Well written first chapter! Hope that you update soon!
i think you did quite a good job capturing the emotional pain harry would have gone through after the battle. can't wait for the next chapter
Great Start!!! Update Soon!!
not bad nice cliffhanger
Really great start! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Fi :-)
Brilliant please update soon!!!!
good story! the next chapter should be interesting.
I LOVE IT!!
I am very intrigued and can't wait to read the rest. Great writing, I thought there were no flaws. This one is going to my faves!
great first chapter, looking forward to the next one!
I really liked it. Please keep up the work. I want to see what happens next!
just how i imagined it. keep up the good work, and the chapters. cheers !
I like it so far. It's a good first chapter. You might work on the dialogue a bit. The main thing that popped out at me was Ginny's use of "oh gosh!" I can count the number of times I've heard someone use the word gosh, for something other than comedic effect, on the fingers of one hand. Any other time, the person was exceedingly prudish, and the words they chose to use in place of expletives were jarring and sounded out of place. There is nothing with keeping your language clean, ut consider whether or not the character you are writing would use that word or phrase. If a character speaks in a manner that is out of character for them, it stands out like a sore thumb. I'm far from perfect in this area, and if dialogue that doesn't sound quite right is the worst a reviewer can say about your work, then that's pretty good. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.
good story! update soon!