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Name: mirimos (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 22:37 · For: A Scream, a Shriek, and a Bellow.
You've only made a few mistakes with your surroundings/characters *if you're following JK*

It's a good start but why did harry's uncle attack him, why did he spaz out on h/r, whyyyyy oh why would they join the Order when they have to find horcruxes---does harry not realise he said horcruxes twice when he tried to shut Ron up from saying so?
basically just explain some things better and include more emotion in the story. Some parts go by a bit quickly ex. Harry crying for Siriius when he was talking to hermione. ..he sounds really unstable :P

Gj/update soon! =) can't wait for some h/g

Name: magyk001 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 18:23 · For: A Scream, a Shriek, and a Bellow.
Good Chapter! This Story has promise, you should update it soon. I think you have good idea's.

Name: mesalike (Signed) · Date: 04/09/08 10:28 · For: A Scream, a Shriek, and a Bellow.
amazin, specially for a 13 year old. Very good can't wait for the next chapter:)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review :D. But I'm not 13 anymore :L I forgot to edit that. I'm fourteen now.

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