Reviewer: xX-Hitomi-Xx
Date: 07/20/09 19:38
Chapter: Chapter Ten: OWLs and an Invitation

Awesome, awesome awesome!!! I LOVE it so far! Can't wait till you update.

Author's Response: Thanks! :D

Reviewer: HogwartsKid96
Date: 07/16/09 4:07
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Quidditch Fever


Author's Response: Thank you! And I've just posted another chapter. :)

Reviewer: cocomaloco
Date: 07/14/09 12:38
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Quidditch Fever

i loved it! just read the whole thing up until now - only one word for you.... UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE i really can't wait for the rest of the story :D well written :)

Author's Response: You read the whole thing? Wow. :D I'm so pleased you're enjoying it, and I'll try to update as soon as possible!

Reviewer: Bellatrix_LeStrangle
Date: 07/13/09 20:39
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Quidditch Fever

That was amazing =D

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Dreams_of_Draco
Date: 07/13/09 17:04
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Quidditch Fever

OH MY GOSH!!!! That was amazing this chapter had me on my seat the whole time. I absolutly loved it! I love the whole story, and can't ait to find out what happens next! Hurry up and post the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, dear! I'll try to get the next chapter up asap. ;)

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 07/13/09 3:12
Chapter: Chapter Nine: Quidditch Fever

YAY!! finally, a new chappie! I had like completly forgotten where this fic had left off. :P
and I think you're completely right. Griffendor and Slytherin are both known to be very proud, so this could defianetly be a problem.

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! :) I was worrying that I might have lost all my readers in my huge long hiatus there. I'm so glad you're enjoying it, and the next chapter will hopefully be up within a few weeks. Thanks! :D

Reviewer: HBPIA
Date: 05/06/09 3:43
Chapter: Chapter Eight: Romance and Revelations

hey i was wondering (not to be rude)
but why does it take long for you to update.
P>S i love your story

Author's Response: See below. ^_^

Reviewer: HBPIA
Date: 05/06/09 3:43
Chapter: Chapter Eight: Romance and Revelations

hey i was wondering (not to be rude)
but why does it take long for you to update.
P>S i love your story

Author's Response: Well you see, I do have a life outside of MNFF. I go to school, have a job, have a social life, and it's hard for me to find time to write. It's not my first priority, obviously, and I don't think I should have to explain why I haven't updated straightaway, especially since plenty of authors take longer than a few months to update. The next chapter is actually with my beta right now. And thank you. :)

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 03/16/09 16:42
Chapter: Chapter Eight: Romance and Revelations

still going great...
update! update!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to asap.

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 03/16/09 14:50
Chapter: Chapter Four: You're Dating Who?

well written. *thumbs up*

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 03/16/09 14:26
Chapter: Chapter Three: Hogsmeade Can Be More Interesting Than You’d Expect

aww...this is so sweet...definitely going down to my favourites.
and the way you wrote about George made me realize once again how much i miss Fred. every time i read the word 'George' felt like my heart is half-empty... :-(

Author's Response: Thanks once again! And I know ... poor Fred ... :(

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 03/16/09 13:57
Chapter: Chapter Two: Of Quidditch And A Certain Slytherin

that was so almost made me blush along with Rose! and the quidditch match...i wouldn't expect it to be that good in any fanfic :-)

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 03/16/09 12:49
Chapter: Chapter One: The Book That Changed Everything

wow...i just started reading it and really lovin it! great plot and well written, too. although it seemed to me that the potter-malfoy or malfoy-weasley rivalry would've mostly faded away by this time...still, what you wrote is not too unbelievable. your sense of humor is also very good, which didn't show that well in "Hermione, you obliviated..."

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm really glad you're enjoying this! I think the rivalry between them has faded, but it's still there a little. Some of them wouldn't be so easy to accept the Malfoys, I don't think. ;) Thanks again!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 02/15/09 19:55
Chapter: Chapter Three: Hogsmeade Can Be More Interesting Than You’d Expect

i really like it, although i think u should have made them be ffriends first

Author's Response: Thank you! And I was considering that, but I like how I've done it instead. :)

Reviewer: PheonixFlamesForever
Date: 02/08/09 11:04
Chapter: Chapter Two: Of Quidditch And A Certain Slytherin

Cheeky thing, Scorpius. I think he has Draco’s arrogance, which actually some people find quite attractive and I suppose that I’d be one of them. In the way you’ve portrayed him, he is by far his father’s son, if a little watered down version, a little more polite. But it’s still there, or maybe it’s just ‘the slytherin in him’. He is different to Draco though – Draco would never stick up for a ‘blood traitor’. I’ve read fics where Scorpius is a Slyth and completely against his family, despising them always. Here, Scorpius is still who he would be. Draco’s not likely to completely change, he still married a pure-blood and so obviously the views would still be there. He’s still explicably a Malfoy- but a different sort of Malfoy, and the views are diluted now. And I like it.

As much as I think the inclusion of the many characters sons and daughters is adorable, I think perhaps... well maybe it’s overdone a little bit. I’ve noted a ‘MacMillan’ and now a ‘Jordan’. I think it’s a little improbable that all of the former members of Hogwarts would start baby-making at a similar time. But I’m not denying it; it does make me smile when I see a familiar name.

Once again, I must applaud you on your effortless dialogue and conversation. Just a quick sort of nit-pick, ‘What’s up?’ . This seems a little American (or perhaps, Australian). I think a more appropriate sentence would be something like, ‘What’s the matter?’ or ‘Is anything wrong?’ It just doesn’t sound British enough, and it’s something I myself would only say in sarcasm or parody. I’d even suggest, ‘What’re you thinking?’ But that seems a little, romantic and I’m sure it’s not the effect you want to achieve in this conversation.

Nice chapter, I can tell you’re getting into the swing of this story now. I like the way that the relationship is growing, despite the fact that it’s not a relationship yet. (But I have reason to believe that it will become.) But it’s slow and it’s gradual and it’s really quite necessary. This isn’t just a normal relationship, it has obvious draw backs and things which you have to be cautious about. I think you’ve captured Rose beautifully here, with her conflicting inner thoughts. Nice work, JenJen.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like my Scorpius. I've been struggling with him throughout the whole fic - trying to make him a Slytherin and a Malfoy, but not too much like his father, and then not too different either. It's exhausting work, seriously. He gets too nice in places, but I'm very glad you like him. As for last names - I'm just lazy, honestly. I can't be bothered thinking up original ones. :P And, you don't say 'what's up?' Well, there you go. I should change that. Thank you so much again, my darling BumBum!

Reviewer: PheonixFlamesForever
Date: 02/08/09 11:03
Chapter: Chapter One: The Book That Changed Everything

A quidditch team made up of only Weasley’s and Potter’s? I don’t know if that would entirely work, dear. I’m aware that it’s a fairly large extended family but wouldn’t McGonagall (or whoever was the picker person) get accused of blatant favouritism? Additionally, can they all be good at quidditch, I’m sure there’d be some who were frankly, rubbish. And I know Ron was good and all that, but taking into account her mother’s particular skills on a broomstick... well, would it be entirely probable? Genetics probably don’t have a lot to do with this, but it was just a thought. Most of the Professors at Hogwarts are never mentioned as being married. Does George live with Angelina in the castle, in her quarters or do they live down in Hogsmeade? It’s certainly not a route I’ve seen explored before, but I find that note quite original. A one-shot could be born...

Your comedic piece is really quite charming, it really made me laugh. Okay, it was pretty simply done but the wording was quite nice. I didn’t see it coming, although that may not be the best of testaments. Albus looked up at her like she was mad. ‘I was reciting the ingredients,’ he said, confused. Perhaps the end, ‘Oh’ doesn’t even need to be added.

Would Slughorn never learn? I wouldn’t have thought Ron would let Rose go to something like that, he was obviously quite jealous that he was never invited and resented Hermione and Harry for being invited, although it was no fault of their own. But oh, the bravery on Scorpius’ part! I adore him here, when he sticks up for Rose, cutting his cousin into pieces. You’ve humanized him something lovely, and although he’s bad tempered and a bit curt, he’s still sweet. The little touch, ‘I know, I’ve read it’ . Well, I really like that. Where on earth would he get his hands on Muggle literature though? I can’t imagine there’d be a lot in the Malfoy Mansion’s library... Maybe the school library.

Through reading (a lot, if not all) of your stories, I know that you can write conversations well, and you really capture the family feel. A great example of this is in Presents and Prejudices , and all your conversations seem very natural, not like you’ve just implanted words in their mouths, but like they actually mean what they say. It’s good, my dear, it really is.

Author's Response: I fail at replying. Oops. Thank you so so much, though, dear! You're wonderful. I'm not worthy of all these lengthy reviews, seriously. Haha, I know the Quidditch team isn't very plausible. But it was written on a whim one day, and I couldn't resist ... if I rewrote it, I probably wouldn't have it entirely Weasleys and Potters, but it's too much work to go change it now. :P Thank you so much for all your comments on everything else - it means more to me when they're from you than anyone else. <3

Reviewer: witherwings16
Date: 01/18/09 20:59
Chapter: Chapter Seven: What Bludgers Can Do

i just read this story straight through...and i love it! =) all of the characters seem very real and I love Rose and Scorpius together! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Wow, all at once? That's amazing. I'm so very glad you like it, dear, and I'll try to update as soon as possible. :)

Reviewer: crystalphoenix
Date: 01/12/09 21:29
Chapter: Chapter Seven: What Bludgers Can Do

I really like your portrayal of Rose and Scorpius. They seem very real. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Reviewer: 11phoenixtears
Date: 01/11/09 12:57
Chapter: Chapter Seven: What Bludgers Can Do

nice cliffhanger . . . can't wait to see what happens!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: delirioustk
Date: 01/11/09 8:23
Chapter: Chapter Three: Hogsmeade Can Be More Interesting Than You’d Expect

very sweet!~ but moving on a bit too fast...i wouldn't mind reading more about scorpius - rose courtship

Author's Response: Thank you! And they do still have some lovely little courtship in the upcoming chapters, don't worry. ;)

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