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Reviews For A New Beginning

Name: NettleSnitch194 (Signed) · Date: 10/24/11 13:47 · For: The night after
Well written first chapter! Hope that you update soon!

Name: lightningscarsarehott1123 (Signed) · Date: 11/07/10 10:26 · For: The night after
i think you did quite a good job capturing the emotional pain harry would have gone through after the battle. can't wait for the next chapter

Name: Redneck Rider (Signed) · Date: 06/10/09 17:36 · For: The night after
Great Start!!! Update Soon!!

Name: jayinski (Signed) · Date: 11/24/08 16:54 · For: The night after
not bad nice cliffhanger

Name: Firoy (Signed) · Date: 08/31/08 7:04 · For: The night after
Really great start! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Fi :-)

Name: Superstar96 (Signed) · Date: 07/07/08 11:45 · For: The night after
Brilliant please update soon!!!!

Name: magyk001 (Signed) · Date: 07/02/08 13:49 · For: The night after
good story! the next chapter should be interesting.

Name: parakeetsrox (Signed) · Date: 06/01/08 13:48 · For: The night after

Name: DRFHARRY (Signed) · Date: 05/21/08 23:57 · For: The night after
I am very intrigued and can't wait to read the rest. Great writing, I thought there were no flaws. This one is going to my faves!

Name: ilovesnape (Signed) · Date: 05/08/08 3:42 · For: The night after
great first chapter, looking forward to the next one!

Name: keller (Signed) · Date: 04/29/08 11:31 · For: The night after
I really liked it. Please keep up the work. I want to see what happens next!

Name: marauderteddylupin (Signed) · Date: 04/25/08 21:58 · For: The night after
just how i imagined it. keep up the good work, and the chapters. cheers !

Name: jediprankster (Signed) · Date: 04/19/08 2:48 · For: The night after
I like it so far. It's a good first chapter. You might work on the dialogue a bit. The main thing that popped out at me was Ginny's use of "oh gosh!" I can count the number of times I've heard someone use the word gosh, for something other than comedic effect, on the fingers of one hand. Any other time, the person was exceedingly prudish, and the words they chose to use in place of expletives were jarring and sounded out of place. There is nothing with keeping your language clean, ut consider whether or not the character you are writing would use that word or phrase. If a character speaks in a manner that is out of character for them, it stands out like a sore thumb. I'm far from perfect in this area, and if dialogue that doesn't sound quite right is the worst a reviewer can say about your work, then that's pretty good. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

Name: JustLikeHermione77 (Signed) · Date: 04/18/08 17:42 · For: The night after
good story! update soon!

Name: Sunny_Rainbow (Signed) · Date: 04/18/08 17:07 · For: The night after
Pretty good!

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