Reviews For A New Beginning
Reviewer: NettleSnitch194
Date: 10/24/11 13:47
Chapter: The night after

Well written first chapter! Hope that you update soon!

Reviewer: lightningscarsarehott1123
Date: 11/07/10 10:26
Chapter: The night after

i think you did quite a good job capturing the emotional pain harry would have gone through after the battle. can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: Redneck Rider
Date: 06/10/09 17:36
Chapter: The night after

Great Start!!! Update Soon!!

Reviewer: jayinski
Date: 11/24/08 16:54
Chapter: The night after

not bad nice cliffhanger

Reviewer: Firoy
Date: 08/31/08 7:04
Chapter: The night after

Really great start! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Fi :-)

Reviewer: Superstar96
Date: 07/07/08 11:45
Chapter: The night after

Brilliant please update soon!!!!

Reviewer: magyk001
Date: 07/02/08 13:49
Chapter: The night after

good story! the next chapter should be interesting.

Reviewer: parakeetsrox
Date: 06/01/08 13:48
Chapter: The night after

I LOVE IT!!

Reviewer: DRFHARRY
Date: 05/21/08 23:57
Chapter: The night after

I am very intrigued and can't wait to read the rest. Great writing, I thought there were no flaws. This one is going to my faves!

Reviewer: ilovesnape
Date: 05/08/08 3:42
Chapter: The night after

great first chapter, looking forward to the next one!

Reviewer: keller
Date: 04/29/08 11:31
Chapter: The night after

I really liked it. Please keep up the work. I want to see what happens next!

Reviewer: marauderteddylupin
Date: 04/25/08 21:58
Chapter: The night after

just how i imagined it. keep up the good work, and the chapters. cheers !

Reviewer: jediprankster
Date: 04/19/08 2:48
Chapter: The night after

I like it so far. It's a good first chapter. You might work on the dialogue a bit. The main thing that popped out at me was Ginny's use of "oh gosh!" I can count the number of times I've heard someone use the word gosh, for something other than comedic effect, on the fingers of one hand. Any other time, the person was exceedingly prudish, and the words they chose to use in place of expletives were jarring and sounded out of place. There is nothing with keeping your language clean, ut consider whether or not the character you are writing would use that word or phrase. If a character speaks in a manner that is out of character for them, it stands out like a sore thumb. I'm far from perfect in this area, and if dialogue that doesn't sound quite right is the worst a reviewer can say about your work, then that's pretty good. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 04/18/08 17:42
Chapter: The night after

good story! update soon!

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 04/18/08 17:07
Chapter: The night after

Pretty good!

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