I think you did a magnificent job taking characters that are normally in the background and putting them in the foreground with personalities that adhere to canon. Great job!!
Aww, that was quite sweet. Shame he died in DH really, they might have been happy.
Reading this made me think of the hippos dancing in Fantasia, you never expect such large and ponderous animals to step so far out of character, and dance.
I liked the details that you inserted that made me see these people, Millicent's rough hands, Vince's attempts to manipulate the situation, and his acceptance when he was only partially successful.
I think the ending was particularly effective. That these two people let themselves be disenchanted and become human.
gud job hav neva read dis pairing before n i kinda liked it dis reminded me of shrek
I thought it was good. The last paragraph reminded me of Shrek and I love Shrek!