Reviews For Timing
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 06/07/08 20:28
Chapter: Chapter 2

Oh, Leah, this was truly a wonderful fic. You have an amazingly brilliant mind, you know that? The things you can come up with, given and not given prompts.

I love your characterization of all parts. Everything flowed and was lovely to read. Great job! It seems that Nicole will be having some competition for her fangirl. :D No worries, there's enough of me to share between the two. Again, you're brilliant.

Hugs,
Haylee

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 05/10/08 20:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a wonderful start to a story, and an amazing start to a Guantlet entry, dear. I'm very glad that you are my partner for Round Six! ;)

I think that you have a wonderful way with words that not only draws the reader into your stories, but also allows the words to flow seamlessly onto the page. Your style is unique and different that I am used to reading and I really rather adore it.

I love, love, love your characterization of Blaise. I think he is a very misjudged character, and you portray him very well. I like his bond with his mother as well, as it is very different from the stereotypical view we so often find in fanfiction.

I do have one small nitpick for this chapter. There is one instance in which you have the same line written twice, back to back, in two different paragraphs.

. . . He turned around, wand at the ready, not sure what to expect next.

He turned around, wand at the ready, not sure what to expect next, when the room went dark . . .


Amazing job, my dear, I can’t wait to read the rest of this wonderful fic!

-Haylee

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