Reviewer: chickonsticks
Date: 05/04/08 17:03
Chapter: Chapter Six: Symbols and Lies

I was going to wonder if she was to be going home for the holidays, but it sounds like not. Can't wait

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 05/01/08 12:58
Chapter: Chapter Five: A Warning Song

I really like the sorting hat chapters in fics, it never ceases to amaze me how many variations there are of the sorting hat's song, and they're all brilliant. I'm a little worried for the students who don't speak English, will they be taught a translation charm to help them? The next chapter sounds scarey, especially for Zippie, can't wait for the update.

Reviewer: messrs_inc
Date: 05/01/08 8:02
Chapter: Chapter Two: Rabbi Herzl's Advice

I've just started reading this story, and I love it! It's so much fun seeing all of these mentions to Judaism and Jewish Heritage in a HP fanfic. Additionally, as today happens to be Holocaust Rememberance Day on the hebrew calendar, my finding this story now is interesting timing. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more!

Reviewer: mock_turtle
Date: 05/01/08 2:02
Chapter: Chapter Five: A Warning Song

oh, I love this. it gives me a warm fuzzy feeling. excitement!

Reviewer: chickonsticks
Date: 04/30/08 21:42
Chapter: Chapter Five: A Warning Song

I really love the song, it speaks great truths for the time.

Reviewer: dobbylover
Date: 04/30/08 19:45
Chapter: Chapter Five: A Warning Song

Once again, a great chapter-specifically the sorting hat song! I really enjoyed that. The excerpt from the next chapter makes me nervous and curious...will she ever tell her friends of her Jewish background?

Reviewer: padfoot0302
Date: 04/30/08 17:49
Chapter: Chapter Five: A Warning Song

This is an exellent story. I too am Jewish but I am reform. From what my Orthadox Jewish friends tell me this refelts Orthadox Jewish life very well.

Author's Response: I'm glad you're getting the Orthadox feel from my story. It's been really hard to do so because I'm reform too, so I have to look a lot of things up before I write. Still, it's worth it if my readers can sense the level of Tzipporah's Jewishness, which is what I'm going for.

Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 04/27/08 20:42
Chapter: Prologue

After reading the last chapter you submitted, I realized that the only smart thing to do would be to read your story from the beginning. And I'm so glad I have.

This prologue was developed so well and have brought up many questions which I'm sure your story will address in later chapters.

A particular part of your story that I thought was very well done was Avigail's revelation of her magic and Eliezer's reaction. Now usually, I would've thought that Eliezer's reaction to such a big secret was much too unbelievable. But here, you had, from start to finish, focused on Avigail's dying, so much so that even I as a reader had blown off Avigail's dying wish as inconsequential. That isn't to say no one cared about her dying - on the contrary, you had led us to focus so much on her dying that she could've screamed out anything without really making a dent on our emotional attachment to her. Well done.

There isn't much I can say about improvements yet. But I am looking forward to seeing Eliezer's reaction to Tzipporah's magical abilities.

Reviewer: indigo_mouse
Date: 04/26/08 10:09
Chapter: Prologue

I'm coming back in a little bit to read the rest of the story, but I couldn't resist telling you how intriguing this is!

My brother is a Rabbi, and a Harry Potter fan. If you have any questions he might be able to help with, why don't you give me a PM from the Beta Boards? Even better, I'll send him the story link.

Author's Response: Cool, thanks for the offer! I'm trying to keep this story pretty simple, but if I have any questions I'll definitely keep you in mind.

Reviewer: dobbylover
Date: 04/22/08 1:48
Chapter: Chapter Four: Aboard the Hogwarts Express

i do love this story!!
so far, it's truly brilliant. i did think it was a bit much to take on shomer negiah :) i definitely understand. even the rest of the laws will probably prove hard to fit into the world of harry potter but i cant wait to see how you do it!

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 04/21/08 22:58
Chapter: Chapter Four: Aboard the Hogwarts Express

I like the introduction of Edward. That seems promising. The song sounds really interesting too.

Reviewer: mock_turtle
Date: 04/21/08 19:53
Chapter: Chapter Four: Aboard the Hogwarts Express

you've given me chills. I am so excited to hear what other historical surprises you have in store :) this is great. I have to admit, I am very pleased that you have the irish/english conflict displayed here. it feels like you've researched this!

Author's Response: The Irish/English conflict is just one of many I'll be slipping in...finally, some practical use for all the things I've learned in AP European History this year!

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 04/21/08 19:20
Chapter: Chapter Four: Aboard the Hogwarts Express

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, the sorting hat song sounds great! Now, could this Edward Potter be Harry's Grandfather? And could Zippie (I just love that) be his Grandmother? Sorry, I know that's probably not the point of the fic. Anyway, it's brilliant how you put history in there too, and how some students already have things to separate them before even getting to Hogwarts. It wakes a nice change from the pureblood muggleborn argument. As someone who gets very homesick and despises change, I empathise with Zippie, I really hope that once she sees Hogwarts the magic will happen and make it feel like a second home.

Author's Response: Hehe, I suppose Edward and Tzipporah could be Harry's grandparents - but for that to happen they'd have to end up together. We'll see what happens! rnI'm so glad you can relate to Tzipporah and her problems. The hardest part of this fic has been making my characters relatable; after all, very few of my readers are likely to be Jewish witches heading off to schools of magic.

Reviewer: Arwynn
Date: 04/07/08 21:02
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

You are a very gifted writer. Not only do you just have a way with words, you also braved to tactfully mix two extremes that people rarely dare to put together - Harry Potter and religion.

This story is awesome! Please update!!!

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 04/05/08 20:51
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

Oh no, update update! I want to see what she thinks of Hogwarts!

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 04/01/08 12:21
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

enjoyable story. good detail

Reviewer: finchley
Date: 04/01/08 7:41
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

I only recently discovered mugglenet, and now, here is this gem of a story! I'm not Jewish, but have always been fascinated with the traditions, history, and stories. I'm looking forward to reading more - you're painting a wonderfully rich picture with such warm, believable characters!

Reviewer: songbreese
Date: 03/31/08 18:30
Chapter: Chapter One: The Letter

I'm in love with your story so far. It's really good. Keep going!
Just a nitpicky note:
synogogues during this time period were mostly segregated with women and children sitting apart from the men. It might not be a problem since Tzipporah's only 11, though.
I'm not telling you to change it, just pointing it out in case you were unaware. Your story's still awsome, and I'm sure I'm one of only a handful of people that would know that, much less point it out, I'm just kind of a history nerd like that.

Reviewer: peekaboo317
Date: 03/30/08 20:30
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

lovin' the Night reference.
cool story, too.

Reviewer: mock_turtle
Date: 03/30/08 18:51
Chapter: Chapter Three: Dinner with Dumbledore

two questions: what language is dumbledore speaking to the steins in? and why weren't they surprised about how fast dumbledore got to their house? I would assume that with the coming war, they (or at least tzipporah) would have expected travel to be more difficult/slower. i mean, this is the 1930s, isn't it?

Author's Response: Dumbledore converses with the Steins in English (you'll find out in the next chapter that they are both fluent). As for the transportation question, I hadn't really thought about it, but I guess the Steins would assume that Dumbledore could travel magically. I mean, they know he's a wizard, so even if they have no idea how he moves so fast, they probably wouldn't question it. Sorry if that doesn't sound so realistic; I honestly never considered the time frame.

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