You desperately need to put the parent's dialogs in italics, or have some other way to differentiate it from what is going on in little Harry's head.

I had to read that one line twice to really catch the gist of it. Just a better separation between the two point of views would push this over the top into being one of my favorites!

So please consider that edit, I know it will help you sell the story to the reader just that one little bit more clearly.

Good luck!

SOPH! *tacklehugsquishglomplove*

Aww, I'm so touched that you decided to dedicate this to me! You're so sweet, my love. As always, love the story, and please keep up the great work!

--Victoria