Reviewer: rubyberry
Date: 03/14/10 12:00
Chapter: Chapter 1

hahaaaaaaaaaaaaa this was fuuuunnny! cute lil' ron. The last sentence was especially tickly.

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

Reviewer: Hermiones_Therapist
Date: 08/24/09 17:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

Not since the great feast of ’91 (better known as last night’s supper).

That's funny.

“It was the worst thing I had to go through in my entire life. It was worse than when Mum caught me for the Knitting Incident.”

Ron’s mouth fell open in astonishment. He remembered that tragic time. What could be worse than the Knitting Incident? “WHAT IS IT?”

WHAT THE HECK IS THE KNITTING INCIDENT? It must have been pretty bad, though. Lol.

Awww......I love the ending. I love your characterization of Mrs. Weasley.

H_T

Author's Response: The Knitting Incident was so terrible that the Weasleys wouldn't even tell me what happened. :) I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

Reviewer: Hermoine Jean Granger
Date: 10/28/08 7:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hilarious story! You've developed upon the basic plotline over here very well, and I loved the use of description in certain places, especially in the beginning where you describe the Making of Breakfast by Mrs. Weasley. The humour lay in your allusions to calling this a symphony, which is certainly a true fact. Only a perfect conductor like Mrs. Weasley could've done the job. ;)

The characters are very much in character, and the use of humour in such a case, without making the characters become OOC, is truly commendable. I loved the prank played by Fred and George, they make use of every situation to their advantage, and even though they were not allowed to use magic, they managed to achieve their ends anyway. The characterisation of a scared Ron, and of Evil Fred and George was near-perfect.

I was in splits when they described the sorting! The description was near perfect over there! A vivid image is formed by those words, and that itself brings forth the humour. You have that capacity to breate life into the descriptions, something I truly liked.

Ron thought he landed in something slimy. Knowing Fred, it was probably something especially disgusting, but he felt too preoccupied to look at the moment.
In this sentence, I fail to understand how the slimy stuff reached there in the first place. The twins weren't allowed to use magic, and since Ron was standing on the same bed a few seconds ago, I don't feel it would've remained there since a long period of time.

Another small correction: Chudley Cannons needs to be italicized.

Author's Response: Every review I get brightens my day and yours didn't fail to cheer me up! Thanks for the comments, ESPECIALLY the ones that suggested how the story could improve. I was nervous about the characterization, so I'm glad you liked how I played them. As to the slimy stuff on the bed? I imagined Ron as falling on a different part of the bed. He hadn't noticed it earlier since he was busy with the wand. But, I didn't make that as clear in the story as it was in my head. Go Chudley Cannons!

Author's Response: Every review I get brightens my day and yours didn't fail to cheer me up! Thanks for the comments, ESPECIALLY the ones that suggested how the story could improve. I was nervous about the characterization, so I'm glad you liked how I played them. As to the slimy stuff on the bed? I imagined Ron as falling on a different part of the bed. He hadn't noticed it earlier since he was busy with the wand. But, I didn't make that as clear in the story as it was in my head. Go Chudley Cannons!

Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 04/07/08 1:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Having been the oldest child, I never experienced this sort of hazing. Administered it, yes; received it, no.

Nicely done!

Author's Response: Oh, so you're one of THOSE kids.... Ha, ha! Just kidding. I was the youngest child in my family, but my sibs weren't nearly as bad as in this story. Thank heaven for that!

Reviewer: Red and Gold
Date: 04/06/08 15:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

You have done an excellent job of coming up with a story behind Ron's comment in the first book about having to fight a troll!

I am blown away by how perfectly you nailed your characters - Ron, Fred, George and even Ginny and Mrs. Weasley were absolutely spot on!

You had several great lines in this story, but my favorites are:

'“How about we feed his Chudley Cannon stuff to the garden gnomes, too?”

“Now, that’s just cruel,” George replied. “The gnomes could choke."

and

"Don’t cry, now, Ron. We have faith in you. Even if you don’t make it, we know that the troll will at least have a few scratches by the time he’s done with you.”

The story was well-written from beginning to end, with plenty of detail, excellent timing and pace, and lots of action. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it!

Brilliantly done!
~Andi

Author's Response: YES! Thank you so much, Prof! I was so paranoid that no one would think it funny when I was writing the story, but I guess I was wrong. You have no idea how excited this makes me feel. I can write humor now!

Reviewer: Ravenclaws Noble Heir
Date: 04/05/08 15:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

/:)

*~* Ravenclaw's Noble Heir *~*

Author's Response: :D

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 04/05/08 11:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hilarius (sp?)! I loved it! 1000/10

Author's Response: Whoah! 1000/10?! Do I really deserve that? Thanks! I think I'll probably start floating to the ceiling, now. (Hilarious :D)

Reviewer: Parchment and Quill
Date: 04/05/08 2:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ha! So that's how Ron got the idea about fighting trolls from.

Great one-shot. I loved it and it was really funny. *gives annoying relatives death glares for looking oddly at her for laughing* LOL!

Keep up the good work! 10/10

~ Parchment and Quill

Author's Response: 10/10!!! Now, that's made my day. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: HungarianWitch
Date: 04/04/08 15:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

poor Ron! It was quite believable for the twins to act like that! I enjoyed this ficlet!

Author's Response: I was worried that I had exaggerated the twins a bit too much, so your comment is very comforting. Thanks!

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 04/04/08 14:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh Merlin, that was fantastic. The last line was laugh-out-loud-in-the-middle-of-a-quiet-room worthy, and your Mrs. Weasley is perfect (esp. the little symphony metaphor at the beginning of "Making Breakfast.")

I would imagine after eleven years, Ron wouldn't let on exactly how shaken he was by anything Fred and George told him, even if it was about a Sorting troll. I suppose you made allowances for that. Your Fred and George were ever so slightly...um, okay, they were a little terrifying. And very much convincing as typical older brothers. "Even if you don't make it, we know the troll will at least have a few scratches...." *snicker* Ah, the joys of being the oldest. I reckon I've tried variations of that line out myself.

All in all, very well done. I don't know if you get final exam "grades" for your humor class, but if you do...good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've actually been in the role of the teased younger sibling, so I know how it feels. Thanks for the luck, too. My prof gave me full credit.

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 04/04/08 14:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

hehe this was really really funny. Poor lickle ronnikins. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, he gets teased so much... but we all love it when he does!

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