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Name: chikako (Signed) · Date: 04/27/10 20:37 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
eh????! omg you updated...a month ago!!! how in the world did i not realize?! why the heck didnt i get an email saying this was updated?!! *pouts* yayay they got back together! XD ^_________^

Author's Response: Sorry the next chapter is taking me so long! I'm working on it. Thanks for continuing to read this-- I know it's taking forever. :)

Name: Phoebe_ (Signed) · Date: 04/23/10 14:18 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
I loved it. It's great they're talking again. :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much-- took long enough. :) Now to write the next part of the story.

Name: Minerva67 (Signed) · Date: 03/31/10 23:54 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
I've been away but so good to see that you updated.Good explanation for the puzzles in the previous chapters. The dialogue between Sev and Lily is so witty and dellightfull. Hope you can post more soon. What story are they going to come up with to explaln themselves---ILt can ge good!

Author's Response: Glad you liked the latest chapter-- I'm just sorry it's taking me so long to write the next one! Obviously it's something of a transition. Just wanted to let you know that I haven't abandoned the story-- they have a long way to go, obviously.

Name: dandy_like_a_lion (Signed) · Date: 03/27/10 2:24 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
Yay!!! More?

Author's Response: Working on it! Sorry-- I haven't abandoned the story, I'm just very busy in real life AND trying to figure out the trajectory of the next part of this. More soon, I hope.

Name: jkjim (Signed) · Date: 03/26/10 21:10 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
Great update. I'm glad to see you finally have them talking again, although they probably have a long way to go. Excellent explanation about the whole thing with the spilled butter beer. I didn't suspect that. One slight quibble regarding using the locks of hair to make the polyjuice. I would have guessed that using a hair from an 11 year old girl, would turn you into an 11 year old girl no matter how many years have past. Then again, there's nothing in the books that says that, and this is after all a fictional magical universe. Keep up the good work, but please update more often. I don't want to have to send my army of cupicabre after you.

Author's Response: No-- not the cupicabre! :) Good point about the 11-year-old girl thing-- the books aren't clear on that at all, so I thought there was some license there. And I'm glad you liked the plot twist with the Butterbeer-- obviously that was a bit confusing if you didn't know why he was acting like that. And finally, sorry for taking so long to update-- busier than I would like to be, and having a bit of writer's block in moving on to the next section, to be completely honest. Thanks for sticking with it.

Name: the-wizardess (Signed) · Date: 03/25/10 23:46 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
Eee new chapter, and they're talking again! :D Hooray!

Author's Response: Took long enough, didn't it? :) Oh well, no one can accuse me of waving a magic wand and making them friends again without some rather hard-won increases in maturity. :)

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 03/25/10 20:10 · For: Chapter 15- Tell Me Your Secrets, Ask Me Your Questions
Well, where are you going to go now, huh? All is forgiven! No, I'm not criticizing; this was a sweet chapter. Lily's sense of honor would definitely allow her to forgive Severus based on this new knowledge.

So, they're friends again. Now what? And when will we hear from Llwellyn again? There are still so many plot points to be resolved. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Great update. I was worried at first that it was going to relate only the last chapter from Severus's point of view. I'm glad it continued beyond that and progressed the story.

Author's Response: OK, I'm having writer's block-- I know where I want this to go, just having some trouble getting there. You're right-- there ARE so many plot points to be resolved. I'm working on it! Sorry it's taking so long, and thanks for sticking with it. :)

Name: jkjim (Signed) · Date: 03/09/10 22:00 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
Regarding Potter's maturation in canon, the cynical explanation is that Rowling didn't decide to make him a degenerate until later in the series, and had to reconcile the earlier depictions of him. If one wants to not be cynical and look for an explanation within canon, I do have some possible explanations.

1. Outside of Snape, and that one memory that Voldemort had of him proving that he possessed the level of stupidity that only a horribly inbred pureblooded wizard could have, most of the information we get about James Potter comes from sources that are biased in his favor. Namely, Lupin, Black, Dumbledore (extreme pro-Gryffindor/anti-Slytherin bias, although for some reason he decided to endanger all of the students he was supposed to protect in an effort redeem Malfoy, the most vile and worthless of all of the Slytherins in the books.), and Hagrid (anti-Slytherin).
2. Potter was one of the last people killed by Voldemort during the first war, and he was tied into the whole boy who lived legend, so he became something of a Martyr that most people didn't want to say anything bad about.
3. To a certain extent, the books are all spun towards Harry's point of view. Harry, wanted to believe that his parents were good people.

Author's Response: Sorry for the delay in replying! Any of those would be good reasons, from the cynical to the "she planned it this way for point-of-view verisimilitude" explanation. To Harry's credit, even he sees (in "Snape's Worst Memory") what a jerk his father was. Maybe in his own way, James is kind of a character foil to Harry-- what Harry could have become if he had a happy, privileged childhood in addition to his good looks and athletic skill and respectable amount of intelligence. Maybe Harry might have turned out that way if he had grown up as "the Boy who Lived" in the Wizarding world instead of as a neglected/ abused child among Muggles.

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 03/03/10 12:59 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
THis was an excellant climax. Very good twist on things. I liked how you portrayed Regulus in the beginning showing him to be obnoxious yet loyal to his brother.

The only flaw was that I would have expected Mary to be nearby, but I suppose that for plot reasons she couldn't be.

Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to reply- real life keeping me busy. I have always thought of Regulus like this. Good point about Mary-- I picture her studying with Severus here & there, unabashedly chatting with him in the halls, but off with the girls enough that she's unlikely to just hang out with him, something that Lily would have had in mind in trying to act like him and not herself. But asking Mary to check in to make sure everything was OK would have definitely made sense.

Name: jkjim (Signed) · Date: 03/02/10 22:40 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
I think you misinterpreted my previous review. When I was referring to the two sadists, I was talking about Potter and Black. I don't think people like that can ever "mature," and although they may learn enough self control to function in polite society, deep down, they will always be as depraved as they were in their youth.

Author's Response: You're right, I did-- thanks for the clarification. Who knows about James Potter, but there doesn't seem to be any indication that Sirius ever outgrew his adolescent tendencies. Obviously Black and Snape hate each other as adults, but there's a big difference between hating someone who used to bully you, and hating someone you used to bully as part of a tag-team. You probably have a point about people not outgrowing that kind of thing-- I can think of only two guys from my high school who were really obvious bullies, and these days, they're both in jail (surprise). I have always found the "James Potter was a bully who grew up in an astonishingly short period of time into a wonderful person" thing to be a really weak link in the canon.

Name: Minerva67 (Signed) · Date: 03/02/10 16:00 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
Great to see you have posted another chapter. Lily is finally coming to admit that he might be reforming. I am distrubed that she is so unconcerned that Severus coould be seriously injured or killed if he is not warned immediately, just sothat she can be "sure" that is is sincere enough to suit her. I must admitt hat I had to read it several times to begin to figure out why Severus would go down to the Care of Magical creatures grounds diguised as Llily---he certainly wouldn't want to have the Junior Death-Eaters supect Lily as the saboteur! He certainly takes steps to protect Geoff O. when he uses polyjuice before in Chap 12. Hope you explain the amiguities in Chap 13----and what happened to Llewelyn? The authorities must be clueless and gutless to stand by during the attacks on Muggle-borns. Much like the thirties during the rise of Hitler, Mussolini, Stalin, the Ku Klux Klan, and now other assorted dictators and terrorists. Post Chap 15 as soon as you can.

Author's Response: My underlying assumption (which may or may not be correct) is that the junior Death Eater types may harass or bully those who don't agree with them, but that they're not going to do serious harm to a half-blood who might actually serve a purpose-- they're at the stage where they are bullies, but not killers (yet). Think Draco before the assassination attempt on Dumbledore-- his activities with Crabbe and Goyle, stomping on Harry's nose, that kind of thing-- and that's what I was going for. The authorities at Hogwarts in Harry's time seem either oblivious to a lot that is going on, or willfully ignorant, and the students regularly take matters into their own hands, so I'm assuming that little has changed. Severus and Lily, just like Harry, are doing things by themselves rather than getting the faculty involved. As for him going down there disguised as Lily-- it's because he can't help himself. He has an excuse, and he's been wanting to do this for months. Plus, he is more concerned about the profs catching him than his roommates, because so far he has eluded the roommates pretty well. More about the Llewellyn plot in chapter 15, and I hope that clarifies it a bit-- of course, it's all clear in my head because I'm writing it, so it's useful to know what comes off as a bit fuzzy. :)

Name: dominiqueweasley (Signed) · Date: 03/01/10 22:52 · For: Chapter 1- The End of the World
I'm really liking this story... it's more plot based than romance based, which is a nice change. Plus I love Snape (of course).

Loved the latest chapter- Lily was well written and I liked your interpretation of Reg. Anyways, update soon please!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review-- glad you're enjoying it. I'm getting close to finishing chapter 15, but real life keeps intervening. :) As for plot vs. romance-- I guess I find that it takes a great deal of plot to bring Lily even remotely close to falling for him, and to make him into someone she could actually fall in love with. They're great characters (thanks to JKR)-- it's fun tweaking with their destiny a bit. :)

Name: jkjim (Signed) · Date: 03/01/10 22:04 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
For the most part, it was a good update, although I do think you could have transitioned a little better from the last chapter. I like how you included an encounter between the polyjuiced Lily, and the two sadists (they're too old to be considered bullies). I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this now that some of Severus' extracurricular activities are out in the open.

Author's Response: I know what you mean about the transition from the last chapter-- that's the problem with writing it from both of their points of view. It does switch a bit dramatically every now and again. And of course, I'm kind of covering a lot of ground, because even if they do manage to wind up together, I don't think that can happen overnight. I think Severus's problem with these guys is that he honestly used to be on their side, except for Lily. I'm sure there were people in Slytherin who weren't planning on joining the Death Eaters but who just stayed below the radar, but that's not an option for him. Plus, he's stuck living with them. Thanks for continuing to read and review it, by the way-- much appreciated.

Name: dandy_like_a_lion (Signed) · Date: 03/01/10 19:11 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
YAY!!! Your back! And with an excellent chapter, might I add. Hope there'll be more soon!
I especially love the whole senario of the chapter-long live beautiful irony!

Author's Response: Thanks so much-- I figured the two potions geniuses had to mess around with Polyjuice sometimes. Glad you enjoyed the irony of the whole thing. :) More to come soon-- I'm working on it-- sorry it's taking so long!

Name: chikako (Signed) · Date: 03/01/10 17:07 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
aawwww yay! lily finally talks to him again!! or well, she almost talks to him...hehe... hm...whatever happened to the DADA teacher? (i can't ever spell his name XD) i really really liked lily's thoughts of how if it was just the 2 of them, they were best friends but with everyone else, they threaten their friendship. *fingers crossed that they get together* update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I know-- it took fourteen chapters to get to that point. :) Fifteen, I guess, given that he's not exactly conscious in this one. Well, in the canon she never spoke to him again for the remaining 5 or 6 years of her life, so I'm guessing she really would require some persuading. Glad you're liking it, and thank you. :)

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 02/28/10 23:02 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
Oh, it was a Cinderella allusion, right? As Severus would say, I'm a dunderhead. Sorry.

Author's Response: You're definitely not a dunderhead-- I reread it, and I can see how that could be confusing. I edited it just now and tacked on a little extra to the Cinderella allusion to make it clear-- thanks for pointing that out. :)

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 02/28/10 23:01 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
Oh, I thought it said something about having until the clock struck midnight???

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out that this was confusing. :)

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 02/28/10 22:07 · For: Chapter 14- Damsel in Distress
Yay! An update to one of my favorite stories! I was thinking of your story just a few days ago and wondering howit was progressing. I was so happy to see the update notice in my inbox. One nitpick, though: Polyjuice Potion lasts only an hour, not a full day.

I love Mary's line about how the two are eejits always getting her in trouble and why they must be friends. And your portrayal of Sirius and Regulus's relationship feels just right.

Author's Response: But wait, it did last only an hour! :) Now I have to explain. :) I packed a lot into that hour, but my idea of it was: He hears about the plot when his roommates return in the early morning, he figures he needs to go in disguise to undo the damage his roommates have done, Lily (inadvertently tipped off by Regulus the night before) gets up early and follows him, he heads off to an unused classroom to transfigure and sneaks out because he suspects he's being followed, she loses him but Mary sees him (as Lily) heading out of the building, they go get Lily's stash of Polyjuice and (yep) one hair from the "best friends" token thing they did when they were kids (chapter 3!), and Lily heads out and looks around the grounds, encounters Avery, etc.-- arriving back at the castle in time for breakfast to let out. Just a very busy hour in the morning. :) The Polyjuice lasts only long enough for her to get him to the Hospital wing and confess to Madame Pomfrey, which is why she's in such a big hurry to get past Potter and Black-- she has a good idea of about when he took it, since she was following him, and she knows they're down to mere minutes. Does that make sense? Glad you liked the Sirius and Regulus relationship-- that's just always how I pictured them. OK, now to get cracking on chapter 15-- back to Severus's POV.

Name: Charles Sinclair (Signed) · Date: 02/18/10 19:27 · For: Chapter 13- Half Empty
Both characters points of view contained in a single chapter. A significant structural moment.

I am utterly baffled at the Mary/Severus interlude. Is Lily being obsessively paranoid? A streak of odd extremism seems to be shared.

Author's Response: Yes, I included both of them on purpose. :) Good pick-up there. As for the Mary/Severus interlude-- Lily has (in my take on it, anyway) fancied him off and on for years, and she only knows part of the story, and she's mad at herself that all he seems to have to do to get her attention is pay attention to her friend and win a showdown with another guy. To be explained soon. Really. I know it's a bit weird.

Name: jkjim (Signed) · Date: 01/11/10 17:04 · For: Chapter 13- Half Empty
Great update, I found the love potion theory very amusing. I can't wait to see where you take this. I also like how you are emphasizing how taking a stand has forced Snape to be much more wary of his roommates.

Author's Response: Obviously you've caught on to the fact that Lily's POV is incomplete. :) And I thought that, realistically, he had to have a hard time with his roommates any time he sided with Lily. I can't imagine that every year in Slytherin was like this-- presumably some of them were ambitious in other ways, trying to prove themselves or succeed in some field or make money or rise in society or whatever-- but we know he had such friends from the canon, so I figured that those would be his roommates. By the way, I just submitted Ch. 14, finally-- sorry about the delay!

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