapter one before that was confirmed or not, and the way you have it written is believable, but it is something to bear in mind if you write any more fics with a muggleborn being accepted at Hogwarts.

Author's Response: Ah thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that small detail just escaped my notice. At the time I wrote the chapter I hadn't read DH in about half a year, and of course, when I had last read it, I hadn't slept in many, many hours (yay for midnight releases!). I'll keep that in mind next time. :D Perhaps it's about time I read Deathly Hallows again. :)

Name: Inverarity (Signed) · Date: 06/30/08 21:15 · For: Sarah Kate

This was an interesting, sad story, and it's piqued my interest enough that I might read your other one. It could have been a really good story, except that so much was compressed into such a small amount of time, the change in personalities seemed abrupt and unrealistic. The way Mai's entire family implodes and everyone stops caring about everyone else could have been much more believable (and just as tragic), but in four chapters, it just appeared that everyone gave up right away. Mai's poor mother seems to be suffering from depression, which is the only explanation for not even trying to curb her youngest daughter's dangerous behavior. Mai seems to be in complete denial.

I felt sorry for all of them, and wanted to smack all of them at the same time. I wonder if they will reconcile someday, as teenagers estranged from their parents and siblings often do once they put a few years behind them.

Author's Response: Glad you want to read my other story. Other than that, I must point to my last author's response. I certainly agree that a lot (and probably way too much) was covered in a very short period.

Name: Inverarity (Signed) · Date: 06/30/08 17:55 · For: Return From Paradise
This is an interesting perspective on Muggle-borns going to Hogwarts, and I like that you are making the canon characters only peripherally involved. Mai's mother does seem a little quick to accept the idea of her daughter going off to an unknown school and learn things she sees no evidence of, and her father's abrupt coldness towards her seems extremely harsh. But it makes for a poignant story.

Author's Response: I certainly understand your point of view, and I would definitely say I agree. My only 'excuse' is that this story was originally going to be a one-shot side-project, so the pace and reactions ended up magnified (perhaps a bit beyond belief) in order to quicken things up so I could get back to the main story. I admit, I probably should have spent a bit more time working on this fic than I actually did. :/

Name: shooting_star42 (Signed) · Date: 05/05/08 0:03 · For: The Mysterious Letter
Well, I shall feel special and write the first review XD

This story is absolutely spiffy! Two things that are unique about it: 1) It talks about the summers between Hogwarts, not the school itself. Nobody ever really thinks about Hogwarts being just a school, but it is. And 2) The reactions of her father and sister. After all, not every Muggleborn who gets accepted to Hogwarts will have a completely supportive family. And the siblings of Muggleborns are bound to feel a lot of resentment.

A lovely story, thus far. I can't wait to see what else you come up with!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad someone enjoys this story and finally reviewed. :D

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